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Spike has always loved Rarity, and She knows it, but what happens when Spike accidentally drinks a love poison and falls in Love with someone else? Who has he fallen in love with? How does Rarity feel!?... you'll have to read to find out.
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I like it.... More?
Could use a once over from the grammar fairy. It is interesting though but I must confess Spike seems a little smarter then to just fuck with the potion. Shits dangerous and he has no idea what hes doing after all.
I have been waiting for someone make this fic of Spike and love potions.
loool
Tracking
And plz MOAR!
Interesting concept but a few things;
1. Some spelling errors like a few tings and uou feeling alright otherwise not that many.
2. Choosing Zecora as a character and trying to portray her can be difficult since she always rhymes. This was not pulled off that well.
3. I agree with Bookworm. The plot kind of feel into a hole when Zecora actually made a love potion for Spike. She would never do that because it's against her character and such.
4. Now you gone on and made me wanna look for Twike fictions...
You got some errors and the plot feels a little "sloppy" but other then that I like it. its nice and I always like me a good spike story.
I think you made Zecora sound a little sterotypical if you know what I mean.
I still like this though and hopefully Zecora will mix up an antidote before things get out of hoove.
GRAMMAR NAZI TIME!!
"They seem a bit... wierd don't they Twilight?" Rarity said as she put the flower back in her bag.
639648 Me and you are going to get along PERFECT! Anyway...back to the story...
Alright, it felt very, very rushed, like so rushed that I almost skipped many of it just to get to the bottom, and that's never a good thing. Asoo, Zecora was WAY OCC, like so much you might as well change her into Applejack with the way she was speaking (with slang).
In my own eyes, I HATE Spike/Rarity pairings and am a complete sap for Spike/Twilight pairngs 100% so to be blunt, that's the whole, reason I'm going to stay with this fic, it may seem very harsh, but at least you will get my honest feedback and a favorite....although I would not mind whatsoever if it goes from Twilight to other mares, I'm down for everything save for Spike/Rarity.
good
Allow me to tell you that this is by far the WORST incarnation of Spike I've ever seen. Why? Cuz there's a difference between being desperate and reckless, and being just plain stupid. I mean how dumb does one needs to be to find it convenient to take a drink from an unknown portion in which you accidentally mixed another 3 unknown ingredients, from a vial that just a few moments ago had yet ANOTHER unknown potion?
Not to mention that you made him kind of a jerk, since he doesn't give a crap about making a total mess around Zecora's house.
Funnily enough I love the Spilight pair. And I love even more to watch Rarity regret her lack of appreciation for Spike, so I might as well keep an eye on this one.
Fuck, Spike!
The fact that this only has one chapter, and said chapter has mistakes, not much character interaction, and incorrect personalities, makes me know I probably won't enjoy this later. Sorry, but ima have to cut it here. Maybe next time.