Soarin's Story

by 1cy_Sparkle

Chapter 2 Earth

Part2

The trees almost doubled in size and they started to grow closer together. "The Everfree Forest" whispered Soarin'. He had never had the chance to see such a sight. The trees seemed to grow forever in all directions. To his right side about ten miles to the south lied the Sourstone Swamp. To the west he saw a different kind of tree. They seemed very domestic to Soarin', as if they're weren't supposed to be there. But when Soarin' looked again he could make out not part of a forest, but an orchard. He was seeing an orchard. His excitement seemed to halt as he approached the farm. He'd used up most of his energy flying throughout the forest which made him hungry. He didn't like to be hungry but he did love food. And as he flew closer, that's just what he saw. It was an apple orchard. "Apples," thought Soarin', "I sure could use a good apple and some hay right now."

Soarin' sped up to get to the nearest tree. He got there in no time, landing on the soft, fertile soil with unease. He hadn't walked on the solid ground for a long time. Clouds had a different texture, not as stable and it didn't sink our hooves into the ground. They were comfortable though and that mattered to Soarin'. But when he picked an apple, someone was immediately hollering behind him. "Who are ye and why are ya here?" Soarin' was very startled to see somepony sneak up on him. He quickly snapped his head around and hollered back "My name is Soarin', I was coming here.."

"I know who you are" said the pony a matter-of-factly. "Good to meet'cha, Soarin', my name's Applebloom ye hear."

"Well hi there Applebloom, the same to you as well. Hey, do you think I could find something to eat around here? I'm famished!"

"Sure thing, Soarin'! Follow me, my sister Applejack'll fix ya up with some grub!"

As they walked to the farmhouse, Applebloom asked "What's life like up on Cloudsdale?"

"Fun"

"Just...fun, huh? Doesn't seem like it if you say it like that!"

The truth was, it wasn't all that Soarin' dreamed it would be when he was just a filly. He thought about the fame and the glory of being a Wonder Bolt, but it was more work and less play then he had wished for.

It wasn't long before they got to the barnhouse and Soarin' was greatful for that, not only because he was hungry. It was hard to hold a conversation with this Philly. After all, he didn't really know her, for all he knew, she could be a witch. He chuckled at the thought and focused on the food he was about to indulge in.

Applebloom was the one who knocked on the door. They waited for an answer. They heard hoofsteps draw near, muffled on the other end of the door. It opened, a young pony was standing at the door, one hoof crossed over the other. Her mane was a bright blonde with a ponytail in the back. (Yes, it was a PONYTAIL) She had three white freckles on both her cheeks. She was a calm orange color and sported a leather cowboy hat. She smiled at Applebloom and shot a straight glance toward Soarin'. "Howdy 'y'all! My name's Applejack. Applebloom, who ya got here?"

It seems that he knew this character from somewhere but he wasn't sure where. Applejack could tell Soarin' was tired and needed some food. She brought Applebloom and Soarin' inside the farmhouse. It was better on the inside than it seems on the outside. The kitchen was spotless, with everything in their own place. The eldest of the ponies was at the burner making some fresh apple fritters and other treats. Soarin's eyes gleamed at the sugary pastries. Applejack saw his delight and let him have at anything he likes.

Soarin' rushed to the nearest seat and dug in. Apple pie, apple tarts, and even apple cider. That was what got to him. The apple cider.

"That cider is hoof-made fresh" Granny Smith spoke up.

"Howdy, I'm Granny Smith and I established this joint and all of Ponyville!"

Soarin' was surprised! This was the pony who founded Ponyville? he thought.

"And this here part is Sweet Apple Acres, the finest orchard in all of Ponyville. One might even say in all of Equestria!" said Granny Smith

"It's so fascinating that YOU were the one who founded Ponyville! This is quite an honor! But I'm afraid I'll have to leave now. I must leave if I wish to see who sent me the fan letter. Here's four bits for your troubles!"

"Daw shucks, Soarin', we don't want your money" Applejack said peach fully. "Your company is enough payment for all of us!"

"Oh but I insist, it's the least I can do!"

And with that, he flew off before any pony could argue. As he rose into the sky, he saw a sunset sinking over the horizon, with Ponyville resting in the distance.

Comments

[8-bit Bacon]

619409
it's no excuse for saying "English is not my Native tongue"

I for one, not a English speaker. you only need a good editor.

and separate dialogue from paragraphs, unless the dialogue will be in paragraph form

[Jewbacca]

619441

That wasn't the only problem, my friend...

Plethora-upon-plethora of spelling and grammatical errors, not to mention that your paragraphing is a bit too uncommon.

It's understandable if this is your first fic, nopony is a good writer on here when they started out, even me, still, you need to get a proofreader to check your next fic before openly publishing it.

[1cy_Sparkle]

620074
My editor lives in USA, and he is pretty good, but still we are just humans, everyone of us makes mistakes.

[1cy_Sparkle]

620180
...hmmm. yeah, I had 5 pre-readers... but then my friend edit this and so i didn't remember to get pre-readers.... ahhh silly me

[1cy_Sparkle]

Yeah... If you could read my version and compered that to this, You would be amazed. And i really don't see why you have to post so much hate on so little mistakes...
1cy