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One peaceful day in Equestria, a young Stallion and his brother were invited to a party at the castle by Princess Celestia. After a surprise attack by one of her most fearsome enemies, Mario is sent on a journey across the entirety of Equestria to restore harmony to the world, with the help of a few allies
This fanfiction is based on the video game Paper Mario, and set in Equestria, albeit a slightly different one to the one in the show
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Wow! A facepalm count of zero! Congratulations!
I love this so much, I might add in this picture for no reason.
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Any constructive criticism is welcome guys
Mario? trying to go get some guards.... seems NOT legit....
The paragraphs seem a little bulky, other than that good job!
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Heh, I was concerned by making Mario too different. The reason he isn't the big hero around these parts is because he is a regular pony, pretty much.
Also, I didn't want to make him a mary sue
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Noted, i will have a look at that
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well, I hope you'll at least make him get stronger over the course of the story so that he can kick Discord's flank.....
sure, do not bring him to Mary Sue level.....
No first comment?
Chapter 0 will be finishing next update, with our intrepid heroes reaching their first 'Boss Fight'. Any reviews so far are 100% welcome
Nice improvement on paragraphs, you deserve another pic for this story...
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hahaha dimond tiara is jr troopa, cant wait till she beats the koopa bros
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Paper Mario was the first game I ever played! xD I love you.
I'll be making my own later, taking a more different approach. With the characters as themselves and not pony versions. Will be making one for every game. I'll be playing through the game, and every chapter I clear will be a new chapter to my story :D. So awesome.
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I look forward to reading it
An update is on its way, i'm just a little preoccupied
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What was your favorite boss in the original? Mine was the cloud boss. Mr. Huff I think was his name. His constipated face when he got charged was so lol.
Rather annoying to fight though.
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Tubba Blubba
I loved the entirety of chapter 3
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Ah, the infamous Invinsible Tubba Blubba. It took me forever to figure what the hell I was supposed to be doing in the mansion. I loved Lady Bow. Her fan attack is pretty useless against enemies with more than 1 defense though :T. A really good one was the Shy Guy Captain... wait... the entire game was mind blowingly awesome!
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You should see what i ahve in store for that chapter
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Now you got me excited! XD
Not too sure about this last chapter. If it feels like i'm rushing descriptions / my dialogue is thin, let me know
Gee, I wonder who is up in that tower. /sarcasm
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Don't be so sure
I like it better when Mario DOESN"T talk...I mean it's more Paper Mario that way.
Yay, this story is WAY BETTER WITH MARIO Slient.
Because that's how I'm viewing this tale.
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Your call, but i'm making him speak so he isn't just standing around like an idiot
"Darn" said the sun princess. She was never one to swear, and she wasn't about to start now. "It would appear that this plot has been well formulated."
....Dat Plot!
Side-kick Scoots
heh.
1000 total views. Never expected it to get this much attention.
Thanks for reading guys, and chapter 2 will be begun shortly
This story is interesting enough for me to keep reading (even though I've never played a Paper Mario game before), but there are five major grammar issues that you should probably look out for future chapters. Sorry, but I'm a bit of a grammar Nazi.
1. Punctuation with quotations: If a sentence comes to a complete stop (i.e. a period, etc.), then the punctuation should stay inside of the quotation marks.
2. Thoughts and tense shifting: Unstated thoughts look better in italics. Also, make sure personal thoughts are in the first person and reflect the thinker's feelings on a given topic. Furthermore, keep the story in one tense (i.e. past, present or future). This keeps the story more fluid and less clunky.
3. Possessives: Make sure that apostrophies are in the words where necessary.
4. Look out for comma splices. Two or more independent clauses (sentences) combined into one sentence should have a semicolon. Alternatively, the sentences could remain separate.
5. Pronoun-Antecedent agreement: Multiple pronouns in one sentence should only be used when the things/characters are different genders. Also, pronouns should agree with the most previous subject stated.
Examples:
Back in the castle, Celestia was sitting in her room. "How could she have failed her subjects again?" she thought, with guilt racking her mind. "If only there was some way I (Ex. 2) could help stop Discord". (Ex. 1) She threw herself on the bed, hoping to come up with an idea. Soon after, a light knocking was heard at her window. She slowly walked towards it, worried about what could be on the other side. Suddenly, the window burst open, forcing her to give out a little yelp. Fortunately, it appeared that Discords (Ex. 3) force field created a small atmosphere around the castle, preventing her from being sucked out into space. In front of her however, laid a pink winged unicorn.
"Cadence, what are you doing inside this room, shouldn’t you be imprisoned in the dungeons?" (Ex. 4: a semicolon should follow "room.")
Celestia smiled down at the flying pony, and closed her windows after she had left her field of vision. (Side note: the words in bold are should not be separated as two independent clauses... closed her windows after she had left her field of vision. is not an independent thought, so the comma before "and" is not necessary.)
...closed her windows after she (Ex. 5: you're not clear on stating that "her" replaced "Celestia" and that "she" replaced "Cadence.")
Just a few things to look out for. Other mistakes are small, not really worth mentioning. Look out for them, though. Otherwise, keep up the good work! Also, tell me if I'm being unclear with anything.
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I agree with that statement. Thanks for the laugh.
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Thank you very much for the critique, and I will be addressing these issues when I write the next chapter.
Glad you are enjoying it too
Alright, way to go Scoots!
The insults may have been a bit harsh, but she practically saved them! 
I swear, if you write something about getting the hell out of of Dodge...
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Don't tempt me haha
"Your mother was a hamster, and your father smelt of Elderberries!"
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Indeed I was referencing Monty Python
Anyone else pick up my pun based on the snake?
Thanks for the shoutout! :) I'll have to read your story now.
God I hate writing rhymes for Zecora.
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Please do! I always like recieving feedback from my few readers
Hmmm...I'm guessing that unless the diamond dogs and garble are chapter 4, Rarity will be with the dogs next chapter and Spike will be held by Garble chapter 5.
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One or more of your suggestions are right
are the dogs like shyguy's toy box ?
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In effect, yeah
Pretty sure this never happened in Paper Mario
Dang! I guess it gave a reason why, but I was still really expecting the dog's pony to be Rarity.
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They did ask for Rarity, it's just that Discord is a bit of a douche
Hmmm... If the dogs didn't get Rarity, does that mean Garble didn't get Spike?
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My lips are sealed
Maaaan. I want to write one of these. Oh well, I'm sure I'll find a way to get it in my story.
EDIT: Oh, well look at that. I did. /)^3^(\
While yes, I am still working on the chapter 4 finale, I have written another story.
If you could be willing, check out my profile and give it a read/review. It is dark/sad though, so a bit of warning
Putting parasprites as #1 species huh? Could that be a hint to one of the guardians of the elements in a later chapter? Also, (assuming he gave Spike to Garble), next chapter they set out to save
! YAY!