Just skimmed the beginning and I like it. I may read it later. This seems different than most styles and in a good way. In to steam punk much?

Great story can't wait to see more. Flim and Flam should be flayed and salted. and Trixie should have her wagon smashed another time just cause shes a bitch.

>>644175644175

Thanks. I'm interested in the concept of steam punk but I don't think I'll have any super technical explanations for how their harnessing the dragon fire outside of ...

Get dragon.

Torture it.

Get fire.

???.

Cider profit!

continue with the story i could hardly take my eyes of the monitor while reading

Well, this is downright depressing.

excellent third chapter.

Edit:or second chapter.. anyway can't wait for the next one

>>664366664366

*bows*

When I got to the spectrum guy's part I thought: 'yes, come on, so very close to finding her! Fffffffffffuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!!!!!!!!

excellent chapter. even better then the the third one.

can't wait for the next one.

>>746591746591

lol; its almost like the mistake you made in your prior comment was actually epic foreshadowing

Next one will be coming out hopefully within a few days or so, if time permits, and it'll start this stories' first real story arc!

Will Ms. Dragon ever escape? Will the Flim Flam brother's ever stop being flankholes? When will we get to Ponyville, and what about Crackle the Dragon?! Tune in next time to find out!

How does this story not have more likes it is bucking amazing.

>>774362774362

Hehe, well then show it to your friends! Sharing is caring after all!

Also, in the spirit of this chapter's name (To Be Heard) I decided to experiment with adding more music to the overall story. I was hoping to achieve a nice balance where it was supportive of the writing and thus a nice addition while trying to avoid it being annoying and distracting. I think it came out ok...but I would really like some feedback please!

This chapter is by far the best.

I can't wait for the next one and i also agree with aiovas.

Why the hell hasn't this story have more likes.

*Blushes madly* Oh, um, hi there. I, er, had originally planned this chapter out to be a lot shorter...but as I started typing it up I fell in love with the little back to back chats the two Nathan's would have and more and more ideas kept popping into my head so I-I just...

P-please enjoy

>>808684808684

Oh don't worry Fluttershy it was a very good chapter and as an added (that's a lot of a words) plus Trixe's wagon got blown up yay!

Why was this added to the Human in Equestria group?

>>814908814908

Oh, well, um, its a HIE story. I-I just wanted to experiment with groups and I thought this one was a right fit. I looked through the stories and didn't see anywhere where a human changing into something wasn't allowed and I even saw a few humans as ponies stories s-so I thought it was ok. I-I'm sorry if this wasn't allowed and I didn't see it anywhere! P-please don't be angry! I'll remove it if enough ponies think it doesn't belong there

>>815093815093

Ooooh, sorry, I missed the 'A HiE Fiction' at the bottom of the description. If it's really a HiE story you should probably add the Human tag though

>>815100815100

O-oh. Well I didn't think it needed that title because the main character's a human turned baby dragon. A lot of the 'turned into blank' stories lack the human tag because these stories don't focus on the human aspect of their new life's, instead they focus on the adventure or the comedy or the slice of life. M-mines about the overall adventure of this stranger to a strange world and how he deals with becoming a kid, a dragon, and a girl all at once while also being tortured *Dark Tag* S-so once again I didn't think I needed the tag. Again, I-I'll change it if enough ponies think otherwise

awesome... simply put awesome.

as allways can't wait for the next one.

and reply to Salacar. Cog/Ms.dragon/Nathan was a human transformed into a dragon.

AWESOME.

good twist with the brothers coming aboard.

can't wait for the next chapter.

>>845653845653

Haha, out of all the twists I pulled out this chapter, that's the one you point out Personally, my favorites the...well, I think you can tell

Also, thank you factorydash, for always liking the chapters I work so hard on. I'm glad someponies are enjoying what I do in my free time

...keep your eyes pealed in the next chapter for something...special

Epicness in its purest form

>>845883845883Cant wait!

"It's impossible for ponies to be evil" said the pony hospital arsonist.

Awesome! Keep up the great writing!

Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaasaaaaay new chapter the waiting was starting to hurt

sweet lord......

