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Hyper Atomic


Scientist, Student, and Storyteller. If I've written something that made you smile, that's good enough for me.

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Co-authored with the incredible my_little_medic.
Cover art by the talented Inkwell Tailbrush

The universe is a fickle place. Chaotic when it wants to be, and ordered when it needs to be. For two extraordinarily unlucky yet infinitely fortunate individuals, one morning found them unceremoniously comprised of every probabilistic particle in the cosmos ... for 0.0073 nanoseconds.

Devon hadn't exactly been the most level headed to begin with, and waking up in a foreign city in the dead of winter with no recollection of how he got there wasn't doing him any favors. If that wasn't enough, he's also stuck with Alek, a disembodied voice that only he can hear. Can the pair manage to work together long enough in order to uncover what happened to them, or are they already a lost cause?

It sure would be a lot easier without hooves too...

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 100 )

Wow, this is amazing. Just wait for the upvote a and favs to pour in...

Co-authored with the incredible my_little_medic.

D'awwww.... :twilightblush: But seriously, what a fun writing partner!!! :rainbowwild:

did you get the idea from a game? I remember a game ware a girl has a ghost that hast to stay clos to her just like this story.

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Thank you! :pinkiehappy: I'm glad you like it.


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Likewise, friend! :ajsmug:


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:raritywink: Good eye! There was indeed some inspiration taken from "Beyond Two Souls."

3740471 I never rely play games like that but I did see a walkthrough from pewdiepie and it looks like a good game.
I also love the story so far keep up the good work.

This is looking like a psychological and somewhat dark story. You do realize that's one of my absolute favourite kinds, right? :pinkiecrazy:

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Well, I do now. :ajsmug:
Thanks!

you used to have my interest but now you have my attention.
i see that beyond two souls and maybe a bit of the alice in wonderland (once upon a time verison) inspiration there. i feel a deadspace ambiance to it as well. great work friend

What the.... wow.... just wow....:pinkiecrazy:
You earned a fave from me!:moustache:

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Thank you kindly! Dead Space was one of my favorites.


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And a like too I hope! :pinkiehappy: Glad you enjoyed it!

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I gave a like to it yesterday because I like the premise, then I got to reading it today.
NO REGRETS what so ever!
I promoted your story in the Perpetual Discussion Group, so you should be getting more views. :twilightsmile:

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Oh! :twilightblush: Well, thanks again! The more that like the story, the better we have to make each chapter, right? :derpytongue2: It's a vicious cycle.

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It is, it is. One that I myself have trouble with. but growth is done by trial and error.

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So it seems people are enjoying it eh? :rainbowwild:

Out the window, Fly my pretty, FLY!!! "I remembered that we had been on the second floor" Aw crap:ajbemused:
P.S. This is amazing. You two deserve an ice-cream

I like how this is going so far:pinkiehappy:

Keep up the good work:derpytongue2:

Whoot. Another two person in one body fic. More importantly, the HIE(s) are not believed, which itself is already pretty uncommon.

Looking forward to more.

Congratulations! Your story has been reviewed!
This awesome link right here!

I shall read later; it's sleepy time now:ajsleepy:

good but is the pony the ghost or the sole or is even one of them a pony at all. but I am loving the story and it has something new that no one has done yet.

Another Friggin' Awesome Chapter:yay:

And all I can say is: I knew that him using her soap would have some interesting consequences:trollestia:

... This wasn't long enough. *Starts crying* I need more...

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Well, neither one were ponies before. Now, one is a pegasus while the other seems more akin to a poltergeist.

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Indeed. :ajsmug:
Glad you liked it!

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:rainbowderp: But we... 10,000 ...
:ajsleepy: ... okay

Great chapter! I look forward to your next update!

3934880 Wow, I just saw that...

10000 felt like nothing...

What?

*Starts crying*

How is it this hasn't been featured yet?! :rainbowderp: You and my_little_medic make an amazing duo. I literally couldn't tear my eyes away... I ended up reading through my entire lunch break! :pinkiecrazy: But seriously, keep it up and absolutely can't wait for the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

Alright then. That definitely didn't feel like 10k words. Nice flow. (Maybe slightly too quick.)

Overall, though, that was a pretty good chapter, and I'm continuing to enjoy this story. :twilightsmile:

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You and my_little_medic make an amazing duo.

:twilightblush: I consider myself VERY lucky to have found him and made a friend.

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Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

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One that doesn't take as long this time, I hope. :twilightblush:

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Elementary, the elusive 'Feature' status is purely dependent on the rapid accumulation of views, comments, likes, and favorites in a short period of time. In short, we're just too underground :twistnerd: In any case, thank you! We have a great time writing it as well.

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10,000 words ... too quick. The trend continues. :raritydespair:
I'm only joking, of course. I had thought the chapter began to drag on as we were writing it, although that might have been because we had gone over it so many times already and know where the story is headed. We must think on this. Thanks! I hope it continues to keep you entertained! :twilightsmile:

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:eeyup: Right back at ya!

Huh? I smell something!
...
That's the smell of potential!
Also,

"Alek...?" I asked, just above a hoarse moan.

Heh... Puns

This story fascinates me...

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Seems to be a popular reaction. :twilightsmile:

So...update please?

:raritycry: you post when I happen to be doing algebra homework

Why must you make this difficult:raritydispair:

My exact reaction in Devon's position would be "Oh... Oh crap... Erm... Hi?" XD

:rainbowlaugh: will our two inter dimensional travelers ever catch a break?

Now, that was just cruel.

... :rainbowlaugh:

Another great chapter! I can't wait to see more from this story.

-No, I take it back. Life only picks you up so it doesn't have to bend over to punch you.-

That is arguably the greatest final line I've ever seen. I'm looking forward to much more of this!

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I'm not sure I'd fare any better. :derpytongue2:

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:trollestia:

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Love hurts. :heart:

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Glad to hear it! :twilightsmile:

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Thanks. We've certainly got more to write. :ajsmug:

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Will your youger readers realize this sitcom reference?:trollestia: or will they call this a reference to family guy?:trollestia:

Love the new artwork

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It's quite lovely:yay:

May I ask who made it

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