Well, I must be off my rocker, letting this chapter get so fricking huge I just hope it's worth it, and you guys appreciate it Anyway, I'm gonna be out of town for about a week, and trying to get my tablet fixed, so it'll be a while before I manage to get the third part ready. But don't fret, It's already in the works, and will be on it's way to you all as soon as it can
Also, the first chapter peaked (far as I know) at #7 on the popular stories list. All of my to you guys reading my chicken scratch
I suppose that Twilight's mind stopped working when either saw Bon-Bon deactivating her Glamor transformation or the fact that Lyra is making-out with a changeling... or the fact that Bon-Bon was a changeling all this time, anyway the next chapter will be great.
...but seriously, you have to do something with those over-abused spacing, they actually mess up the continuity while reading
642499 Yeah - it's partly due to the fact that whenever we hear her speak in the show, she seems to have a different voice each time.
Walkin' in on somepony is bad enough, but walkin' in on somepony and a changeling (when you have prejudice against them, like Twilight undoubtedly does) is even worse.
I'm not anticipating the forewarned 'clop' in this fic, but I'm very much okay with what romance you've written in this chapter: it's sweet and gentle I don't think this fic should need the mature-grade stuff, it'll be great even without it
642677 Thanks. And yes, I realize that. However, I do want to try and explore all aspects of their relationship, including the more intimate aspects. I also want to 'flex' my literary 'muscle' and see how well I can work a love scene in this context. I do, however, realize that it's not for everyone. So I will make it a point to offer a 'clop-lite' version of any chapter that includes love scenes. You can thank Peppy Greyskull for giving me that idea. So if you prefer, please be sure to read the censored versions if such content isn't to your tastes.
However, starting this Saturday, I will be out of town for a week, likely without much free time to write. The third part is already started, it'll just take a while before I can get it finished and posted. Sorry to make you all wait, but I shall not abandon you!
642747 You're a filly and what the fuck is this?! Hehe, just kidding. Yeah, trust me, at that age, it's almost expected you'll get places you shouldnt be. But just to be sure, when it comes out, be sure to have the 'clop-lite' chapter on hand. Just in case.
And don't worry too much about the clop stuff. I really don't see the problem some people have with it. We're dealing with anthropomorphized ponies; they may be in different bodies, but they have distinctly human personalities. And as Terence once said, "Homo sum, humani nihil a me alienum puto", or "I am a human being, I consider nothing that is human alien to me."
During the part where Lyra follows Twilight I imagined her turning towards the readers and in an Elmar Fudd voice she said "Be very very quiet. I am hunting Twilights"
The summary makes it sound like Twilight is a villain! I'm hoping Twilight isn't a dick about it. Can't really start reading this 'till tomorrow... 4:00 AM is not a time for reading more.
Liked the story so far. I hope that Lyra is overreacting and Twilight won't blast the changeling with her magic laser, call the guards or do something similar.
Just wanted to point out that you have mentioned several times in A Change of Face that the bedroom was on the second floor, yet Twilight can watch Lyra and Bon Bon through the window...
I wouldn't worry about chapter length. You're still far from the absurdity that is Fallout Equestria stories. Many of those have chapters over 8000 and even 10000 words long. Project Horizons' newest chapter is almost 29000 words long.
I really love this story. It's like you could read my mind and made a story that would fulfill whatever I imagined.
643661 This one is good, as is the prequel, and I have read smoke and mirrors and it's decent I'll have to try transcend sometime soon. But I'd like to point out one other by Razorbeam that's coming along nicely. Razorbeam also has a very excellent Rarity/Spike or Spike/Celestia shipfic if that's your thing. It's quite good. Teen rated.
Was I the only one that had the Pink Panther theme song stuck in my head during Lyra's "spy bussiness"? Oddly fitting somehow. You might as well change the title to "Windows and Cliffhangers" already if the two first chapters are any indication
Omg why this cliff-hanger. The tension is going to kill me. How could they not close the curtains right. Please oh please don't go horrible wrong. They were going to have fun. Lol Great story so far. Really looking forward to seeing what happens next.
643661 I don't know that any changeling fic will ever surpass Transcend, hell that story's one of the stories I can't decide between for the position of "best ship-fic ever" in my head. but so far this is coming in a close second. Very few errors, compelling writing style, well written characters, what's not to love? I'm interested to see where our intrepid author is going to take this.
But Twilight......Y U gotta be so naive? What do you think it means when you go up to Lyra and Bon Bon's house in the middle of the night and hear excited gasping?