This is THE BEST CHAPTER!

Thanks for including me in this chapter, it means alot to me.

I loved this chapter in everyway possible and can't wait for the next one.

Sad that Blue and Red died, but it adds a exciting twist.

again.. this story is awesomeness written down.

>>907329907329>>907744907744>>908394908394

Thank you you three! Keep being awesome

And it was no problem at all FD; what drives me forward to continue this story is knowing that at least one person likes it enough to share that love with others in the comment section, and you've done just that for every chapter! One vocal fan is all I need to keep going, so I wanted to thank you in some way for just, well, being awesome

>>915567915567 thank you for being soo awesome and writing one or the best stories I've ever read

>>915567915567 yes i agree with aiovas.

THANK YOU FOR BEING SO AWESOME!

>>915668915668>>916857916857

*hugs tightly*

SO EPIC, AWESOME AND DRAMATIC!! *head explodes*

This is so exciting! can't wait to find out what happens next.

"From the darkness, a pair of magenta colored eyes opened." was an epic ending to a epic chapter.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Omg most epic thing I've ever read in my life! Please more soon PLEASE!!!

I worte a comment as a guest in my excitement, how id did that, I do not know... but I've found that this story is so great that I have to write down just how great it is.

So let me begin, ahem: THIHIIISSSS ISSSS GGGRRREEEAAATTTT

I mean that in the most sincere way possible. Your characterisations are done beautifully so as to make them truly appear as if they were... real, something that even the greatest of HIE fics have failed at, instead turning rational characters into meme slaves or caricatures of a real person. I feel as if I can understand your characters and their motivations, even if I wouldn't have acted in the same manner (I would have bit them in the neck not the leg for trying to enslave me).

Then there's the plot which is overused, yet done to perfection here, making cog into a bad ass without making her into too much of a bad ass, adding consequences to her strength, a concept that is almost unheard of here, and when it is heard it's usually done very badly. and the best of all is... well the whole thing if I'm honest, teasing the audience yet never delivering, making her awesome yet always bringing up the spectre of failure behind her shoulder. That, sir takes discipline, and deserves a moustache

Finally is your portrayal of Equestrian society which is as complex as the characters in the story. I've always been a little averse to the whole 'Celestia is a goddess and we are her slaves' way of thinking that most writers go about, but you've managed to make it all bearable as it is shown in contrast to the other nations deities and Luna is shown as vulnerable which stops any 'my god is better than your god' tantrum that my brain likes to make. And the variety of characters that is shown in society, keeping within the cannon and yet deviating just enough that it makes us feel as if were discovering a whole new society.

So yeah, this fic has cleanly gotten to top place in my rankings of FIM fanfiction, cleanly knocking off Human and ballad of the top spot, and I really can't describe how eagerly I'm waiting for an update. To see if Mr Everfree will ever escape his unjust prison, and what will happen in this clash, and if the Super Squeezy will ever make it into Ponyville with Cog kept prisoner.

>>10096121009612

*Reads through comment...reads through it again...a single tear falls from face* I...I just wrote up a comment a couple days ago that I deleted from here. In that comment, I remarked how silent everypony was during this chapter and how, no matter what kind of twist or interesting concept I introduced, nopony would pay attention to it. I was really discouraged by this, as I thought I went 'all out' with this chapter only to receive...nothing.

I later deleted the comment after realizing how selfish I was being, but my words were still sincere. I've been in a rut since the last chapter came out; thinking things like 'why should I even bother anymore?'

But...then I received an encouraging comment after I deleted it...and then another...and then yours. Norsefire...you are now my BPFF. I think you just singlehoofedly saved this fiction. Just....thank you *hugs*

>>10108961010896

Aww shucks, I'm just saying the truth as I saw it and there are a handful of people on this site who'll tell you that I have a habit of picking through holes in any fiction that I see. But I honestly saw this as one of the diamonds that make looking through fanfiction worthwhile. Heck, reading through my prior comment makes me feel as if I should have written more as it just doesn't articulate how much I've enjoyed this story. But then again, I wonder if a comment is capable of allowing me to express just how much I enjoyed this.

