• Member Since 12th Nov, 2013
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ColdFlame


The morning is EVIL.

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Through some haywire spell or random portal, you found yourself in Equestria a few months ago and have since adapted fairly well. It took a bit of time, but you're for the most part content in your new life. You have a job, house, and friends in Ponyville with everything seeming to click together for once. When Hearts and Hooves Day shows up, you question how happy you really are and if things really are any different from your old life.

Note: Keep in mind these aren't meant to be overly thought provoking or deep, just simple romance stories. Also, I know most references indicate the "you" in the story is a guy, but I tried keep it as gender neutral as possible. Credit for the heart picture goes to Archive-Alicorn on Deviantart. Thanks for the read and be kind to each other in the comments.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 3 )

You didn't have to rush so much from the realization to the kiss, you know. As it is, it felt forced as hell.

Also, show don't tell. You bizarrely show a scene entirely, then you proceed to tell four or five ones in a single paragraph.

Point of the matter is: slow down!

Slightly repetitive but still cute.

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