A purple pegasus named Azure Evening goes exploring in the haunting Everfree Forest. But the obvious fate of the filly quickly took place, yet she still came out of the forest. She wasn't the same filly coming out she didn't know anything. When she arrived back in her home town she was taken into an orphanage. She made friends there even though there were many bullies. She gets adopted to a family. New challenges came. Will she be able to face them?
Creator: Lightened Dark
Editor: Pileoblock
Chapters (4)
Awesome! Its out!
i like it....im not good with detailed critsisum but still looking good
excuse me... where is the rest?
In chapter 1
"She would earn allowance"
An a goes in there.
"how much work they do."
do should be did I think.
"long route by stop at Sugar Cube Corner "
you can remove stop. just figured I help point these out. you also might want to add commas in places and replace some periods with them.
6172415 Are you a good editor? Do you like editing and pointing things out?
6172423 no I just figured I point them out.