Chapter 1
It was the early weeks of winter, November to be exact. And it was cold to say the least. In fact, the pegasi weather team had planned it to be one of the harshest winters Equestria had seen in recent years, easily surpassing last year’s by a landslide.
A buttercup yellow pegasus laid upon white sheets on a simple white mattress, which rested on a white metal bed in a white walled room. Virtually everything in the hospital room she occupied was some shade of white, save for the pale blue curtains and a few paintings displaying flowers or dull patterns.
As soon as Fluttershy had been scrambled into the room she was stripped of her winter attire and placed into a grey toned, blue checkered gown. Even though she had a large bump to compensate, the smallest size that they owned was still too large. The nurses also hadn’t even taken the time to fasten the ties at the back, leaving her easily exposed. At first this made her quite frankly uncomfortable and awkward due to her shy demeanor.
Her water had long broken, but her legs were still damp, adding to the discomfort and irritation. She couldn’t linger on the thought, though, as the doctor requested her to push.
Even though she had had eleven months of preparation for the big day, the due date, she couldn’t feel any more unprepared. It felt too rushed, too sudden, and it was happening much too quickly for her liking. The time just didn’t feel right and it made her feel overwhelmed to say the least.
Fluttershy gasped for air after yet another push. Taking his cue, Discord frantically put the oxygen mask over her muzzle. By the shaking of Discord’s paw -no- his entire patchwork body, and the sweat piling up on his brow, anypony would think he was having the foal himself. He tried to calm himself using the breathing techniques that Fluttershy was taught from one of the pregnancy checkups.
Saying Discord was nervous is an understatement. He was absolutely hysterical.
The pegasus had been pushing for roughly forty minutes, though to her it had felt longer than the whole eleven months that she had been pregnant, and she was beginning to really feel the struggle. She was finding it harder to gather her breath after every push, and her entire body was coated in beads of sweat.
Another contraction followed by another attempted push had passed and Fluttershy had finally reached her limit. Grimacing from the pain, Fluttershy leaned back into her pillow and grew still as she closed her eyes. Taking a deep breath and letting it out, she opened her eyes and tears rolled down her cheeks as she gazed up at Discord.
Fluttershy took a shallow breath. “Discord, I-I can’t do it.”
All the wild mood swings, strange and obscure cravings, increased appetite, nausea, lack of energy, and swollen hooves had led up to this very day… and she couldn’t do it.
“W-what are you talking about? Of course you can do it my dear,” Discord tried his best to restrain his panicking manner to sound calm for her sake, whilst simultaneously holding in the pain of how tightly Fluttershy was gripping onto his paw. Sweet Celestia did she have a tight grip.
“I-I-” she hiccuped, “-really can’t. It’s t-too much,” tears had started freely flowing down her cheeks and she turned her gaze to look at the doctor.
Doctor Horse watched his patient with growing concern. Fluttershy had steadily grown weaker as the birth progressed, and the defeated look on her face was not a good sign. Doctor Horse pulled himself off of the floor at the end of the bed and looked back and forth between the soon-to-be-parents. “It has become quite clear that Miss Fluttershy hasn’t got the energy to continue giving birth to her foal naturally.”
“Hey now wait there a second. Fluttershy has more than enough energy, how dare you even proclaim such a thing!---
Doctor Horse kept a straight, neutral expression. He had clearly dealt with more than a handful of stubborn ponies in his career.
“I suggest you calm down before-”
“Before what ay!? What could you possibly do!?” Discord cut in. “Plus who in Equestria do you think you are talking to? If you haven’t already noticed, I am Discord! The Lord of Chaos! The very being who turned this pathetic town you call home into the capital of chaos! I could destroy you and everything you love in a single snap-”
“I SAY ARE YOU DONE MR. DISCORD BECAUSE WE HAVE PRESSING MATTERS TO DISCUSS!”
For a short moment the pair glared daggers at each other, neither saying another word. Their chests rose and lowered in large motions as they collected themselves and the red hot anger in their faces began to fade away.
