Gravestones

Luna and Celestia, last survivors of the long-gone Discordian reign, recount stories and memories before the graves of those that they loved so much.

First story in the Graveverse/whatever I'm going to call this universe.

Side story: Pages in the Notebook

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Iron Comet

Iron Comet #1 · May 19th, 2015 · 3 · 1 ·

Storys like this remind us that things happened in the past that no one remembers. People have lived, loved, and died and aren't even remembered. And in Equestria at least, two sisters can still remember.

Iron Comet

Iron Comet #2 · May 19th, 2015 · 1 · ·

5995864 Bub, I don't read fiction to remember. The buddy's I have lost remind me well enough. And some of them have no graves.

Doctor Derpin

Doctor Derpin #3 · May 19th, 2015 · 1 · 1 ·

5995864 That is the sort of comment I would recommend keeping to yourself. It will do nothing but start problems.

Doctor Derpin

Doctor Derpin #4 · May 19th, 2015 · · ·

I give you a thumbs up because there is plenty of promise here. There were a few parts that felt mildly awkward and the dialogue felt a bit off, but that's just something that more practice will fix.
Overall, I'd give this a 7/10 for a one shot. It could easily go up to an 8/10 with just some mechanical improvements.

NeverEatTheLemonsAlone

NeverEatTheLemonsAlone #5 · May 19th, 2015 · · ·

5996674 This was a somewhat spur-of-the-moment writeup, done in five or so hours, so it's somewhat unpolished. I'm improving all the time, and comments like this help. Thanks a ton!

Doctor Derpin