His name is Free, and he was a slave. But when he found his opening and escaped his owners, he finds that the wasteland holds its own horrors. Will he remain uncorrupted? Or will the wasteland wittle away all that he holds dear until he breaks?
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Squish
Great chapter. I was waiting to see how you were going to get Free and Jerry away from the slavers.
Now I can't wait to see what happens when their journey really begins!
7705156
Ever drop a watermelon? Its kinda like that.
7707739
I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.
Sweet chapter, I like it though I am curious about what is going on in that dig site... Shenanigans I would presume?
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The Shenani-est of shenanigans.
7775107
Well, it fits best with the SPECIAL I gave him.
I reviewed the Introduction, prologue, and side chapter of this fanfic today:
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Come on Free! You have just smacked two other people out, and you let the pipsqueak threaten you! I do not even want to put a bet on how this are going to bit you in the arse! That are so fucking cliche that it hurt!
Nitpicks:
" His pip-buck?" Capital letters
"but her eyes betrayed her as they darted around wildly.." Ahh the double period, my arch nemesis, we meet again!
"A smiled crossed my face as I imagined a little home for us" Smile
"but I brushed passed it." past... Although I think it need a full re-writing.
" I’d picked up some fighting in The Dig, mostly knocking a few heads together to keep me and Jerry safe. " You said in the chapter before that he had never taken part in any fights, just watched them.
"[/hr]" Don't know why you have this bit of coding in the end
8880634
Well crap, I did say he'd never fought before... I'll have to fix that.
8880634
Okay, I think I fixed the fighting bit.