"I'll take a blue vest, the same as my blankey. Which I think I hear calling my name. 'Spike! Spike! Come to bed!'" - Spike, Episode Eleven.
What if... Spike wasn't actually that far from the truth?
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I should point out, I'm not actually aiming to develop an overall plot (at this stage
). For now, I intend for this to be a short series of drabbles, in which I can practice using the voice of various characters in narration and prose, showing and not telling, and other things that are liable to disappear into the depths and cobwebs of my brain should I stop writing for more than two days. 
As you can see from what was supposed to be a vague approximation of Twilight, I've got a fair way to go.
Feel free to offer any con-crit if it springs to mind!
(By the way, just in case anyone is waiting for Grand Prix to be updated... It is coming. Three months, two re-writes and a myriad hysterical emails to an ever-understanding and -patient beta-reader later, and I've come to a much better solution. Both of the opening chapters will be re-written (for prose reasons rather than plot), and I intend to do so by early June, and the story will continue from there
)
I like how you write, but don't waste time on your already-overused metaphors! Keep it simple. Nobrony wants to spend hours trying to figure out what you wrote (I, myself, love your style of writing; it's just that some bronies aren't as advanced as you are)
keep writing!