After adjusting his tie, the doctor cleared his throat. “Right,” he said and then turned to look at Fluttershy, who had clamped her eyes firmly shut throughout the dispute (Discord however, continued to keep his gaze firmly on his opponent). “As I was saying, due to the circumstances it has become clear that Miss Fluttershy will not be able to give birth to her foal naturally. She has been in labour for just over forty minutes, which is beginning to become dangerous and potentially life threatening for the foal.” He heard a whimper from Fluttershy at his statement. “Now, this only leaves us with one viable option. For the safety of both foal and mother, Miss Fluttershy is to have an emergency cesarean.”
He paused to let the information sink in for them before continuing.
“I will need to go and collect our team of doctors, and have the nurses prepare the operating theatre. I will be back in a matter of moments so please stay here and I will be back to collect you.”
Doctor Horse turned hoof to leave the room before Discord spoke up. “And pray tell, what is that,” Discord said with resentment.
The doctor looked him straight in the eye before simply stating in a nonchalant way, “We’re going to cut your wife open so that we can try to save both your wife and your foal.”
“C-cut-” Was all Discord could sputter out before his vision went black and he collapsed to the floor.
Discord’s eyes flickered open, and the bright white lights on the hospital room’s ceiling temporarily blinded him before he managed to adjust his vision. He instantly felt an extremely sore pang in the back of his head and slowly lifted up his paw to rub it. It made him wince and grunt an incoherent word of displeasure as the pain rushed through. Retracting his paw, he lifted himself off of the hard tiled floor and looked down to where he had been laying. There was a rather large dent in the wooden side table, the dents shape fitting perfectly with the back of his head. He grimaced again as the pain continued to throb in the back of his skull.
He looked around the room and it was in that instant that memories flooded back to him and he remembered exactly where he was, what happened, and why.
“Fluttershy I-” as soon as his eyes locked with the bed in the middle of the room his heart sunk to the tips of his feet. She wasn’t there.
He clambered to the room’s door and threw it open. The accidental force launched it off of its hinges and slammed it violently into the wall opposite. He could only sheepishly grin at a nurse down the hall who had witnessed it; he didn’t have time for apologies.
‘Oh dear Celestia please don’t let her be in there on her own!’ Discord had now taken to his wings and continued his panicked search throughout the hospital’s corridors. He had no idea where he was going, he was just praying that fate and luck will lead him to where he needed to be. By her side. It’s a funny thing fate, it’s either in your favour or not. Discord would never let himself believe that there was such a thing that existed any other day, but today wasn’t just any other day. And in just that moment of time, for in fact the first time ever, he hoped that there was such thing, and that that thing was on his side. Each of the long stretched halls were the same exact replica of the one he just went through. They were all completely white and empty from top to bottom, save for a few stray blue chairs and wheelchairs scattered around. As well as on occasion there was some old shriveled up stallion offering cough drops to anyone who passed him.
Discord groaned as his search still had not shown any results. “Why are there so many of these blasted things!” he shouted, scaring and almost giving a heart attack to a patient walking by.
He had just passed yet another corridor, after what had to have been at least the twelfth so far as he abruptly stopped mid flight and dug his heels into the marble floor. From the speed at which he had been going and the pressure that he had forced his feet into the floor, he found himself with his body halfway underground and a trail of dust, dirt, and rubble behind him. ‘Was that?’
A pink tuft of a tail slipped around the corner at the end of the hall.
With only a snap of his talons, he was right beside her.
Discord had to catch her by the shoulders as she yelped and jumped into the air in surprise. He mentally kicked himself over what a stupid idea that was.
“Fluttershy, what in Equestria is happening? Where are you going?”
Fluttershy freed herself from his grip and landed back onto the ground. She tried to hide a streak of pain in her stomach as she did so. She gently rubbed the bulge in her belly in a circular motion in an attempt to sooth it.
She didn’t reply to Discord, nor did she make any kind of eye contact. She only reached to hold her nightgown at the back where the gap was, clearly to cover herself, and continued her limping walk down the hall.
Discord could only stare at her with mixed emotions as the gap between them slowly grew.
“D-did I miss something? Has the the doctor said anything?” his voice was filling up with concern and worry.
The reply he received was yet again silence, other than arrhythmic hoofsteps echoing off of the walls.
By now she was almost at the end of the corridor and about to turn another corner. He could clearly see her finding it harder and more difficult to keep her pace as she walked on. Her legs looked like they would buckle at any given moment.