But truly, I find it amazing that this hasn't been featured yet, and weep at the thought that this absolute gem may have been left alone to whither.

>>10112401011240 I would like to thank you for saving this fanfic.

*Hugz*

*Pop!*

Eep! Oh...o-oh I'm so sorry! I didn't mean to blow your mind before the halfway point!

*Snap!*

Eek! I-I didn't mean to break it either at the halfway point!

*Sploosh!*

O-oh no; I didn't mean for the 3/4 point to rip out your heart!

*Beeeeepppp...

A-and *sniff* I didn't mean to completely erase your mind with the cliffhanger! P-please forgive me

This story just keeps getting better. Can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work and don't let others get you down, this story is a work of art. It is original, has plot twists that i couldn't see coming, really conveys the emotions of the characters, and truly does tug at the heartstrings. Even if somebody is rude just ignore them and know you've got at least one more dedicated reader. On the chapter though, damn Starswirl is a bitch, i continue to love your expanded lore, and ZOMG VINYL'S A DRAGON.

really good story, I loved every chapter

P.S.

I´d like to write some more, but I´m bad with words most of the time at stuff like this.

Just know: you´re doing great work and I appreciate it

Dude this is a weird and awesome chapter.

Trying to fully ponder/understand/analyze it but that makes it all the better. Still in all seriousness about the Author's Note in the beginning, that is a bunch of B.S. Why the hell would people have a problem with you, your good. To be honest how can anyone get one you about "copying", when people are fine with obvious, blatant remake like abominations. I don't see how you are copying (haven't read the other but still). All those people are just flankholes.

Honestly to bug an author to elicit that response..... I am ashamed of them and they should be ashamed of themselves.

Well, I haven't commented on anything before, so I just thought I'd say that this story is awesome and you should feel awesome. Seriously, this fic deserves a lot more views. Now, if you'll excuse me, I've got a monster of a chapter to get through.

Dude how do you keep making so much freaken epicness and as I said for the umpteenth time why the hell isn't their more likes this has the freaken reading quality of griffin the griffin and echo the diamond dog. Maybe it's your time that you post the story because if your posting when everyone else is then you will not really get a say in with your story. Anyways your story is literally one my top favorite story out of all the other stories. Btw if you need some pony to preread or anything I can lend a hoof just message.

DJ DR4G0N

Well lets get the dirty laundry out into the air first:

Ok, I’ll admit that was kinda ‘stocker-y’

is:

Stalker-y

But other than that I'll first admit to wondering what the heck happened to Cog when we were witnessing the trio of Ponies at the pearly gates, and at first I thought WTF... where's my battle scene!

Then I kept on reading and it became more and more AMAZING! You've made Scratch lift up several pegs in my book as there is a depth to her here that I haven't seen as of yet, truly it seems as if her character has finally flowered with all the previous chapters acting as the building blocks for this moment. Then there was Starswirl who maintained your tradition of plot twist after plot twist, making an already good chapter all the more brilliant.

Your implementation of the MLP Pantheon was also good, showing as well a possible basis for the ignorance that perpetuates the Equestrian "no mark, no soul" proverb. Then you subverted the pantheon (or at least Lyssa) by bringing in a possible higher power, which makes me, personally, very happy. (God works in mysterious ways)

There's also a hidden back story regarding humanity as Lyssa hasn't said anything regarding it to Swirly.

It's all very well thought out.

Although I must admit I'm somewhat blind regarding similarities to the Echo saga you were worried about in the A/N. Here we have an afterlife/resurection scenario whilst echo was just a long piece of... oh, do you mean the beginning with Azuozle (the big blue cat)? Because they're not that similar.

Edit: wait a mo, If Scratch is a Dragon... then she has a greed flame, and that means that Lizzy can do her voodoo stuff... well bugger.

>>10475481047548>>10476541047654>>10480101048010>>10494811049481>>10495891049589

I just wanted to thank you people for your comments

For Isp: Your not as bad with words as you think! Your intention shines through, I assure you Thank you for your support!

