A Shimmercorn is born!
In Equestria, near senset....
Twilight Sparkle was very happy with herself as she reached her castle's library. She had some time of from her current adventures with her castle's 'Map of Friendship's Need'. Or at least that was what she was calling it, Rainbow Dash thought the name was lame. Levitating a well worn book with a picture of a sun on it in her magic's aura, Twilight approached a mirror set near the back of the library. Giggling, she placed the book in the receptical of the device attached to the mirror. It was a creation of Twilight's; and with it, she planned to surprise her friends in the human world. As the device finished its warmup cycle and the portal opened, Twilight finished jotting down a letter to Spike. She even finished it with an apology and a promise to bring him a bag of his favorite human-world snack, as she knew how much her number one assistant would hate missing out. With the note placed prominently where the little dragon would see it and with happy anticipation, Twilight stepped through.
Hop through the Portal! Jump In!
As Twilight picked up herself up of the walkway in front of Canterlot High School, she noticed the sun slipping below the horizon. Wondering where she would sleep the night away at, she heard a strong voice sing out above her. Looking up, Twilight caught sight of Sunset Shimmer standing on the school's roof staring at the setting sun. Wondering what was going on with her friend a few words reached her. "Power, was all I desired...." As Twilight listened, she swore she could hear a musical accompaniment to Sunset's singing.
Worrying that she may be losing her friend, Twilight saw Sunset turn and walk away from the roof's edge. Glad that Sunset didn't seem about to jump to her demise, yet unsure how to help, Twilight found her self just listening to the song her friend was singing. Sunset's voice reached her easily, even though Sunset was moving around on the roof. Listening to the words, Twilight realized that Sunset was singing a song about how much she had changed. Finding herself overjoyed at the message of how much their friendship meant to Sunset, Twilight began remembering all the stories the human versions of her Equestrian friends had told her. Stories of the hardships Sunset had faced at the school after her redemption at the Fall Formal. The new clothes don't look to bad on her either.... Twilight mused.
Glad that Sunset was moving on with her life in a more positive way, Twilight leaned against the edge of the statue that formed the other end of the portal. Listening with to the other girl's song, Twilight let her eyes close so she could focus.
Later....
Sensing a shift in the world around her, Twilight snapped her eyes open. Shifting her eyes back to the roof, she saw Sunset illuminated there in the rays of a new dawn. Twilight gasped silently as several things registered in her brain. She had stayed there through out the night, Sunset was apparently singing the same song, and... was that a magical aura surrounding Sunset Shimmer? Staring with mouth agape, Twilight watched as Sunset levitated off and away from the school's roof before growing a pair of magical flaming wings and a flaming pony tail. Sunset's hair also flowed upward as if blown be an illusionary wind, causing it to look like a roaring fire.
Feeling something inside her responding to the sight, Twilight was unprepared for her own transformation. In an explosion of magic her hair extended to give her a 'pony-tail' as it had during their battle with the Sirens, and her wings had appeared again as well. In addition she was surrounded be a magical aura similar to Sunset's but purple in color.
Sunset was feeling better than she ever had in her life, except maybe when she had gotten her cutie mark. Looking at herself, she couldn't believe what she was seeing. She had wings! Honest to goodness, wings of fire! And a tail again! And she felt her magic again, something she never thought would be.
Sunset's perusal of her changes was interrupted by an explosion of purple light below her. Looking down, she saw a perplexed Twilight Sparkle. In all her sexy alicorn goodness... Sunset smiled to herself. "Hey, Twilight" she called. She watched as Twilight slowly started to ascend towards her, then gaining a little speed with a goofy smile on her face. She was however not ready for the sudden burst of at the end, or the near bone-crushing hug that Twilight gave her. Well it would have been bone-crushing if it had been any of the other girls but Twilight. Nor was Sunset ready for the barrage of statements and questions. She sounds like Pinkie when she's inquisitive....
"It's so good to see you! But what happened? What was with the singing? Are your wings really made of fire? How were you able to use magic? How am I able to use magic here? Are you a phoenix? No, your tail is like a pony. Are you an Alicorn? Wouldn't it be awsome if you were an Alicorn? I'm so happy for you!!" Nor, alas, was Sunset ready for the kiss.
Twilight came out of her nerd-gasm to find herself kissing Sunset. "Sorry, sorry, sorry..." she kept repeating in shame, as her face blushed brightly.
"Um... Twilight? I didn't mind, really. Thanks!" Sunset reassured the purple princess, with a sheepish smile on her face. Twilight stopped saying sorry as she adopted a twin of Sunset's smile.