“What about the.. c-c-cesarean?” he stuttered out, still afraid of his newly learnt word.
His answer was made clear when the yellow pegasus flinched. It wasn’t even a subtle flinch, no, it was a flinch you could clearly see a mile off. She stopped in her tracks. The feathers on her wings ruffled up and her entire body tensed up as all of her fur stood on it’s ends.
Discord’s ears flopped back as he started to hear soft whimpers. In the silence of the empty hospital he could even hear the sound of the heavy tear drops colliding with the floor.
“Fluttershy,” he began softly, lifting off of his feet and drifting slowly over to where she stood.
Discord had only just closed the gap between them halfway when Fluttershy suddenly spun hastily around and thrusted her hoof in Discords direction. “No! D-don’t come near me!” As well as a deep, almost forced, scowl, her face was bright red and all around her teal eyes were puffy as the tears carried on falling down her face and to the floor like a waterfall.
He stopped and slowly landed to the ground with a small thud.
The site of his dearly beloved in such a state stabbed Discord in the heart and tore it to shreds. She looked so tired and exhausted, both physically and mentally. All he wanted to do was to wrap her up tightly into his arms and tell her that everything was going to be okay. But no matter how much he wanted to he just couldn’t, she wanted him to keep his distance and he had to respect that.
Though there were many, this wasn’t like any other time that she had cried. She hadn’t lost her most loved sunhat, Angel hadn’t been missing for weeks after a fight about a misunderstanding, she hadn’t overslept and is late to feed all of the animals she cares for, and she hadn’t accidentally scared off an extremely rare breed of bird which she had been waiting her entire life to encounter. No, it wasn’t even remotely like one of those times. She was afraid. Afraid of bringing a new life into a world.
Fluttershy removed her hoof from the air and brought it back to her gown, making sure the gap in the fabric was once again closed.
They stood there staring at each other for a few moments, neither moving a muscle, both trapped in their own thoughts.
But the silence was suddenly broken when Fluttershy screamed in pain as she dropped to the floor and clutched at her stomach with both hooves.
Ignoring what she had told him previously Discord promptly landed at her side and wrapped an arm around her. “Fluttershy, this is ridiculous, we have to get you to the operating room!”
She screamed again, only this time it was louder and she curled further into a ball on the floor.
“Fluttershy!”
Fluttershy turned to yank Discords arm off of her and bat him away, “No! I can’t!” she tried to shout through clenched teeth.
“Listen to me! You can’t just sit here like this forever. We need to get you help,” he tried to at least place his paw on her shoulder, only for her to push it away again.
‘Where are these blasted nurses in this place!’
“You… you don’t understand!” Her grip around her belly tightened yet again as the stabbing sensation carried on. A puddle of tears were gradually growing in size on the floor in front of her hunched over body.
“What is there to understand Fluttershy!? You’re having a foal! And you can’t just run away from it.”
“No! No, Discord! You don’t understand! T-they’re going to cut me open!” Discord admittedly had to compose himself at that statement, fainting wasn’t exactly going to help the situation, “I’ve r-read through enough pregnancy books to know how those things work.” She had to pause as another pain shot through her and she yelped before taking a minute to control her breathing. By now sweat was layered thickly over her forehead and she was panting dryly.
“They strap you to a table w-with so many other ponies surrounding you and injecting you with so many needles and medication. Do you even know all of the risks?”
“Do you know and understand how many ponies and their foals have… have d-died from this?” She glanced up at Discord, through glazed eyes she could only just about see his expression. He looked so crushed by what she just said, like his entire world had crumbled to the ground. The solemn expression was then followed by his own tears joining Fluttershy’s on the floor.
At any other time Fluttershy would of brought her beloved into the warmest and tightest hug she could muster and apologised over and over again until Celestia’s sun broke past the horizon for making him cry. But she was just so scared and in so much agony that she couldn’t do anything at all no matter how much she wanted to.
“The foal is safe… safe inside here.” Fluttershy’s mouth changed from a grimace of pain to a saddened frown as she cradled her large belly with her hooves.“The world isn’t kind. What if...what if I’m not good enough?...” sobbing, Fluttershy pressed her face up against Discord’s chest. “What if this is the most caring that the foal will ever receive?”
