Pegasus [noun]: a winged pony resident of Equestria with the ability to walk on clouds and manipulate the weather.
A pegasus' most defining feature is its ability to fly. But what happens when a pegasus is born without wings? Would you even still consider it a pegasus, even though it retains all other traits typical of a pegasus pony? This is the story of just such a case -- a story about a pegasus coming to grips with just what it means to "earn your wings".
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Where every other fic contains "omg I'm a pony lets go meet rainbow dash!" it's nice to see something original.
Chapter was rather short. I imagine if there's something you could do to improve it's your speed, as well as focusing on not making yourself censor every single sentence you put on paper. (I do that, still have trouble) All I can really say is if these characters were in fact written using character sheets, don't stick too close to them. Characters are complex things, like people.
Nice start on your fic. Try to aim for longer chapters, at least 3k words, and if you're censoring every word that goes on paper... stop. You can proofread it later.
Very interesting. I really cant tell where you're going with this but it seems to have potential although I rarely read unfinished fanfics so I probably wouldn't know. All I can say is that the thumbnail is awesome. It rally gave the whole story a different feel
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Thanks a lot for the critique! I will definitely take that in mind for future chapters. Size was short, I'll admit, but I was mostly testing the waters. I haven't written a fanfic since I was 12 -- I have a bad inclination to write Insert Sue-fics and I learned the easiest way to avoid that was to write original fiction! Sleet is her own character nothing like me, though, so I know there's little chance of that happening here.
Out of curiosity, would you say the censoring occurred more after the dream, or during it? Or just at the same levels all over the board?
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Thanks! I feel honoured then, if you don't usually read unfinished fics.
It was actually the next best thing considering I have zilch drawing skills and it's not as if I could find a lot of premade images of my own OC! But I rather like it, myself.
I'll be tracking this for later.
Quite an interesting fic I hope to see more chapters of this
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Thank you! I'm not going to lie, though -- if my track record is anything to go off, updates will probably be rather... sporadic, ehe.
The second half of the first chapter has been re-written somewhat, because let's face it, I just rushed it to get it up as soon as possible to see if the idea was interesting.
Excuses, excuses... It's still lacking.
Another story with an interesting premise seemingly abandoned after just about 1350 words. What a pity.