An ancient threat is clandestinely massing across the world as Rarity and Spike seek for answers to his mysterious past; however, their journey leads to something much larger than they anticipated, something that will change Equestria forever.
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Rarity being so damn horny is kind of amusing but I also really found it to be out of place, just because of how unsure she is of everything. Everything else is great though, especially the inner thoughts on how she feels.
Personal thing for me is you wouldn't call a comic a "five part comic series." That would be a five issue mini series. But it's just a personal nitpick of kine, and honestly probably makes sense unless rarity really got into comics
Also seems like a reaaaaaallly long section to discuss the storyline of a comic that so far seems unrelated to the actual story. I.e explaining the entire storyline when it seems irrelevant seems a bit much.
In one passage you use up right instead of upright
I REALLY like then discussing Rarity going with spike. It seemed really in character, and realistic and didn't make her wanting to go seem dumb.
The scene with him finding out he could fit through the doors still was really sweet as well.
All in all good chapter. Looks like things will 'heat up' from here on out
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Rarity, hun? Anxiety is not generally located betwixt the hind legs.
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Hehehe...no, I suppose not. She was feeling anxious though.