651674 but then again her brain would stop working when they were at it and she would be clopping at them in the site she's hidden from them
but after that, Twilight would start to investigate what happen to the original Bon-Bon(The real in twilight's mind) and eventually she would find old news papers article of an abandoned wrecked cart at the bottom of a colapsed bridge
651174 Well, she IS a bookworm. She's only read about it I reckon. If you never saw the act done, what kind of noises would YOU associate with it? She probably only associates icky gooshy medical noises with it. Ppl like to imagine Twilight as a kinky librarian type but I think she would be worse at it than Fluttershy (At least she gets to see animals rutting) Twilight would be like Spike and his bachelor party gag in the wedding, she's heard of it, she has a general idea of what happens, but as to how it all works or feels like, she's drawing blanks. She would be mechanical as all hell the first couple times. XD
Well, I must be off my rocker, letting this chapter get so fricking huge
I just hope it's worth it, and you guys appreciate it
Anyway, I'm gonna be out of town for about a week, and trying to get my tablet fixed, so it'll be a while before I manage to get the third part ready. But don't fret, It's already in the works, and will be on it's way to you all as soon as it can
Also, the first chapter peaked (far as I know) at #7 on the popular stories list. All of my to you guys reading my chicken scratch
The spacing is kinda weird. All the paragraphs are chopped up
Please do something about the messed-up spacing...
I apologize for the weird spacing. No idea how it happened, but it should be fixed now
oh snap, this won't end well
INMINENT CLOP TIME INCOMING!
I suppose that Twilight's mind stopped working when either saw Bon-Bon deactivating her Glamor transformation or the fact that Lyra is making-out with a changeling... or the fact that Bon-Bon was a changeling all this time, anyway the next chapter will be great.
...but seriously, you have to do something with those over-abused spacing, they actually mess up the continuity while reading
Man, not that I'm complaining, but is Bon-Bon now the "Go-to" when we need a character to be a changeling?
Keep this up, I enjoy it.
I....I.....I..........
MMMMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
please.
642499 Yeah - it's partly due to the fact that whenever we hear her speak in the show, she seems to have a different voice each time.
Walkin' in on somepony is bad enough, but walkin' in on somepony and a changeling (when you have prejudice against them, like Twilight undoubtedly does) is even worse.
I'm not anticipating the forewarned 'clop' in this fic, but I'm very much okay with what romance you've written in this chapter: it's sweet and gentle
I don't think this fic should need the mature-grade stuff, it'll be great even without it
Was it worth it you ask? Um, duh?
This story-line is awesome!! Hee fang-face and harp-butt was my favorite part! I'm on pins and needles! Write more soon!!!
PS, congrats on making the featured box!
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Thanks.
And yes, I realize that. However, I do want to try and explore all aspects of their relationship, including the more intimate aspects. I also want to 'flex' my literary 'muscle' and see how well I can work a love scene in this context. I do, however, realize that it's not for everyone. So I will make it a point to offer a 'clop-lite' version of any chapter that includes love scenes. You can thank Peppy Greyskull for giving me that idea. So if you prefer, please be sure to read the censored versions if such content isn't to your tastes.
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Hehe, thanks! And I plan on it!
However, starting this Saturday, I will be out of town for a week, likely without much free time to write. The third part is already started, it'll just take a while before I can get it finished and posted. Sorry to make you all wait, but I shall not abandon you!
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good story.
oh my god im speechless... that was awesome, im 13 so i probably shouldn't read this but yea this inset i just hope someone dosent stand behind me who knows what they'll thinkencrypted-tbn0.google.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcRcrcR44TOhFQ8KV6RsZb0PwH5kHNd1rBAE1ION35P3ShgbxWIZgXHmwBIx
moar pleze
642747
You're a filly and what the fuck is this?!
Hehe, just kidding.
Yeah, trust me, at that age, it's almost expected you'll get places you shouldnt be. But just to be sure, when it comes out, be sure to have the 'clop-lite' chapter on hand. Just in case.
Talk about "eye candy".
And don't worry too much about the clop stuff. I really don't see the problem some people have with it. We're dealing with anthropomorphized ponies; they may be in different bodies, but they have distinctly human personalities. And as Terence once said, "Homo sum, humani nihil a me alienum puto", or "I am a human being, I consider nothing that is human alien to me."
MOAR
FOR THE LOVE OF CELESTIA WHAT HAPPENS NEXT?!!!
Maybe the scene will be so shocking that Twilight will fall into a coma! Or at least unconscious.
Oh, Bon-Bon. You just have the worst of luck, don't you?
Don't do anything stupid, Twi.
Please think first. You're almost as good at thinking as you are at overreacting.
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Unfortunately her thinking usually leads to more overreacting.