Stunned, Discord blinked twice and looked down at the top of Fluttershy’s head. “What...do you mean, Fluttershy?”
“What if I’m no good as a mother and our foal suffers because of me!” Fluttershy’s sobbing grew louder, and it was then that her entire body broke down and she finally collapsed into Discord’s chest, gripping to his fur as if she had no other choice. “Right now it’s safe inside my stomach a-and that’s where it should stay.” Fluttershy’s sobbing had lessened, and she grew very quiet.
“What if the foal and I die during the operation...what would you do? I can’t.. I can’t leave you on your own.”
Discord repositioned himself carefully and slowly so that he could place his wife onto his lap and hold her as close as he possibly could. They clung to each other for support, the feeling of their chests rising and falling against each other soothing them.
After a short moment Discord smudged away his tears. “My dear sweet, sweet Fluttershy,” he began, “You’ve read one too many books and heard Twilight rant on and on about her concerns with her fancy facts and big numbers too many times. Please remind me to give her a shoe that cannot be removed and yells ‘neener neener’ each time she takes a step when we return home,” he tried his current best to lighten the mood, but regretted it instantly as it showed no effects whatsoever. He so desperately wanted to hear that beautiful little giggle of hers, the one that told him that he was a complete dork, but at the same time assured him that everything was going to be okay. But now’s not the time.
Discord closed his eyes, allowing a single tear that had built up to escape, before he leaned down and tenderly kissed Fluttershy on the top of her head. He lingered for a second and then returned to his former position.
“Now, I may not know much about how the whole procedure works, but from the depths of my soul and with all my heart I promise you that absolutely everything is going to be okay.”
“N-no it won’t,” Fluttershy mumbled between hiccups into his chest, tears matting his brown fur.
Discord wasn’t sure whether he was taken aback or expecting her answer at all. Even after all those years and all the things that they had been through together, he still struggled to understand so many things about her, both trivial and big.
“Fluttershy dear,” soothed Discord as he tenderly stroked Fluttershy’s mane, “medical magic has greatly improved over the last thousand years. Difficult births at that time often ended in tragedy. It wasn’t uncommon for one out of eight families to lose somepony during birth. How many ponies do you know of in Ponyville that has lost a loved one because of a difficult birth?” Discord bent down and kissed Fluttershy’s forehead, and then kissed the top of her muzzle. “I’m willing to wager that there are very few, if any at all. The chances that things will go badly are much less than they were a long time ago,” said Discord as he hugged Fluttershy tightly. A tear fell upon Fluttershy’s forehead. “I don’t want to lose either of you,” he said in a pained voice almost approaching a whisper. “But whether we like it or not, you’re having a foal.”
“There you are Miss Fluttershy!” The voice of the all too familiar Doctor Horse broke the moment. He was wearing blue scrubs (an outfit would cause Rarity to faint upon seeing it) and there was a white face mask wrapped around his neck. Right behind him followed two mares that Fluttershy could recall seeing before in previous trips to the hospital: Nurse Snowheart and Nurse Sweetheart, both wearing the same attire and the former pony pushing along a wheelchair, which happened to have a rather free willed front right wheel.
“I should question why in Equestria you were out here and not in your room after you were told specifically to sit tight,” he raised an eyebrow at her, “But we have no time for chatter, so if you please, could you kindly let Nurse Sweetheart help you onto this wheelchair and we’ll take you straight to surgery.”
On cue the nurse wheeled over to Fluttershy’s side and bent down to offer her hoof.
Fluttershy looked at the kind mare's hoof then back up at Discord as if to ask him if everything is truly going to be okay. “I’ll be right there beside you the whole time my dear,” he soothed, then gave her a warm smile. This was all she needed to hear, and she grabbed onto the nurse’s hoof and heaved herself off of the ground. Discord simultaneously stood up behind her and held her up under her armpits and helped her onto the chair.
Fluttershy’s hoof and Discord’s lion paw stayed intertwined from then onwards.
‘Sweet Celestia, she could move mountains with this much strength’
Finally, just as the first signs of dawn approached at the early hours of 6am, cries of a newborn foal echoed through the hospital corridors.
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I'm a complete sucker for these stories, gotta admit.
