An ancient threat is clandestinely massing across the world as Rarity and Spike seek for answers to his mysterious past; however, their journey leads to something much larger than they anticipated, something that will change Equestria forever.
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Ummm.... "Like Fine Wine." Some parts are almost word for word. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/2851/like-fine-wine
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Yes, I did use that and other such stories for help writing that part. I'm not all that accustomed to writing those scenes. I don't do them too often, but I tried to make it my own by putting my own thoughts into the scene and completely altering what happens as well.
Spike's anatomy is based off of some reptiles, which I learned during college, so that's not really copying. Everything else I made fit in with what was happening and what had occurred earlier in the story, and I thought I wrote enough on my own to make it new.
I didn't mean any disrespect to any of the fictions I took inspiration from and Like Fine Wine is one of my favourite stories out there. It was inspiration for this story in fact, sort of. I hope knowing that didn't take anything away from the experience of reading this; it truly wasn't my intent.
You made a mess out of the Dragon Queens bed sheets?
I had help honest!
It was only a small little bitty mess
OH Come On! you both where at bone city!
Sweetie Belle! wine stains ? Lava flows? dribble cups? Salami go seek? Just NO!
I want to see the mutant babies!
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I can tell you had fun with that one. That's the longest comment you've sent me. I suppose it fits with the chapter length. I was wondering if you would write something soon actually, and it hasn't disappointed. Glad to hear from you again. But I assure you, no bed sheets were harmed in the making of their "mutant babies".
7459359 Geesh Spike I wanted dragon relations to improve with your trip...
Oh Twilight it has improved quite well indeed!
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Relations have improved with one pony and dragon anyway. It's a start.
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Yay. Finally some constructive criticism.
I see where you're coming from with how Rarity is in chapter 11, and honestly I was worried about it. I did point out how she hadn't been physical with anyone pretty much since Spike left, but I know it kind of comes from out of nowhere (except when you think about the first time she sees him after four years and when she teases him about being taller and muscular in earlier chapters). To quote Family Guy, if I may, "I haven't had sex in four years." She's also in heat, but I didn't really know how to mention that, and seeing Spike sort of reminded her of her ahem past experiences. If anything, it makes her feel more confused and guilty. I will revisit it though and see if I can make this make more sense or feel less extreme. I was also really worried about how Rarity would look after this, so I tried not to mention her desires too many times. Thank you.
And the comic, yes, I forgot about that. Honestly, I think I will erase most of that part. It is meant to be kind of related, because I was planning on making a comic out of the premise, but I don't think I will be able to. The villain sounds dumb anyway, and his powers are convoluted and weird. Also, I had no idea what the proper term for the comic was and thought that would be sufficient, so that is why it said that. I can change it though, if I keep it. Rarity and I both know almost nothing about comic book terminology.
Oh, okay. I'll fix that.
Thank you. I didn't want it to be because she suddenly loved him or something, because she's known him as a friend for so long and all the new feelings would be confusing her. Spike being afraid to tell Twilight did seem to fit too, as did Rarity's arrangement in response. After all, she did go with Twilight and Rainbow Dash without hesitation after hearing about him leaving for the Great Dragon Migration.
I really liked that part too. I wanted it to be Rarity who showed him, to show how much they trust each other.
Haha, yes, I did see what you did there. Good one, my friend. I'm glad you liked it for the most part; this was probably the chapter that had me worried the most when it came to how people would respond.
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Thank you.
Yeah, I think Twilight has grown enough to know not to flip out over most things. He's his own dragon after all. It did make sense for Spike to fear what she would say, since he hasn't seen her in four years.
Thanks. I can't believe I missed that after all the times I've read this.
It does seem to get him into trouble.
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Sorry. I got a little carried away with talking about Roman political structure in this, but I wanted to establish how the giraffe society functioned. I love learning about anything to do with the Romans. I might shorten it, but I suppose it seemed okay since I tend to ramble on things I'm interested in. If I was in a conversation like that I would try to explain everything to her too. It is important to this story however, and I wanted to establish Spike as a humble but intelligent ambassador, but I can say no more.
Just know I never put anything in my stories without it being important in some later event.
Why would you want to do harm to Button's mom? And Button didn't give up video games, he just doesn't play them quite so often as he once did.
I know how you feel about the giraffe guy in One Piece. That was an annoying fight until the end, and I say "fight" loosely. The giraffes will be important later on.
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Hahaha, thank you. Pinkie is really fun to write for, I admit. I have that scatterbrained mind as well, which helps. I find I have to worry about her the most though, and make sure she is Pinkie enough. I like writing for all of the characters, really, even Applejack and Rainbow Dash to some extent. For me, I think Rarity is the easiest to write for though and definitely the most fun, given her little quirks. She's very amusing and adorable. As for Pinkie though, I think my favourite moments from that chapter were when she popped the duck balloon and when Rainbow was tickling her.
It is difficult to keep track. I have to establish their positions at the beginning of a conversation and then if I forget, I go back and make sure where they are again. If I don't know where they're standing or doing, how can I expect the readers to know? It's really a spur of the moment thing too, because most of the time the conversation bounces off from the first character to speak, since I know how the others would react in response.
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Thank you. I've changed the dragons quite a lot from what is seen in the show. You'll find out later, but their history is much more complicated. I liked creating Spike's origins, since there is no canon story about it. Free rein over his development and world building is my thing, so it was a bonus to give him some backstory and add to what is going on right now in the tale.
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I believe that pegasi, unicorns and earth ponies are all separate species too, but no one hates on them when they're together. I know; all ponies, but still, different species of ponies. Equestria also seems like a tolerant place to me, though there will always be intolerant characters. I also happen to make Linda a more tolerant pony to that sort of thing; she just likes seeing togetherness. She's not looking at species, she's looking at behaviour; how they interact with one another and the setting being what it is.
That's not to say that Rarity and Spike won't experience hate in their relationship, because they will, but that relationship hasn't begun. They aren't together, they're just seen as friends for the most part. Spike himself has experienced all sorts of hate and fear already for what he is and that's not going to lessen in this story. The same goes for Rarity in the case of meeting dragons. I wish I could make the hate seem more dark and wearing on him, and that also affected how he thought he was too big to fit through pony doors in chapter eleven.
Sorry about the rant, but I wanted to get my opinion across. Plus I just watched videos of Markiplier and Jacksepticeye talking about similar things, so that definitely affected this response. I'm not trying to change any minds here; far from it. I respect and appreciate the opinions and stance of everyone, but I wanted to say why I believe in Sparity. I'm a hopeless romantic in every sense of those words and I love to see love. I see it with Rarity and Spike.
Crashing isn't good, yes, but necessary.
Now Rarity can really brag to her friends that she got on the Double Dragons of Spike.
i feel a little bit of " like a fine wine" here ;0 for that you have my up vote my friend
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Thank you. That story is great inspiration for this chapter.