Just found this fic, and the previous one! Best changeling fic i have ever read!
Have a moustache!
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Even better than Transcend ?
Me personally, I can't possibly choose. Both...Too...Perfect!
Smoke and Mirrors ain't too shabby either
... Twilight asks to join in?
During the part where Lyra follows Twilight I imagined her turning towards the readers and in an Elmar Fudd voice she said "Be very very quiet. I am hunting Twilights"
The summary makes it sound like Twilight is a villain! I'm hoping Twilight isn't a dick about it. Can't really start reading this 'till tomorrow... 4:00 AM is not a time for reading more.
I have really enjoyed this story so far, and am glad it's getting the attention it deserves, but... I hate to "but".
Seems you use the term "beloved" alot. ALOT. Um. Just an observation - loving it all otherwise! Just trying to helpfully point out... er. That.
- *whimper*
Liked the story so far. I hope that Lyra is overreacting and Twilight won't blast the changeling with her magic laser, call the guards or do something similar.
Just wanted to point out that you have mentioned several times in A Change of Face that the bedroom was on the second floor, yet Twilight can watch Lyra and Bon Bon through the window...
I wouldn't worry about chapter length. You're still far from the absurdity that is Fallout Equestria stories. Many of those have chapters over 8000 and even 10000 words long. Project Horizons' newest chapter is almost 29000 words long.
I really love this story. It's like you could read my mind and made a story that would fulfill whatever I imagined.
643661 This one is good, as is the prequel, and I have read smoke and mirrors and it's decent
I'll have to try transcend sometime soon. But I'd like to point out one other by Razorbeam that's coming along nicely.
Razorbeam also has a very excellent Rarity/Spike or Spike/Celestia shipfic if that's your thing. It's quite good. Teen rated.
Visionary
Such a good Story! WOW, can't wait for the next chapter!
Was I the only one that had the Pink Panther theme song stuck in my head during Lyra's "spy bussiness"? Oddly fitting somehow.
You might as well change the title to "Windows and Cliffhangers" already if the two first chapters are any indication
As always, eagerly awaiting more.
Volkova
Eeyup! the best changeling fic.
Must be the lyra and bon bon aspect
thank you for the story
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Heh, that's cause they couldn't wait to get upstairs, and just used the living room couch.
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Twilight is just being Twilight
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"Pony season!"
"Changeling season!"
"Pony season!"
"Changeling season!"
"Pony season!"
"Changeling season!"
"Pony season!"
"Changeling season!"
"Twilight season!"
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ur crazy... but im okay with this!
man i guess if i saw lesbian horses going at it my heart would stop too lol
(nothing against gay ponies i find them lovely lol)
Please update when you can. I love these types of stories!
Twilight: me gusta.
Omg why this cliff-hanger. The tension is going to kill me. How could they not close the curtains right. Please oh please don't go horrible wrong. They were going to have fun. Lol Great story so far. Really looking forward to seeing what happens next.
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Cause I'm an evil, evil author, who makes you all wait an entire week while I'm out of town before knowing what's going to happen
645882 How awful. lol
Twilight be creepin' while they sleepin'.
Obaby, I didn't know twilight rolled like that
643661
I don't know that any changeling fic will ever surpass Transcend, hell that story's one of the stories I can't decide between for the position of "best ship-fic ever" in my head. but so far this is coming in a close second. Very few errors, compelling writing style, well written characters, what's not to love? I'm interested to see where our intrepid author is going to take this.
But Twilight......Y U gotta be so naive? What do you think it means when you go up to Lyra and Bon Bon's house in the middle of the night and hear excited gasping?
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Hmm... i think she'll be more likely to think the changeling is eating her or something
651674 but then again her brain would stop working when they were at it and she would be clopping at them in the site she's hidden from them
but after that, Twilight would start to investigate what happen to the original Bon-Bon(The real in twilight's mind) and eventually she would find old news papers article of an abandoned wrecked cart at the bottom of a colapsed bridge
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Well, she IS a bookworm. She's only read about it I reckon.
If you never saw the act done, what kind of noises would YOU associate with it? She probably only associates icky gooshy medical noises with it. Ppl like to imagine Twilight as a kinky librarian type but I think she would be worse at it than Fluttershy (At least she gets to see animals rutting) Twilight would be like Spike and his bachelor party gag in the wedding, she's heard of it, she has a general idea of what happens, but as to how it all works or feels like, she's drawing blanks. She would be mechanical as all hell the first couple times. XD
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zackly
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Stumbling on this series was the
-BEST-
-POSSIBLE-
-THING!-
Well written and sweet. :3