Great job btw. Loved it!
I liked it. It was a very real feeling of potential dread than many mothers have gone threw and I think this tale captures that well. It also shows the hope that can triumph over such adversity.
There is one sentence missing a quotation mark near the beginning, but that's my only criticism.
If this is your first fanfic, then you're off to a great start. I was terrified through reading this entire thing until the very end, because when I read the description and the 'sad' tag, I was afraid Fluttershy would die from childbirth. My heart was pounding. I was so afraid for both of them, especially Fluttershy.
They were both written wonderfully, both very in character despite the unique situation. I love how you managed to show every side of Discord-- his stubbornness, his fiery temper, his humor, his sweetness and gentleness...And oh, the very picture of Fluttershy struggling down the hall in pain...
But the end was sweet and beautiful and I felt so relieved, you have no idea. And to inspire such feelings in a fic, especially a oneshot, is always a sign that you're a really good writer. Excellent job, my friend. You get an up vote and favorite from me.
This is by far the best story I've read in a long time and infinitely much better than anything I could do. To me, other than minor spelling errors here and there, I'm sure, it was perfect in every sense of the word. The suspense and emotional tension was built up not only by the setting but the particular wording you had as well was phenominal. I'm not sure there are many, if any, problems I could point out. Let me be one to like it; it's well deserved!
Ahhh, this was so good! And for your first ever story? You certainly have promise, if that's the case. Just wonderful. I was very much sucked in once the emotional bits really kicked in. Then the ending arrived, and there was a mix of relief and joy just in one sentence. I wasn't expecting anyone to die (if that happened, I probably would've needed tissues), but knowing everything ended alright in the end is stress off the reader's shoulder, sort of reflecting how the couple feels.
I... It was incredibly well written... Flow, grammar, etc. But it shattered my suspension of disbelief when Fluttershy ran.
First, it was emphasized in the story just how tiring giving birth is. Considering that she was struggling with the birth for 40 min., she should not be able to stand up, much less walk out of that room far enough that Discord had to scramble around looking for her, unless he was knocked out much longer than implied, and she somehow didn't faint from exhaustion.
Second, Fluttershy specifically says she's read books upon books on how c-sections work, but she thinks the procedure is highly dangerous? How do you read even one book on a scientific subject with no ethical controversy surrounding it, and still not know how safe or dangerous it is?
Third, Fluttershy assumes that if she keeps the damn baby in her womb, they'll both live? What? Again, apparently she read up on child birth a lot, so what does she think's going to happen? The baby will stay exactly as it is until she decides to give birth? That the baby will keep growing? That her body would keep on supplying an overdue baby nutrients? That if it did, she would be able to live through life properly with something leeching her energy like that? Are you telling me that despite having a zoo of animals living in her house, and is implied to take care of them, she has no idea how reproduction works past the sexual intercourse?
i want to see what the child looks like please
I like this story, could use some work but overall nice, therefore you can has a like
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Add in the fact that the father-to-be is DISCORD. Forty minutes of labor isn't gonna happen. Forty seconds of labor isn't gonna happen. He'd sit the nurse down on the other side of the room, flick a matador's cape in front of her, and when he pulls it away the foal would spontaneously appear in her hooves completely clean and already wearing its first diaper, party hat, lei, and a T-shirt with a picture of him giving a thumbs-up and a copy of its birth certificate on the tag.
Like...the prose is good, but the story falls apart like a soufflé.
6507445 I do agree with the first part, exhaustion would make it near impossible for her to legitimately walk around freely. However, I do have something to say about your other points. You don't have to agree with me, but this is just my perspective and what made it easier for me to read in terms of logistics.
As for her freaking out over worst case scenarios, I find this to be very understandable and probable of a pregnant woman to think. You can read about something anywhere and see various responses, both good and bad. It's kind of like searching for strange symptoms you have on google and thinking you have cancer or you're going to die in two months. While it's not possible, you're still thinking about it. You can look at all the good stuff you've read about all you want, but when there's something wrong that you read, something that looks scary or even remotely possible, all you think about is that. The worst case scenario isn't always likely, but you can't help but be concerned about it. Especially when you're pregnant and worried anything could happen. Anything bad.