"Um, let's see... I don't know. It's a long story. Yes. I don't know. Again I don't know, but Rarity told me of dream. I don't know, again. Ditto. It would awesome if I am. And... um... I'm happy for me too?" Time spent with the pink-loving party pony/girl had readied both for conversations such as this.
"What was that about Rarity and a dream?"
" She told me of a dream she had recently, where she was magic-ing new clothes for people by shooting a white light at them from her hands."
"Rarity always thinks life is a runway whether she's a pony or a human."
The two giggled at the similarities between the two fashionista counter-parts. They stayed like that for a couple of seconds before Twilight gasped as she released Sunset. "I gotta go do something! Wait right here!" With that statement, the purple princess flew like a blur back to the portal's opening.
Sunset waited a little after Twilight left, thinking about the kiss and the princess behind it. Then, not wanting to draw unwanted attention to herself, she floated back to the roof. Wanting to test a theory Sunset closed her eyes, she then blended thought and want into a matrix forgotten during her stay here. She smiled and opened her eyes and she felt both her backpack and discarded jacket settle into her hands. Yes! Eat your heart out Trixie.... After waiting a few more minutes, in which she saw students start arriving at the school, she donned her jacket and was picking up her backpack; when she felt the special book within start to vibrate. Taking it out, she read the latest entry. She then reread it, tears falling to mingle with the stains of others appearing there.
Twilight galloped out of the library at full speed, yelling for her dragon compatriot. She continued yelling as she exited the front doors of the castle, only to stop in her tracks at the sight before her. Getting out of a pegasi-drawn chariot was Princess Luna and Princess Celestia. Twilight stammered out a greeting for the two before inviting them inside.
As soon as the trio entered the castle, Luna magically closed the door behind them. Turning her attention to Twilight, Celestia explained the purpose for the visit. "We have felt the awakening of a new alicorn, Twilight. But neither Luna, nor myself have been able to find her. We were hoping to use your castle's map and its... unique properties."
Smiling happily, Twilight proceeded to tell the two sisters about Sunset's transformation as she led them to the library. As Twilight was concluding her tale Celestia removed the book from the receptical, shutting down the portal at the same time. Turning to her sister, she nodded and Luna levitated the mirror-device out through the library's door and then out of the castle altogether. Turning to a stunned and bewildered Twilight, Celestia passed her the book.
"It's as I feared. It appears Sunset Shimmer is now the Princess of Friendship in the human world. And as such, we can no longer allow you or anypony else to use the portal."
"But Princess, I don't understand?"
"As she has taken on your mantle over in her world, it would be too dangerous to both worlds for the portals to remain accessible. You know this, Twilight. Now, I will let you write her a letter explaining everything, but then I'll be taking the book and placing it somewhere safe. Sunset and her friendship council will have to protect their world."
Nodding quietly at her mentor's words, Twilight took a quill and wrote Sunset Shimmer the longest friendship letter she ever had written. All as the teardrops fell.
Sunset finished rereading Twilight's last letter to their friends while they sat uncomfortably around Applejack's barn. Rarity was laying unconscious across a hay-bale since she had mock-fainted near the beginning and then really fainted later. The girls all sat quietly, save for a few sniffles, as Sunset came to the end of the last page and closed the book. She looked around at her friends s she remembered the end of Twilight's letter.
PS: Remember that no matter what happens, friendship lasts through the ages.
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F*** YOU, CELESTIA!...
Ugh, this is why I never voted you as best pony...
I demand a sequel... Forgive me for my early outburst...
I don't think that means what you intended it to mean...
From what I hear the wings were a visual metaphor, not an actual transformation.
Good fic nontherless.
I don't think I'll be giving this a read, but I thought I'd make note of something.
In the image this story is probably based off of, Sunset Shimmer's hair is flaring up, while there is another bit of flame coming down behind her. This might be mistakable for the normal empowerment mode shown in both movies(I myself had to do a double take, I'll admit), but note that there are no pony hybrid ears, nor is the item that could represent the tail attached to the head hair like normal. As such, I don't believe this was intended to be a representation of alicorn ascension. Rather, I think it is a representation of a Phoenix. More particularly the new beginning and confidence associated with the bird's rebirth cycle.
That nerd-gasm nitpick aside, I hope the story does well in spite of the (easily made, and possibly fan favorite) misinterpretation. Though her eventually becoming an alicorn after a journey of her own in-spite of her fall would be kinda cool, IF HANDLED CORRECTLY.
