Daniel Blaze is a human who’s has lost the few people he had close to his heart and has experienced nothing but pain and suffering for years. But all changed when he was brought to a world ruled by anthro ponies, and other mythical creatures.
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This was heavy Naruto fan stuff right here XD
Kewl
Ok 2 questions will he get a naruto bloodline and how is he watching videos without an internet connection?
6213301 Daniel has no blood line with Naruto, but a certain someone called the spiritual energy called chakra. Secondly, Daniel has no Internet on his computer since he's no longer on Earth. The reason he's able to watch videos like the one he and the others watched is because he downloaded the videos from Youtube a long time ago before he came to Equestria.
I think you rushed a bit, Rainbow wouldn't just realize her mistake so quickly and be ready to apologize overnight, she's to stubborn.
6213353 I know that. I'm not perfect at everything.
6213376 Nobody is, I'm just giving some criticism.
This was pretty enjoyable if not just a little rush.
Anyways
Just because She the element of loyalty Doesn't mean she can't make mistake. She does alt of it all the time in the episode. Here three separated video to help me explain it.
you could watch the whole thing but watch the Pacific time at 2:34 to 2:43
Here a review from Fiery Joker on "Double Rainboom" look at 12:40 to 14:29
Here the true video that explain what I'm getting at.
Don't take this too personally, just take it as you won't be as bad a they trying to make it. I did mention on the last chapter on my comment that Rainbow Dash is a black belt in karate and train Applebloom a little bit. Well except the Applebloom part , but I did mention the former.
6214304 I'll take any good compliment I can.
love the back to back uploads and the story
keep them coming! :)
NEEDS MORE FLUTTERSHY!!!
Ooh this is so interesting.*rolls any phrase I can*
Same here, I love AFV!
6799525 Same.
This was awesome read it was sweet and had a awesome fight .
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Was telling me... that he was correct
Green - means the correct statement
Red - means incorrect
Dark Orange - means that there's two options, one or another.
And you just had to. Didn't you.... Ughhhhh you fuck boy. This is by far the worst chapter so far. I mean seriously that whole bit about how chakra came to be could have been left out. And this would have been a good chapter. Hell it would've been an excellent chapter. Fuck I'm gonna still read this shit, but the whole chakra back story is getting bleached from my mind. Here's my new cannon he's from the far off future of Naruto. One where everyone forgot how to use chakra due to the increase in technology. After getting transfered to a new world and after several life threatening battles. Our main character has unlocked the ancient abilities of his ancestors. Gaining a whole new level of power due to a long lost, and ancient ability called chakra manipulation. That's right he has awoken the long lost abilities of the shinobi. How will our main character use his new found powers to better the lives of his friends and loved ones find out next time on Equestrians Human Spirit!
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You know in hindsight I was a bit cruel in this comment. But that's only because this chapter had such great potential..... You could've made something great with the chakra explanation.... But then you just basically retold the Naruto Chakra story. Again I get it, you love Naruto and you want to pay homage to it. But, you could have still done all of that just by him having the jutsu's from Naruto. While still having a good back story as to why he can do it. But to just take the sage of six paths back story, and then replacing a charecter with one of your characters to force it in to your story. Is just cringe worthy to me man. Maybe it's just because I'm a huge Naruto fan, and that is literally sacred ground to me. That you just stepped all over, and triggered me. Maybe that or I just don't have a life. And to be honest with you if you had just put the Sage's story in unedited. I would've been perfectly okay with it. It would just mean that he is from the Naruto universe, and it would've explained everything about your charecter and his ancestors power and durability. All I'm saying is you could've handled this better. But after rereading it it's a decent chapter it's not the best you made, but it's decent. I'm still keeping my head cannon about the chakra back story though.
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I agree.