As for the final part, I never once thought Fluttershy actually thought to keep the child in the womb. No one ever actually thinks that, and I took that as her hormones surging to her brain and making her say some strange things in reaction to all that's happening. It's the fear of reality and the future just suddenly coming to her. It's hitting her that this child is ready to face the world, but she's nervous that it won't be perfect for her (wouldn't mothers want their child's world to be perfect even though, duh, it's not? heh). It's not that she believes she can just keep it in there, she's just terrified.
Like I said, her being able to walk around is a little strange to believe. Even if Discord was out longer than expected, she just wouldn't have any sort of energy. Not after going through so many contractions. And you're free to disagree with me, I understand. This is just how I saw it.
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6508947 Hm, the idea that Fluttershy was somewhat delusional at the end makes sense, but it's not something I would think is happening, as the story does nothing to show she's down deep enough to be saying things like that.
As for the second point I made, it's not about whether or not people freak out about this stuff. It would be very believable for Fluttershy to be worried about that stuff. It's that Fluttershy specifically says that the procedure is highly dangerous, and speaks of it like she's more likely to die than not. The problem with the story is that it seems more like Fluttershy thinks the procedure is highly dangerous when it's not, rather than that she in truth knows it's not very dangerous but overreacts to the slightest possibility.
I understand the fear you speak of. Irrational fear of something like a surgery going wrong. I know both the fear felt in which it's more than likely nothing will go wrong, yet you still worry, and the fear when you are going to have to go through something you likely won't come out of unscathed in some way. The story made me recall the latter in the way Fluttershy talks about her fear of the c-section. But we all interpret things differently, and I'm not a female nor seen anyone close to me give birth, so perhaps I'm not one to know how one would think when they're driven by the fear of losing their baby.
...I'd like to restate to the author that his/her prose is fantastic, and perhaps the only true error is that the situation is not too believable with the characters of Fluttershy and Discord, one who's living is caring for animals, and the other who manipulates reality on a whim.
You made the connection between Discord and Fluttershy as a couple feel so real, even without any previous story attached to this one. I'm giving this an upvote and a favorite because you convey the fear, love, and pain so well.
6509161 While I may be female, I don't know anyone that close to me where I watched them go through pregnancy. So my knowledge on that alone is very minimal, too.
Yes, that's a different situation, and I see what you mean now. Especially since Ponyville, according to Discord, has had little to no horrible cases of death in the past. Perhaps, author, you could simply try to clarify it so she is less certain that it'll go horribly; that it's more of a concern.
I personally liked how they chose Fluttershy and Discord--especially when we get to watch the latter go through something so domestic and somewhat scary, so unlike what he usually goes through. Buuuut that's totally just my opinion (since I'm shipper trash hehe sorry XD).
6509189 Fluttercord/Discoshy is the ship I always fall back on when I'm tired of everything else, so I guess it's my favourite ship
6508634 I think we need the comedy and random tags for that!
I love this story! It's great! I'm at a loss of words for how awesome this is!
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Yeah, I mean, I don't begrudge a bit of irrationality from somepony who's just been in labor. But the specific points she's making are ones that she, as a vet who probably has at least cursory knowledge of her own species' biology and routine medical procedures, would be very unlikely to make even while panicking.
Very well written!
Loved it, liked it!
Very sweet story indeed. You get a 'Thumbs up' from me.
Do make more with these two love once.
This is amazing for your first story! I wish it was the same for me, but wow, I love the detail and everything. I can't seem to find a problem with this, (considering I wasn't focusing on mistakes.) A suggestion would be to add this story and future ones to as many groups as possible.
This is your first story?!!!! You could have fooled me this is written so exact and magnificent....1000000 out of 10
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Sorry for the late reply! Please excuse my grammar and the such here, there was a reason why I needed editors (´・◡・｀;)
Thank you so much for your lovely replies! I had no idea people would actually like my silly story （*´▽｀*）
As for the feedback (thank you for taking your time to write those by the way <3) you're very right about Fluttershy's exhaustion, I never really paid enough attention to such a big error. I wish I could change it, but I don't think there's a way I possibly can without having to start the story from scratch all over again. I guess maybe we could argue that because of her immediate fear over the fact that she'd have to go under the knife, she managed to collect enough adrenaline to will her tired body onwards.
