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Zanem-Ji


Founder of "Let's Make You Known!" Group. Wazzup.

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Twilight's an Alicorn, a race that is known to have a lifespan that borderlines eternity. So of course, she knew it would be hard for her to have that special somepony that she would love for the rest of her life. But with a bit of magic and science, she was able to make a special somepony that would love her forever.

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Hah, I get it.

“I do…but is has been a while since I’ve been able to enjoy the sun.”

Needs some editing still, but cute.

The Blue Lagoon and it's sequel Return to The Blue Lagoon are better love stories then the Twilight Saga.
Lethal Weapon 4 is a better love story then the Twilight Saga.

5946335 The only one that isn't is Ramsey Bolton and Theon Greyjoy

5946335 Event Horizon is a better love story then Twilight? :rainbowlaugh:

Comment posted by TheMTVGAMEONE1 deleted May 6th, 2015

YES A TWISHY FIC OMIGOSH YES!!!
Nice!

...Yes, STILL a better romance story than Twilight.!! ...heck, this is, in fact, a NICE love story on it's own even!

With that, she gave her another pick

*peck, but apart from that it was very nice, and definitely a better love story than Twilight

I really like this

Oh, my yes. I'm so happy! A decent Twishy story!

I like it.
I't nothing spectacular, but i like it.
Maybe another chapter (alternate story line kind of ting) wear Fluttershy actual loses control, but instead of kill mode she turns Twilight. Just a thought. Still a good story
~Tobben

This is adorable!
Dat title tho!

Good story, decent twishy. Though at first I thought that fluttershy had taken over for luna (I assume twilight took over for celestia). Great twist

Nice story my friend. Keep it up!

Yup, the title can't be more correct <3 But enough of saying the truth about bashing on 'Twilight' and say some nice things about this piece of art =3

Great job :pinkiehappy: Was a cute little story, would love to read many more like this~

Was that a 'thousand years ' reference ? I love Christina Perri , she sings beautifully

One! That's... one thumbs up! Ah ha ha...!
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Seriously, though, that was very nicely written. Well done! :twilightsmile:
There's one minor grammar mistake I can spot, but that's a bit of a nitpick from me, so I'll keep it to myself. Unless you're interested, of course!

6259145 I dont mind criticism and advice. Generally if I dont catch it before its published, I wont catch it for a while.

Such an interesting idea. I wish this was quite a bit longer, there's so many story opportunities here. Obviously the vampire story is something we've probably all seen a bit too much of, but I think Twilight's role more than makes up for that.
I'd love to see the dynamics of their relationship explored. Twilight is a princess, presumably well loved and respected, Fluttershy kills to live. Does she simply get the pass for being Twilight's lover? What do Celestia and Luna think of this? Twilight might be willing to turn a blind eye because of love and loneliness, but I doubt the other princesses would accept Fluttershy killing or turning their little ponies. And a thousand years is a considerable time to come to terms with something, yet the killing and even Fluttershy's appearance and body temperature still bother Twilight, an aspect of their relationship that had so much potential to build on. Unfortunately considering the title I'm pretty sure this whole thing was meant to be a joke, and I suppose I have to join every other commenter here: yes, this is a better love story than Twilight.

Twilight gasped. Fluttershy was directly in front of her, her face mere inches from Twilight’s own. She had never been this close to her when she was like this. She didn’t realize just how much taller Fluttershy was than her. The Vampony leaned in closer. Twilight had gotten a lot better at flying than when she first attained her wings. But even now, after all these years, she knew she could not out fly the Fluttershy that was standing in front of her. The one that had the blood line of an ancient creature that was built to attack from the sky. She tilted her head just a little, as if she was going to drive her fangs deep into Twilight’s jugular. Instead, she aimed a bit higher, and planted her lips on Twilight’s cheeks in a kiss. When she pulled away, Twilight was looking at her, completely stunned. She leaned for a second time and whispered, with her throat still dry as dust,
“I have loved you for a thousand years…”
With that, she gave her another peck, this time on the lips, and took off into the night. Twilight rubbed her cheek like love struck filly, while she watch the Vampony dive bomb into the city, seeking out a suitable prey. When Twilight finally lost sight of her, she finished Fluttershy’s sentence,
“And I’ll love you for a thousand more…”

aaaaaaaawwwww:heart::pinkiehappy:

I made Fluttershy into a vampony in one of my stories, too. It's my thought that the vampire fruit bat thing infected her with vampirism, Twilight's spell cured her of the fruit-desire and of any current vampire traits, but when she dies, she'll end up a real vampony. This was adorable, but I always pair Fluttershy with Discord. :fluttershyouch:

A MUCH better love story than Twilight.

ok is no one here worried at all that twilight just let a vampire lose in canterlot and dosnt plan to stop her

twilight and fluttershy has to be one of my favor pair, those two are so cute together.

Is this title taken from a Kevin Smith quote? I recall hearing him saying that the dynamic between Bruce Wayne and Alfred was better than Twilight.

7161624 Nah, the title is just taken from a the fact that every love story is better than 'Twilight'.

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