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The SideKick


I do stuff that might fall under your purview of "Good Writing". Perhaps you would dain my work as the opposite. Either way it's here and you may look upon it and draw your conclusions thusly.

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"You" have been watching your mom swoon over Octavia for a while now, and you finely think it's time that you did something about it. You have worked out the most amazing plan ever and your not afraid to use it. With it mom will at last be special someponies with Octavia!

Was bumbling around /mlp/ and made a thing. You might enjoy it, you might not, it's here either way. Updates will be very infrequent. They are also being presented to you as is, only edited to fit the general rules of the site.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 37 )
Bynoan #1 · May 28th, 2015 · · · 5 ·

Not a fan of the HiE thingie normally, but this is rather amusing :twilightsmile:

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"Is THAT what Nonners is? I had always just thought he was like a really cool monkey that some idiots didn't want to keep."

"Hey mom, do you think if we looked for "humans" instead of "Super advanced monkey people" at the library they won't kick us out this time?"

"Maybe, but I've never heard of a "Huemin" before, so I don't know..."

"What if we just ask Princess Twilight? She's just right there."

"Anon, why would PrincESS TWILIGHT SPARKLE'S STANDING RIGHT THERE?!?!"

"Yeah, she's just been there smiling with her head tilted at us for the last couple of minuets.

*Thump*

"Oh come on! Not again mom!"

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I'm a silly monkey, aren't I?

So much D'aww!!!

i hope it doesn´t stays this short, please take your time and make 1000, or 2000 words for every chapter, i haven´t read the story yet, but i like the idea enough to be concerned about the short chapters.

Not bad for the first chapter, i don´t know if it is the different writing style, i mean that the reader is the main char, but well it seems a bit short, but at the same time it looks like a prologue.

Honestly i am not sure what i had just read, was it something like a crazy Octavia?, did she had a breakdown? I am at least half serious about it right now.

To short, and it seems rushed, like a bad One-shot.
Sorry if i sound mean, but it is not often that i have to say something like this.

edit: after i had seen the next chapter this one seems to be just a bad alternate chapter.

Texus #7 · May 28th, 2015 · · 2 · 2 ·

This chapter was better, but still short, i guess i would had liked to read more about them as a family first, but i am not that sure what exactly i expected this time.

Texus #8 · May 28th, 2015 · · 1 · 3 ·

Well i start to like it, but it is still a bit short, and i think i would like it if everything would not look like it would happen so sudden, probably because the chapters are short.

Till now, after i had read everything, it is a nice enough story, i am not sure how i should say this, but i think i would like to her the thoughts of everyone.
I guess i mean that i would like to read a bit more about every situation, maybe a bit more detailed, what they think, or how they are acting?
I really can´t explain it good enough right now, since i am a bit tired, but i hope you understand it a bit.

Maybe it only feels so different, because it is written with (you) all the time, not that it would be bad, but i am not used to it.

However i guess you could let the scene play out a bit more, even if it is still short, for someone who reads pretty much, i think the chapters should have at least 1500 - 2000 words, never less than 1000 words.

That could give you more up votes i think.

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These are re-posts of green texts I did on the 4chan /mlp/ board reedited to fit FimFiction. While I've done my best to refit them appropriately for the site, their still short little pieces. I've done no special editing other wise to them. Honestly these are just filler while I work on my bigger projects. Just enjoy them for the dumb little pieces that they are.

"Mom, what you talking about? You're Vinyl Scratch, DJ Pone3, the most confident and independent pony I know!"
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6028900 well okay, then i have to say for what they are, they got more or less good enough in the end.

A cute start for a cute premise.

This took a really weird turn, making Octavia cockney. I also can't say I really like how this suddenly made Vinyl a bad mom. Still, I'll keep an open mind and see where this goes.

Oh. That's what the last chapter meant by "non canon." Much better, though I think you could afford to add more length to these.

This was cute. I like Vinyl and Anon's relationship, very friendly yet still parental.

Short, a bit rough, but CUTE!

No! You got me hooked! You better make more and fast! :flutterrage: I'm dying here! :fluttershbad:

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Read the description, sorry:applecry:.

This reminds me of Frankie Boyle

And uh...how many bits is it for one of those X-marked tapes?

6083956 25 per tape, 125 for a live show, 250 to join in.

6033041 WHYYYYYYY:raritydespair: This is a good story-hee-eee:raritycry:

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I'm working on a lot of different projects at ounce, this is just a little something to do on the side. I promise one day it will have an update, just not any time soon.

I like the new chapter, but it's kind of hard to tell who's talking. :rainbowderp:

As was your trademark you didn't even think before you said-
"It was an accident."

:rainbowlaugh: I almost busted a gut on that one (not my own, mind you:pinkiecrazy:).

6622193 Same here I was confused who was talking once in a while. Great story though! I would love to see more!

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Just a general risk of transferring green texts to a more standard format. Like I said in the description I'm not doing any special editing for this, just reformatting it appropriately so it abides by the sites "No green text format" rule. Sorry about the confusion, but I'm sticking to my guns on this one, so I can only apologize for the issues. I'm glad you still enjoyed it though!

When your looking for us we'll be the green monkey thing and the blue and white unicorn.

green monkey thing? What the heck am I!!!!

How's it coming along?

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the update still has not happened and thus the fun will not be doubled

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Beastboy

RIP to this MF, arrivederci bitches

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