For Endrax: Thank you for having the courage to speak up Even if its just an 'your awesome' that really helps an author like me with self-doubt issues.

Everypony else, who I also acknowledge as being awesome: THANK YOU FOR BEING AWESOME! Silence kills me, so thank you for making me feel like I'm doing something right for once

>>10502541050254

Ha! Even after twelve re-reads, its hard to spot everything in a 24K chapter. Thank you for the critical eye!

As for the Echo bit...yeah, I might have jumped the gun on that. Like I said, I've only really read the first chapter a little bit before posting this one (once it was typed up, I thought I earned a break after all) so my emotions might have been running a tad high. But, as I've said, I have issues with self-esteem, so the moment I saw the possibility of an adventure in hell I became worried that I'd be called a copy-cat.

So again, I might have made a bigger deal then need be...*sigh* but I worry about these kinds of things.

Also, yes 'God works in mysterious ways' is a great way to put it. The idea that everyone worships things differently is a major concept to the shaping of this universe. Cogwill still says 'Oh God!', Vinyl goes 'Oh Celestia!', Emeraldgrey shouts 'Praise Lyssa!', and Nathan De La Griffon, who is a griffon who follows Queen Gaia ('Mother of the Earth' as he put it in chapter 5) says 'Oh God!' as well...mysterious right? Shouldn't it be, 'Oh Gaia!'? I think one of the goddesses thinks a little highly of herself... we'll just have to wait and see!

Again, like I told everypony else in the comment above this, thank you for your kind words and your support!

P.S. Hahahah!!! 'Lizzy! I think I'll steal that nickname for Vinyl to use...that is, if she hasn't already stolen it!

Interesting beginning so far.  I may read this later too.  Is it wrong that I want to cut off Flim and Flam's horns with bolt-cutters for doing this?  Again, interesting so far.

Epicness and awesomeness are the two of the many awesome things this chapter is.

I love the part where Swirly told Vinyl that lyssa has no eyes was so epic!( in my head i was thinking of rainbow dash shouting "DUN DUN DUUNN")

The authors note was a load of H.S.(horse s**t) you are a brilliant author and have written one of the most amazing stories i have read.

Thank you for writing this story, it is AMAZING.

can't wait for the next chapter.

awesome! I love this!

Holy fucking shit.

I don't think an hour is gonna be long enough to fully review this.

Holy fucking shit.

Okay, I'm going to need a shit ton of time to process this, but for the moment, if you ever stop writing this I will rip your throat out and feed it to you through your stomach wall. This is an HiE fic that I actually don't mind. Maybe I'm letting glossing/imagination bias get the better of me, but goddamn did I enjoy this.

Also: I think you're the one person I'm going to offer my services as a proofreader to. As in, offer them, not have them up for request. Seriously, you need a proofreader; if not me, then most certainly someone, because the biggest detractor for this story, aside from all the meta and fourth-wall breaking, was the typos, grammatical and technical errors. Those are everywhere.

I mean everywhere. I couldn't go two sentences without a word being mistaken, misused, or misspelled. That's really irritating when I'm reading a decent story, you know that? :P

>>11661331166133

*Strolls through fimfiction.com jollily, taking in the sights, reading some stories, doing a little typing on next chapters...GET'S F-ING SHOTGUNNED IN THE FACE BY SWEARING PRAISE*

*Reaches hand up over the side of the desk; yanks self back up* Well...ahem *adjusts glasses* that was certainly an...interesting way to receive praise haha.

In all seriousness...I would LOVE a proofreader! I try my best, and I'm always spotting new mistakes whenever I re-read a chapter, but its almost impossible to spot every little issue in these giant squeeing chapters that I write! So again, if your offering it I'd be more then happy to accept it! Just PM me some time and we'll discuss it

>>11662711166271

Understand that that first comment was my fanbrat reaction. The actual review is going to hit like a motherfucker. I'm holding you to a higher standard because I enjoyed it.

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Discord.png

I'm actually surprised no one's snapped up the chance to proofread for you. You aren't a dumbass, your story is decent, and long.

Makes no fucking sense.

