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What if our favorite Lord of Chaos visits the cutiemark-less town before the Mane 6 did?
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misskoifishpony
Hello Fluttercord Fans and shipper fans alike! My name is MissKoiFishPony, but you can call me Miss Koi or Missy:) I love My Little Pony, I love to write, I love Fluttercord.
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Like i said before, thanks for accepting my request.
This story turned out better than expected. I had to laugh at Discord's antics. It is still a great story :)
A few mistakes here and there, but I really liked this story and the crazy things Discord did with his powers.
Wait a minute.
Chaos Magic
A floating island?
Discord created Angel Island confirmedHe´s only allowed to create "good" Chaos now that he is reformed - but since this village got far too much Order, adding some Chaos will push it towards Harmony.
Very nice story. And yet another story I would gladly use the Discord emoticon for if there was one.
I find this really creepy, actually.
Instead of the townsponies choosing to reclaim their destinies, Discord simply implants something in their minds. I hesitate to call this 'good'. Isn't this exactly what Starlight's being doing the whole time?
I think Discord might need a bit of practice at this "good chaos" stuff. Nice try, though.
5848815 Not really. The concept that "change will happen" does nothing to counter the idea that everypony should be made equal; indeed, because the rest of Equestria has cutie marks, equalizing it would be change.
All Discord did was force them to open their minds; whether they accepted what they heard or kicked it out again was up to them. Starlight Glimmer is a good example of that.
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I'm sorry The Great Derpsby for creeping you out with my story, that wasn't my intention at all, I just wanted to make a funny story in honor of the first episode of new season
Thank you, dragonjek, for sparking an interesting yet wonderful discussion with The Great Derpsby in the comment section.
Thank you also for defending my story by stating how not creepy it is, I appreciate it
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And I'm sorry if my post came across as attacking the story or blaming you in any way. It was merely the feeling I personally got, it has nothing to do with whether I think the story is good or not!
Which I do, by the way. I think it holds up fine!
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I shouldn't have pointed you out like that, please forgive me. Thank you for reviewing and liking my story, I deeply appreciate it.
Oh my, I'm so sorry for misunderstanding your review, I apologize
I'll give this a like.
5848567 yes this site does need a discord emoticon preferably one with him laughing manically. also we need tags for the Resistance.
Regarding the jackalopes, they have antelope antlers on their heads, not deer antlers. Great story though.
Caught
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Thank you also for reviewing and liking my story
Haha lol finally somepony caught on to my reference! Thank you for the awesome Bugs Bunny video
Like a... moth?
This old fan song made back in Discord's evil days was the first thing that came to my mind when I saw this story:
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How come this one isn't popular around the fandom? It sounds like a song that the actual Discord should sing in the show. Anyway, thanks for sharing the song with me, you're right it sounds alot like my story.
Hoped you enjoyed reading my story
I've never heard of this song till now, and let me just say, it's a great song
Perfection,haha!!!!!! Loved Discord's pranks haha!!!!! Great story!
I LOVED IT! I wish there were more stories with Discord and Starlight's interactions like this!
Hello there, Miss Koi! Well, I see you've got a few comments on this story, but I thought you might do well with a slightly more critical review, so if you'll indulge me...
The idea is an interesting one. Discord being Discord is fun, as it usually is, and you've done well capturing his character and presenting him in this story (including the Bugs Bunny joke - it's been done but I always appreciate a good "Looney Tunes" reference). Starlight Glimmer is also presented well, acting very much like I'd expect her to act in this situation.
But other things keep this story from being better than it is. Party Favor running away from something "different" is just plain silly. The townsponies didn't freak out when Twilight and her friends showed up, so there's no reason for them to lose their heads over something being a little out of place (the talking cactus would freak anyone out, granted, but not because it's "different").
More concerning is the lack of proofreading. The story is just full of errors that keep distracting me from the plot. Let's hit the most glaring error first, though: tense shifts. The story starts out in past tense, then shifts to present, and switches back and forth throughout the tale. Basic rule of fiction-writing: pick a tense and stick with it. The other errors are individual and fairly minor, but still, let's take a sample:
Now, my intention here isn't to tear you down or make you feel bad. But as a guy who's been around writing original and fan works for a long time, I like to help out my fellow writers, especially when they show such creativity and potential. And I do like this short story, despite its flaws. Please keep up the good work!
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Your review was extremely helpful and flattering, so trust me, I didn't take it the wrong way
I always welcome constructive criticism, and you had a great constructive review
I believe that constructive criticism helps writing, and my goal is to become a better writer and improve with each story. I will go back on this story and make those changes you suggested to me. Thank you for complimenting ne on my creativity, my portrayal of Discord and Starlight Glimmer, and my little Looney Tunes reference
Yeah, it's been done before with Discord, but I couldn't help it. It was just too fun and I love Looney Tunes
Yeah, I kinda had to exaggerate the personalities of the townsfolk in order to make the story for comedic. You keep up the good work too and have a lovely day
Dear The Hat Man,
Thank you thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story
5962130 You're very welcome! One small tip I would give is to read over a story/chapter at least twice from start to finish before actually publishing it. You can avoid a lot of those little pitfalls with some meticulous checking. Or, if you find yourself not terribly skilled at that sort of thing, you can try to get a reliable beta-reader to examine a chapter before publishing.
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R u interested in being my editor for grammar and such for future stories?
I will use that tip for future stories and chapters, thank you
5962507 Hey, sorry for the delayed reply. I got a nasty cold right about the time you replied and haven't been watching my inbox too well. I'll send a PM about it in a bit.
Wonderful. Really fun. Discord is well in character.
Discord would likely puke his guts out and have to be carried away on a stretcher due to have mind numbingly orderly every was, a place utterly and completely devoid of chaos, devoid of surprise, devoid of uncertain, etc.
Oh wow
Dear Misskoifishpony,
[This is just my opinion]
Personally, I thought your story was great. It was funny, and creative. You've got potential. Although there were some grammatical errors, this story was great otherwise. The idea was fabulous, and it was fun to imagine the pony's expressions. It would have been cool if there was a real episode about this. I for one, loved it. So, I hope you get a lot of likes and keep writing funny, creative, and good stories.
P.S. Wouldn't it be cool if something like this would be in Season 7 or the MLP Movie?
[Again, this is just my opinion]
Happy New Year,
-Lily Blossom
5863592 I didn't notice that! I haven't watched Bugs Bunny in a looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong time.
Thanks for the video!
Happy New Year,
-Lily Blossom
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Don’t they also drink blood?
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Not that I know of, I've never heard of them doing it.
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seriously!?
bugs bunny!😂