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GeodesicDragon


I am a Scotsman who writes stories, not all of which are of the self-insert variety. Books are available again; check my userpage for details.

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It's coming up for Mother's Day in Ponyville — which just so happens to be the same day Ariane Apple gets back from a visit to her family in Manehatten.

But her absence won't prevent Applejack and Big Macintosh from making the necessary preparations to make sure that she has the best day ever.

AUTHOR'S NOTE: Joint winner for the UK of Equestria's Bi-Monthly Fanfiction Writing Contest, the theme for which was Mother's Day (as if that wasn't obvious enough).

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Comments ( 4 )

it was actually really good until the last part, you were building up this cute, SoL story, and then boom parents dead

no explanations, seemingly random and out of nowhere and then the story ends without an explanation

maybe you might want to extend the story or have better build up to it than they did all that stuff, went to bed and when they woke up their parents were dead

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You're looking at this from the wrong angle. The whole point of the story is to make the reader believe that they are going to be treated to some fluff involving a young AJ and Mac and their mother — only to have this bombshell dropped on them at the last second.

I don't need to expand it any further, as I think that it works fine just the way it is.

However, I do respect your opinion, and I thank you for it.

(before clicking on the story) Oooh, this is gonna be so cute and fluffy and adorable and sweet and...

(One viewing later)

[youtube=youtube.com/watch?v=vzw_EfAk9Is]

I totally called that ending..

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