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Expect a PM sometime.

>>11664691166469

This image=relevant

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>>11664861166486

Pfeh. Don't be such a pussy. You've got a massive technical/grammatical issue tendency, but your story ain't bad, and the characterization is decent. Seriously.

Really wish I knew what the fuck was going on with the lack of reviews, likes and feedback though.

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I like this so much, please keep writing

Hey.  It's me.  I put this in my read list.  *runs away and rocks in a corner as the long chapters close in around*

This story is awesome. I am so glad I clicked on your name in the comment section of a different story because I liked your avatar, because this story is great.

*Wandering the wilds of FIMFiction*

"Ooh, what's this? A story with an OC dragon? And some interesting character tags! I'm going to read it now!"

*Five minutes later*

>>14638001463800

I'm sorry

>>14638371463837 No worries. Feels of alarm are some of the better feels. I'm reading the next chapter at the moment.

>>14638561463856

Oh! Well enjoy then

...

Woot!

Woot!

Woot!!!

That was a GOOD infodump. I'm going to go back here to take notes. Faved for this chapter alone.

Trixie? I liked you a lot more a chapter and a half ago.

I am not a cleaver dragon.

I should hope not!

>>14642681464268

I want to be a cleaver

>>775182775182 FIMFiction isn't great at getting less popular stories a spotlight, especially since they took away the "Last Page" option. Honestly, we need a group that specializes in giving less popular stories love and affection.

A happy ending? Hooray!

>>14693811469381

I'm quite surprised how few of those this thing has

It's impossible for ponies to be evil?

Image: http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2012/048/a/9/nightmare_moon_by_up1ter-d4q2ih9.png

I'm going to assume naivety over racism here.

I suppose I shouldn't have been caught off guard, what with the countdown...

But I was so caught up in the action, I forgot something bad was about to happen.

Darn that was epic.

Well, I'm divided.

It's your regularly brilliant style of storytelling, yet 'meh' at the same time. The meh is probably from the agonising wait and the knowledge that I'm missing out on glorious Seapony battles. Which gets even worse when you consider that this chapter was kind of vital to development and stuff. It's just bad when I consider that you had the timing perfect with the cliffhanger that you had in the prior chapter... gah, I'm sounding like a prick, how do I put this eloquently?

Imagine that you've been waiting for a ride on a rollercoaster but instead, when you reach the end of the line they give you a slice of cake instead.

This chapter is a slice of cake.

As for grammar there's

“H-heh, snort, a-anyways; this could be her true age then, unless she was lying again,

where I'm pretty sure that he didn't actually say the word 'snort'.

But it's a shorter review than I'm used to giving to you. Mainly because the chapter's pretty self explanatory, not much on me as a reader/reviewer to expand on (although I was a little amused that Gaia had disappeared, when I just discovered that my lecturer was called Gaia yesterday).

And don't get me wrong, I like cake as much as the next red-blooded male and I understand that cake, when building characters are vital to a story. Especially when the cake is as delicious as this one.

It's just that I was waiting for my rollercoaster, and now I've got a feeling in the pit of my stomach that feels like indigestion.

Don't get me wrong though. This is still the No. 1 fic on this whole website imo. You see all those fics with 1000+ reviews? This is better than all of them.

>>14758921475892

*Salivates* omg actual criticism. Thank you!

Thankyouthankyouthankyou! You have no freaking clue how much I've been craving an honest to God review that doesn't just praise me! I love praise (thank you for yours, btw) but I know I'm not perfect and I want to improve, so this helps A LOT.

... But anyways, I'm well aware that this is probably one of my weaker chapters. In all honesty, this one was NOT supposed to come out yet, and was instead intended as a 'dividing block' chapter between... well... you'll just have to wait and see

My reasoning behind bringing it out so early was so I could kick start my refresh of chapter 10. For two months now, I've been sitting at 18K written, 20K deleted, and STILL not liking how it turned out... so I felt that I should write something else in the mean time until something clicked for me.

