The MLP community has been a great source of happiness and joy. These stories are my attempt to give something back to those who have so enriched my life.
Luna is not the only alicorn who suffers from nightmares. Her sister Celestia is also haunted by the past – and like Luna, she chooses to not tell anyone about her dreams. The Princess of the Night is terrified of becoming a nightmare again, and Celestia –
Celestia is haunted by the sunrise.
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An interesting explanation as to why MLP's world works the way it works. There's little holes like the issue of Everfree forest not being broken by what happened. It feels incomplete though. I can't help but think that finding out what Luna thought of this would have changed that.
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I came close to addressing that, but in the end I decided against it - I thought it would just complicate things. The Castle of the Two Sisters was in the heart of what is now the Everfree Forest, and the Forest is one place where things operate "on their own", so to speak. One could imagine that when Celestia built her new home, she tried to fix things in the area around her but was only able to affect part of the world - and even that didn't turn out the way she had hoped (just look at how dark the forest is).
I'll give it some thought. It wouldn't be a hard thing to change.
EDIT: I took your suggestion and added two paragraphs about the Everfree Forest. It was tricky to find a good place to put them, but I think it strengthens the story. Thanks for the suggestion!
And here I thought that it was Discord who irreversibly disrupted the circadian/lunar/seasonal cycles...
Great story!
Well written and thought provoking.
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I could totally see him doing that, too! He tends to like turning the world upside down - although, in fairness, chocolate rain is pretty awesome.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Thanks for letting me know.
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Thank you very much! It's very difficult for me to tell in advance if an idea is any good or not. Knowing that a story "worked" is a tremendous encouragement. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Makes me *really* want to know more about the Five. Would love it even more if this was an entire story.
Either way, awesome read you have here.
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the tale.
As for turning it into a novel - I'll have to keep that in mind! It wouldn't be the first time I took a short story and expanded it into something much longer. Thanks for the suggestion! (Now, if anyone else would like to take up that challenge and make it happen, all I can say is be my guest!)
6451330 Rather than suggesting so, one could propose a chapter in which Twilight asks and how Celestia deals with it. It wouldn't be too dramatic, given how Celestia (and, seemingly, Luna) are innocents regarding The Incident, nor would it be too redundant, as it'd focus more on Twi's reaction rather than how it happened.
Bonus points for adora-Twi being all proud because Celestia chose to tell it to her instead of Cadance.
Interesting take, but it doesn't feel particularly plausible. Perhaps in part because the sun rising is, for us at least, a cosmological phenomenon. I'm not sure you could "break" it without having sufficient power to destroy the whole universe.
The story needs a bit more substance somehow. There are also a number of unclear details. What makes the pony races special? Did they exist before the "sundering"? I thought her father wanted alicorns to rule. Who actually defeated the unicorns and how? What did alicorns do before? You know, all that and more.
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According to Celestia's diary (which I think is supposed to be canon), in the days before the two sisters the sun and the moon were raised by groups of unicorns. This process was so taxing that after just a few days it completely drained them of magic for life.
This tells me that ponies couldn't possibly have always been responsible for rising the sun. In order to raise the sun and moon you would need a rather large group of unicorns, and that brings up all sorts of questions. When Equestria came into being (however that happened - we've never really been told that story), was it already populated by thousands upon thousands of unicorns? That seems unlikely. Did that mean the sun raised itself? Did some other creature raise it? Is the sun enormous, like our own, or is their sun something small and magical that orbits their planet, like our Moon? Who knows?
I don't think we'll ever have actual answers to these questions. But it is fun to speculate. Is the answer really that ancient ponies launched a sinister plot to take over the whole world? It's hard to say - but ponykind got control over all nature somehow, and it seems really unlikely that Equestria started out that way.
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To be honest the 'ponies control nature' thing never really made much sense. It's not entirely clear what role unicorns would play in that kind of system anyway, since earth ponies are like good with plants and pegasi control the weather. I kind of read it as meaning that they enforced a particular schedule onto things for increased productivity or something. Kind of like controlled irrigation/sunlight exposure except on a slightly more planetary scale (modifying weather system rather than controlling what the environment is exposed to of th output). So the weather would maybe handle itself, but not necessarily in a way friendly to agriculture or ponykind. Another semi-plausible explanation would be that Discord's past actions, or his long absence, screwed things up somehow.