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Just went with my own head canon here.
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I second that notion.
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Dang it! I was hoping for a sunlight story and I thought twighlight would ignore Peincess Celiestia and go be with SunsetShimmer after the kiss oh well good story though
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Nothing wrong with that. /)
I see what you did there with the end...
5841218 Then write your continuation of this... I'd like to see what you would come up with (just remember to cite)
5842571 Did you?
Just the end? 
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No, it's explicitly a rainbow power form according to the toy, the only human rainbow power form toy in fact.
They didn't show us twice and then tell us once during Rainbow Rocks reinforcing the rules that The rainbow can't be accessed without the Elements then have Sunset break that rule without a reason.
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This is extremely out of character for celestia.
5847074 Actually, it was confirmed in Twitter that it was a visual metaphor.
https://mobile.twitter.com/ishih3art
5847074 Have you read the IDW comics? I drew a little inspiration from there. And I did use the AU tag (not criticizing, just pointing it out)
5847126 I just liked how they had the magic effect and how it seemed to resemble Twi's from the MMC episode. As well as their portrayal of similar with Rarity in 'Life is a Runway'. The closest we've seen of magic-casting in EqG-verse (human-side) so far was the Rainbow Wave produced by Sunset and Twilight in 'Rainbow Rocks'.
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Rarity makes pretty casual use of dress space in rainbow rocks.
Also pinkie pie.
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Then that's a bad use of metaphor on their part, they use the magic sparkles and such before the transformation with magic now becoming a part of earth permanently and sunset getting her full magic back, and this is a setting where achieving a transformation based on personal enlightenment is possible and a setting conceit.
Furthermore it's released alongside a rainbow power human Sunset Shimmer toy with a similar if much gaudier design, and she during the movie breaks the rules they heavily reinforced during it up until that rule breaking.
If I wanted to do metaphor i would have stuck with the sun rising and not done the magic sparkles.
Your story has quite some potential, it's a really nice take on the songs.
But I have to say, it feels kind of rushed. The whole story seems like it's skipping parts of the story.
5846995 and the rest.
Personally, it's my head-canon that, because magic is rare in the humane world, 'Friendship' and 'Magic' are decoupled and are separate Elements. The human Twilight will ultimately be the Bearer of the Lavender Light of Friendship but, as the only permanent resident of the world who has inherit magical abilities from the outset, Sunset will be the Bearer of the Scarlet Light of Magic.
You have the framework of a story, a skeleton without any meat on the bone. It's not a satisfying read and is worth a downvote all on its own.
It's very easy to read Twilight/Sunset shipping into the middle. Better than Flash, still terrible.
The ending...doesn't make sense. Celestia's claim doesn't make sense read straight and it doesn't make sense with an unreliable narrator. Twilight's reaction is equally bizarre. Don't get me wrong, if Equestria Girls dropped into the fiery pit of acid where it belongs I would be fine with that, but you can't do that in-universe without breaking Twilight one way or another.
It's a conclusion, but not really the most satisfying conclusion. I can't see either Twilight or Sunset accepting Celestia's reason and not even attempting to contact each other through their book again, let alone Twilight going through the portal (or Sunset, for that matter, since she is native to Equestria). All Celestia says is not to use the portal, so taking away the book as well seems an unjust cruelty if she can't give an excellent reason for doing that (besides 'it might tempt you', which would still show she has too little faith in Twilight/Sunset). I can see Twilight deferring to Celestia, but Sunset not so much.
Also, you really need to proofread. This is the first three sentences, with two spelling mistakes. It's a lot like this throughout.
Should be 'sunset' and 'off'.
I'm really on the fence about this story, the idea itself it's rather interesting but I'm afraid that the excecution of it is the problem, the "romance" (if you want to call it that) is far too rushed. We literally don't know a thing about they relationship and we are expected to jump on a kiss.
Also Celestia actitude seems out of character for what we know of her and as others have pointed out neither Twilight or Sunset will accept this without some good explanation; as I said the idea for a great story is here but you need to slow down and explain
This needs more to make it a good or great story. It does seem as others have said to rushed. You need to slow it down a bit
"Hop through the Portal! Jump In!" was that a reference to "Friendship is Witchcraft"?
PLEASE MORE SHIMMERCORN PLEEEAASE I BEG OF YOU
IMO, the new look and hair color change were the best part as Sunset looks better than how she used to be prior to the BOTB.
That last part, I did not see coming.
wait what!
This story was great but the ending was dark.