So I started writing a little one-shot for The Album... scrapped it, started writing a comedy one-shot... then scrapped it, and then suddenly went crazy and said "You know what? Let me write this ahead of time, just for the lolz"

I didn't expect to finish this, but I did, and it was the first actual thing I had finished in MONTHS... so I re-purposed it as sort of a 'refresher' chapter (its been so long, thought people would need it) and decided to go ahead with it.

I now plan on never doing something like this ever again. Next time this enters a hiatus, I will do my best to try to pick up where I left off instead of creating an entirely new chapter to compensate... either that or I'll actually FINISH one of the thousands of one-shots I've started and never finished.

But, now that this is out of the way and I have the writing bug again, we will be in full blown seapony WAR mode until the conflict is shorted. Looking at 5-6 chapters of that, with the repercussions echoing throughout the rest of the story... so don't worry, we ARE getting there and a roller-coaster of conflict and emotions will be had. They'll only be one more breakaway AFTER chapter ten (that will be more like an extension of ten, in all honesty, and will come out the same day as well), I promise

And lastly, I'm currently working with new proof readers and trying to improve the overall quality of my writing. I'm currently trying to figure out how, exactly, I want to convey sound effects in dialog now, as I've discovered that all my previous *sob* *sniff* and *snorts* approach was improper. Instead, I've taken up doing sniff and sob and, in this example, snort in order to inject it in dialog. I'm always willing to change such things, so if enough people find it annoying I will personally go through the story again and edit ever instance until it looks proper.

Cause this is the only story I feel compelled to type.

Sooooo... yeah. I'm sorry for the cake. Please enjoy the rest of the roller-coaster

>>14761201476120

Well it's just that when a word is inside a pair of speech marks, the character's saying them out loud. Your prior usage was improper, but not really something that would break immersion. Just make sure that it's outside of speech marks and it should go fine.

I know how tough writers block is. I'm in one myself at the moment... mainly because time travel is my weakness... Bloody time travel.

Yeah... speaking of which, what are those horn like things on Cogwill's head, are they horns or some fancy bed head?

>>14762191476219

Hehe, they're her ears! Cogwill's design is based off of a bunch of different teenaged dragons' designs from Dragon Quest. The royal purple dragon from that episode had something similar, and a wanted her design to be different from most other OC dragons', so that explains that! Yeah, it looks like bedhead here, doesn't it. Don't worry... they'll look more like horns when the final cover art is completed soon

And I'll keep what you said in mind. A lot of my characters cry a lot, so the soundbites are very important. I'll try to think of a different way to convey it in future installments, and fix past chapters as well.

>>14763051476305

Ears... well... oh  

There was a brief moment that I thought that she stuck her tail into the plug and caught a little static.

>>14763391476339

lol one of the many disadvantages of having a unique tail

Her horns also make her look like a bunny... bunnydragon... daaaaaaawwwww~

>>14701861470186

Yeah... naivety all the way here, as you probably already saw

Please don't kill me with suspense... Please?

woah whole story 5 hours ..... Iz a beasy. oh and this story is amazing even though I was looking for a human in equestria story to satisfy my innermost desires this sure beat my expectations by far. It dosent delve as much into the human aspect, as much as the holy crap this is novel worthy I'd pay to read this aspect. I mean this actually feels like an adventure novel, like terry goodkinds the sword of truth series. obviously different writing format and completely different style but still XD you made my day...... Oh sorry I read my day away....... you made my Night.

Oh and my Favorite part of the story so far was the interactions between Nathan and Cogwell. Oh and the fight scenes those were really exciting.

Aww yeah, New chapter(kind of)!

And so many surprises!

Please take as long as you need to make the next chapter, i'm ready to wait for months( preferbly sooner, but still) for a new chapter.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

*blinks* Oh wow...I don't go that still to stare at words for many things...let me give you some stuff *fumbles through pockets* Uh...this one...and uh...that one...and...yeah go ahead and take that too.  Okay, you have my attention.  You definitely have that.  

>>644548644548

No Idea how old this comment of yours is, but if you'd like help with concept design and explanation, it is something that I'm very good at.

(I can explain how it would be possible, in the right conditions, to make a sonic Rainboom in real life.)

