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A month and a half ago, my life was changed forever. My nephew and I were plucked from Earth and ended up in a land that we both believed to be mindless entertainment. Now forced to begin our lives anew, we have to restart our lives in this new yet fimiliar land. Thankfully, we aren't the only humans here.
A story set in the universe of The Humans in Equestria Club
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Is this the first side story to THiEC storyline? It's an interesting, and somewhat technical verse. I look forward to reading more of it, to see a point of view that isn't just Alex.
Make sure to give Rose some love
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Don't worry, Christophe won't be a bug hater
He'll be creeped out but not hating
Oh, a gryphon, huh?
That might be interesting, but I do wonder one thing:
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Why exactly would it be that hard to write with those talons? Let alone hard enough for his lettering in part one to be noticeably larger?
Hell, Discord has more or less the same configuration on his 'eagle' claw as the gryphons do, and he snaps that one constantly. Not exactly something a normal eagle can.
From how it looks in the show it should be like writing with work gloves on. Harder, sure, but not enough for it to actually change your... well, pardon the pun, but hand.
You could go for there being some difference between FiM gryphons and 'real' ones, of course, but otherwise you might want to make a few tweaks to chapter one.
That rather lengthy nit aside, I'm enjoying this so far. It's really different from the original, but so far in a good way.
My only big complaint is that so far this doesn't stand on its own legs. It really feels like a small side-story you need to have read the original, larger work to get the details off.
Still, a promising start at least. Hope to see that streak continued.
6054981 It could be the little differences that cause magnified changes in script. Thickness of fingers, density of the skin itself (remember, they do walk on those as well), the number of fingers, the length, the articulation, even that fact that they end in talons rather than blunted tips would all affect the writing.
I'll give him another chapter to explain the cause and reason behind the transfer between worlds and such.
Also Bluey; it would help if you noted somehow that the prologue happens a month after the first chapter.
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Fair enough counter-points, but if anything they make it so that there really should be more of a difference to his writing than just a slightly larger font size. So again, it does strike me as a detail in need of more work.
Do agree with the other two points, though.
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Ahh, well, I was just thinking of em as a little bit less dextile than human fingers to be totally honest
It's only just started, I plan on having it get off it's feet
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Yeah, the other two were big in my mind
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I'll fix that momentarily
This really is much better accomplished as a blog post with the story linked to it. Everyone who's paying attention to the story will get the update because of the link, and you won't have mods getting angry at you.
In fact, I'd suggest removing this and doing the blog post just in case. Story padding (adding non-update updates) really is quite frowned on.
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I'll do it later...