Rarity Belle has it all. She wants nothing more than to be Mrs. Blueblood. But there is one thing stopping him from proposing: She is too white. Rarity rallies all of her resources and gets into Canterlot U, determined to win him back.
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Im in love with musicals,acting/drama and ponies! This is going to get intresting!
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Why Blueblood? Does he need to prove himself?
He'd need some reformation first.
Also, I think Diamond Tiara would be a better pick for Elle, or even Silver Spoon or Sweetie Belle. Rarity's a bit too sophisticated and too 'above' this particular role. And PLEASE don't make Silver Spoon a friend-abandoning b*tch; she's DT's best friend despite their arguing (which isn't even often, only once on the sow). She's more of a Proper Lady type, and she couldn't be mistaken for dumb or even vapid. She's got this air of importance about her.
Look at how she carries herself:
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She's very upright and proper.
Diamond, Silver, and Sweetie are all more casual in their posture, as if they had a hand on their hip:
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However, it's your choice. The writing and grammar are very good and the song parody is really good!
I'm trying to help, and I hope you keep going with this.
6472009 yay! Thx! I appreciate the help! Don't think that I haven't thought of that before, however it just seemed that Rarity was the best fit because like Elle she's sweet and caring and generous. Diamond is too much of a jerk to be Elle for my opinion. Also for blueblood, don't worry! He's still a jerk in this story. Just you wait for the next chapter!
First of all, Legally Blonde is one of my favorite movies (and it's a pretty good musical too) so I was pretty excited to see this. Especially with Rarity as Elle, I think their personalities make the best match out of all the characters.
There are a few spelling/grammar errors, but it's a pretty great ponified version. That being said there are a few really nitpicky things (and I mean seriously nitpicky things) I had that really stuck out to me.
This really should be the name of their sorority since the song is emphasizing how a good Delta Nu wife should behave.
During the break up scene, you keep writing "brake," but it really should be "break" since they are not pulling the brakes on a car.
Guys join fraternities or "Frats"
Ladies join sororities.
But other than that, like I said, I really enjoyed it. I liked that instead of making fun of blondes, they are making fun of girls with white fur. I think that's probably the best way I've seen it and having the Cutie Mark Crusaders and other school aged fillies as the girls of Delta Nu is a great way to show off Rarity's maturity in comparison.
6487056 Wow thx! So yeah, spelling isn't my strong suit (as you noticed) but I'll work harder! This is my first story after all!
And thanks for the feed back! Appreciate it!
Yay another chapter!
Just a quick note:
You may want to make that Welcome to Canterlot U
But otherwise fun update
6538367 Oh my gosh thanks! Changing that right now!