Sorry if I sound Dickish or big headed, I'm not, but I have to write quickly as I don't have much time left and it's the fastest way to get my point across.

>>16540171654017

Hehe, well then I'll reply quickly as well! Thank you very much for the offer, but that comment is from seven months ago, back when this story was still fresh and new. I've long since worked myself into my own little niche, so the super complicated explanations aren't really needed. Again though, thank you kindly for the offer, and I hope you take the time to read and hopefully enjoy this fic

I require MOAR. i will wait here patiently and tolerate the absence of MOAR until such a time that you decide to redeem the lack of MOAR.

This is by far one of the most interesting non-standard HiE fics that I've ever had the pleasure of reading. Even being only on the fifth chapter, I can safely say that I am thoroughly enjoying it.

Nathan is the perfect match for Cog, in a friendship sort of way, but at the same time it is fairly easy to ignore who Cog actually is and see something more coming from the pair, which makes the 'fillyfriend/coltfriend' comments believable. Even if shipping isn't generally my kind of thing, if you were to take the story in that direction, NatexCog is a ship I'd respect.

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Also good to see a kicking given to the bastards Flim and Flam. You did a wonderful job making those two shady characters downright detestable. Their cruelty is ultimately what makes the character Cog so likeable, so even if they are the scum of Equestria for what they did, they're still essential to making this a good fic.

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_gasp.png

Also, Karmic Overload on Trixie for the win.

Got to the end of the available chapters today. Really enjoying this, and aside from a lot of instances of homonym confusion or in general switching of words that seem similar, this is a really great story.

I also decided to send some more attention your way and dropped this in the Writing Gold group. Celestia knows this belongs there.

>>17402141740214

"And thus manly tears were shed that day"

I was shown this Fiction because my friend Seven Fates here said that a story he commented on was actually inspired by the story he wrote and I edited. Never the less I decided to see how well the story was written and what is was about. Need less to say. ManlyDerp I am stunned. After reading through all these chapters, you have made me feel for all of the characters in different ways no matter how brief they were shown. The anger and malice towards Flim and Flam, the rage towards the treacherous Trixie, The wonderful mix of emotions towards the main characters as they develop. It was marvellous

As Seven Fates will back me up, lately I have been lacking motivation in reading fan fics, and reading yours was just on a whim to see what it would be like. I would like to thank you personally, for you have brought me out of my slump and allowed me to enjoyed Fan fictions once more.

As stated before I love the feel for the characters you have given me, along with this the development of said characters that comes with it, as more of their past and even their future comes to be told. Along said this is a story line that is forever progressing allowing the reader to keep pace with the story, but never standing still. It is a master piece of fiction (aside from a few minor typos which are easily missed) and I look forward to whenever the hiatus on this is broken.

,Yours sincerly

DarkxRedemption

I came here by accident due to Sev.  However, since I've never seen Darky compliment a horrible story... on to the fave it goes~

Now to sacrifice sleep.

Neat. I have to say your narritive during your rewind is rather unusual.  Reminds me of the Twilight Zone tbh.  Or a nature documentary.

I'll have to hold reading this for a bit, but I like what I see so far.

>>17433061743306

I feel honored to have been able to return your love of fanfiction reading to you, and I'm even more honored by your kind words. Thank you so very much! I truly hope I'll be able to bid farewell to this hiatus soon as well so that I can return to doing something I love, especially now that I've seen how much people actually enjoy this

I hope to see you there when that day comes!

     ManlyDerp (Derply)

Dark, very dark. But then, I liked Piano Man, so I'll give it a shot.

(TalonMach5 sent me, btw.)

oh my god i hate this and want to stop reading it but its so good that i cant i mean her life has to get better at some point

I love you too, author-who-has-taken-over-the-past-two-days-of-my-life-with-this-amazing story!

This is one crazy story.

>>19009901900990

*Bows*

All the conversations with blue are going to make the loss of his/her wings all the more painfull.

But that’s what you planned all along isn’t it.

Also Is DJ really that god dam stupid? No pony can be evil… really?