I also realise I didn't quite point out that Discord wasn't knocked out for a long time, it was just long enough for Fluttershy to slip out of the room. As for Fluttershy getting a good distance away from the room being physically impossible in her current state, what if she simply didn't. Discord just took the opposite direction to the one Fluttershy took (that also happened to be in the direction of where nurse was filling out her duties) leading him through unfamiliar and identical hallways, and inevitably getting lost and going in a complete circle.
Oh yes I completely see what you guys mean! (〃▽〃) That was truthfully the point of the story that I struggled with the most. I'm not very good with dialogue all together let alone expressing the characters feelings and thoughts through dialogue, so I had left that part to my wonderful editors to complete. But it's clearly left it rather uneven. However, even now I'm not entirely sure how I could change it for the better.
On another note, I think Fluttershy would most likely be more afraid of child birth compared to any other pony who doesn't care for animals on her level. I say this because Fluttershy's obviously been by the side of multiple animals as they are giving birth to their young, making her more aware of how the affair goes, including all the things that could go wrong. She likely has even witnessed animals passing away during the birthing procedure. She would have had to raise those said babies, or watched as the father tried to raise them himself. In Fluttershy's current situation all this would resurface in her mind and she may have had put her own face on those past tragedies. Not to mention that the tables had completely turned on her and she wasn't in control like she normally is with the animals. If that makes sense at all (*´∀`*)
I hope that may clear up a couple things! Thank you again for taking your time to read my story! Your feedback has really helped me and I promise I'll try my best to improve (≧∇≦)/
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A-ah you guys thankyou so much for your lovely messages (*´∀`*) I really appreciate it!
And 90 likes already?? I don't deserve this (//∇//)
Oh gosh you're all so nice~
6534752 you totally deserve it. This is just pure gold
You're welcome ^^
Your welcome! :3
Aww!
Wow, this is absolutely amazing! You captured Discord and Fluttershy's personalities just perfectly!
“Before what ay!? What could you possibly do!?” Discord cut in. “Plus who in Equestria do you think you are talking to? If you haven’t already noticed, I am Discord! The Lord of Chaos! The very being who turned this pathetic town you call home into the capital of chaos! I could destroy you and everything you love in a single snap-”
You tell him Discord!
This story was amazingly well written and kept me captivated! I absolutely love the Fluttercord ship and think this was an amazing story representing it. 
(After ereading more of other people's reponses I realize there was another comment in this vein, but this is less confrontational, and a different joke...)
Good feels, good characterization of personalities, poor mesh with canon in terms of powers.
I can easily see Fluttershy not wanting him to use his magic at first,(not that you mention anything like that) but when the c-section came up...
You might want to consider including an excuse for why he didn't do (or offer/threaten to do) something like:
Step 1.) Reach his eagle's claw up her birth canal.
Step 2.) Turn her inside out like a sweater.
Step 3.) Set the foal neatly off to one side.
Step 4.)Get doctor to cut the cord.Step 4 Revised.) After doctor just stares at the craziness too long while Discord taps his foot impatiently, Discord does it himself with a giant pair of golden sciscors like a mayor dedicating a bridge.
Step 5.) Turn Fluttershy right side out again.
Step 6.) Three-way cuddling.
Step 7.) Discord freaks out when Fluttershy has another contraction.
Step 8.) Fluttershy explains about placentae.
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The site of his dearly beloved in such a state stabbed Discord in the heart and tore it to shreds.
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I noticed that Fluttershy didn't seem to be in pain, at all, well, besides the contractions. She would not be able to push herself onto that wheel chair, with little energy, or with her being very close to giving birth.
Aw, this was adorable! When together, nothing can stop FlutterCord!
I love this so much, words can't express aaAhhH heck.
Whew! You honestly had me afraid that Fluttershy was going to crawl off and die, and her foal also, because she was too afraid to go on with the c-section. Like legit not sure if i should finish reading it, i was that worried about it. But i finished it, and i'm glad i did. Yay Fluttershy! You go, mare!
(Also it was starting to give me terrible flashbacks of that one chapter of the Uzumaki manga which i definitely do not recommend you read.)
Best wishes to the long vanished author of this story. Pancakes, mmmm