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Despite the failure ringing in her ears, Rainbow Dash is able to move on from one of her less-successful flight forays. However, just as she overcomes her own problems, a certain pink mare gets entirely the wrong idea.

(Edit as of 02/01/12: Some slight alterations to clear up something I only very loosely hinted at first time around. And I made Soarin' sound less of an airborne blob.)

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#1 · Nov 3rd, 2011 · · ·

Well, that was a nice feel-good short story, and a pretty damn decent subversion. I reckon you can feel proud of having made it. :eeyup:

A very heart wrenching and heartwarming story ^.^ I loved how you really showed what makes them strong friends.

#3 · Nov 3rd, 2011 · · ·

cool story. liked it. especialy the transformaation into Pinkimeta Dian Pie.:pinkiecrazy: that was good.
there now you have something to read and some feedback.
disregard final line.
random ponyface spaming time!:rainbowderp::flutterrage::derpytongue2::coolphoto::yay::moustache::eeyup::twistnerd: yaaaaaay...

I know exactly which fics you're referencing, and I approve of your repudiation of them. Well done. :twilightsmile:

Lol, now I'll only laugh at all 'Dash kills herself' stories. They hold tryouts twice at year, come on, nothing to kill yourself about!

Nice. As others have said, this is vastly superior to the ol' "Dash is so distraught she tries to off herself" trope.

Bravo! I agree wholeheartedly. The despondent Dash stories do hold some appeal for their emotional impact, but they're way overdone. Way to turn the tables and put the gut-punch on sompeony else for misjudging her! :rainbowdetermined2:

Simple but really nice to read.

PFT

Very well written story! Not so slow that it feels like nothing is going on, yet not so fast it feels like you're just trying to get it done as fast as possible! :pinkiehappy:

#10 · Nov 6th, 2011 · · ·

Pinkie has been using the fourth wall to read too many "Dash commits Suicide" stories.

All my ponies.
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#13 · Nov 6th, 2011 · · ·

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#14 · Nov 6th, 2011 · · ·

This is the first thing I thought of after I read the first "Dash commits suicide" fic. What the hell, seriously? She wouldn't kill herself. She's the Element of Loyalty, and that doesn't just pertain to her friends: She's loyal to herself, too. If she wasn't, do you really think she'd succeed in performing the Sonic Rainboom a second time? She failed endlessly, but she never gave up. Dash is too stubborn to let something like a little failure get in her way.

So screw your tragic suicide stories.

#15 · Nov 6th, 2011 · · ·

Am I the only one that sorta kinda thought maybe Pinkie'd get depressed instead and be the one to commit suicide? Just kinda felt like that might have been a possibility...

#16 · Nov 6th, 2011 · · ·

Never read a "Dash commits suicide" fiction (too smart for that) but this would throw them out of the barn, I'm sure. Excellent work.

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:
Spike's seal of approval
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#18 · Nov 6th, 2011 · · ·

Wow, not only is this an entertaining fic in its own right, but it kicks those Dash suicide fics in their collective asses. Well done! :rainbowlaugh:

I haven't read any "Dash commits suicide" stories, either... but this story is a perfect remedy. Thank you.

:rainbowdetermined2: will make it next time!

oh finally THANK YOU.
I've been WAITING for somebody to finally say something about the downright PLETHORA of dashie-suicide fics out there. Yes, it's sad, heartwrenching, and deeply-moving...the first time. After reading the same damn story for the 3rd time it gets old. I see this as a bit of a call-out for people to think up a new story for a change, and I thank you for that. Dashie said it best herself: “did you seriously think that I’d…kill myself?!”
Kudos, author.

#21 · Nov 9th, 2011 · · ·

I think it's really close to story ,,To fix you", with another Rainbow suicide. This story have in all reasons that Rainbow shouldn't jum of that cloud. This is like an another beggining of ,,To fix you" but with happy ending. You should read it first..

:rainbowhuh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild::rainbowderp::rainbowdetermined2:
R.D. FTW!!

While I have no idea what all these "Dash commits suicide" fics are about(other than the obvious, of course), I'd like to point out that people are mistaken when they think being the Element of Loyalty would prevent Dash from committing suicide, because it harkens to a mistaken belief that suicidal people are all selfish.

Those with suicidal thoughts are not mentally healthy. They're not thinking straight, not looking at things the same way as you might. It's very easy to convince yourself, when you're not mentally healthy, that offing yourself is actually beneficial to your friends and family, if you feel like you're a burden. In a mentally disturbed state, Dash could easily convince herself that she was living up to her Loyalty by removing that burden.

Of course, she'd be wrong about what she's doing, but she wouldn't be doing it because she's being selfish, but because she, in that state, would honestly believe it's for the best.

Now, do I think that Dash would actually turn suicidal if she failed to get into the Wonderbolts? Of course not. I simply take issue with the viewpoint that suicidal behavior is selfish, and had to explain why it wasn't.

On an unrelated topic: My back hurts

Zof

i really liked that story and i do not like many:scootangel:great job:pinkiehappy:

This just showed up in my alerts for being added to groups. According to FimFic I haven't read it, but I know I have. I just wanted to say that it's nice that somebody has perspective. Dash would no more kill herself over the 'Bolts than Pinkie would kill herself over being snubbed for a party. Could she go through a lot of mental crap that affects her behavior? Sure, but with all the crashing she does trying to perform tricks Dash _knows_ that you don't always nail something the first time.

Now for the parts I like less.

The ponies never really seem to identify themselves by their Elements unless those happen to be in play. Dash doesn't go around thinking "I'm loyal" anymore than Pinkie thinks about being Laughter. They just are. There's an old blog post someone did, Donny's Boy maybe, where he talks about why Dash picking Tank works so well and why Dash is floored at the cheering after she saves Rarity and the 'Bolts. Loyalty and being loyal aren't things she dwells on. She just is. It's not remarkable to her, just part of _being_. The reason she won't kill herself is because she's not the kinda pony to let a setback stop her. Maybe there is a "don't abandon" thing in play, but it's not something she'd be consciously aware of.

I only spend so long talking about it because it's one of those subtle points that really gets to me on occasion. Pretty much everything except Dash's overt reference to her Element is great.

outstanding keep on writing

Never read a dash suicide fic because this would be how they end, misinterpretation from dash's determination :raritywink: great writing, can't wait to see more of your stuff :twilightsmile:

25660 No I was thinking that too. Especially with that short summary xD

25660 No I was thinking that too. Especially with that short summary xD

Cute, but much too short.

as someone who deals with sucide I'd just like to say. Fuck you! People who commit sucide are not selfish and you claiming people who do that are disloyal and that you attack people who commit sucide is disgusting!

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