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The Cage of Crystals

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A short writing exercise (a drabble, I do suppose) concerning Cadence's experiences being held prisoner by Queen Chrysalis under Canterlot in the season 2 finale, before Twilight finds her.

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I won't be surprised if it's more an exercise on "how not to write". xP

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Dragon Emperor Geon

Dragon Emperor Geon #1 · May 9th, 2012 · · ·

Gotta "claw" it to you, this is a lovely read. Short, sweet, it feels as though I'm right there, listening to her. I feel bad for her as well. So Pidgeon. you get a 1-up from the Emperor.

All Hail Me.

Clever Eagle

Clever Eagle #2 · May 9th, 2012 · · ·

This was wonderfully done. I love your characterization, and the sense of hopelessness that you portrayed so well. One small thing, "To think that the form she had first appeared to Cadence had been such a innocuous, naive one..." The wording is a bit awkward, at least to me. I had to re-read that sentence to understand what it meant. I think adding the word "in," between appeared and to, would fix it. That was the only tiny mistake the disrupted the flow of the story. Otherwise, it was great!