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Lucien Bubblegum


I think that I'm Tom Cruise

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Okay then *back away slowly* favorites story

A little strong like black coffee thrown in the face, scolding hot.

5715354 Same here.
Approach with caution.

Good attempt, but a few typos and mispellings, but still a good attempt. And hot, very hot.:ajsmug:

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Sorry if I went a bit hard on my first fanfic.

Wow...this is kinda amazing. If this get's turned into a whole story I know it's going to be excellent.

This was a good story! One thing I would recommend would be to re-read and fix some of the spelling mistakes. I know that for me personally, it detracted from the enjoyment. Overall, very good!

Nice job with this chapter; very hot and kinky.:ajsmug::duck::raritywink:. There were also typos, but still a hot chapter nonetheless.

the only thing I do not like about this is the fact that Spike essentially looses consciousness for the act (like the fact that he doesn't remember anything about it) and I feel that this might easily be alongside the best Spike harem fics if he were to learn how to keep his mind in tact (for example, having that side as a different mindset: from "never hurt anyone" to "they love it and I'm gonna give it to them (because I love them)")
but that might just be me

"How come I never make noises like that?" Pinkie asked Rainbow

I could almost see Dash taking this as a challenge to her love making skills...

I don't think the Cakes are going to sleep well for a while with all the noise

Kinda disappointed we don't see how things turn out after. Rarity definitely wants to do that again, but does she? Is it just a sex thing? Does it become a relationship with the 3 of them? The ending with the rest of them is funny, but I am left wondering. Also, the baseball bat... I laughed so hard.

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The intention was to have Spike take out his sexual frustrations with Rarity and Applejack every now and then, Spike and Rarity would remain friends on all other plains. However, that is my view, you can interpret it in your own way.

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Also, I had no idea how similar the second chapter to this and the first chapter to Spike and His Six Lovely Ladies are.

A++ for sheer hot and kinky clop and a solid A- for the pretext to bring Rarity into the relationship.:moustache: You really should consider doing a sequel where Rarity gets tired of just sex with AJ and Spike and wants to be part of their relationship or something.:raritywink: Possibly falling in love with Spike (finally) and trying to steal him away from AJ. Really shmaltz it up with feelz and dawz and add a shit load of drama.:raritydespair::ajsleepy::raritycry: Plus there will be the chance many more new avenues of clop.:pinkiehappy: Just a thought...

Awesome. Now we just need more about Pinkie Sense. :rainbowwild:
Imagine if they had sex during the day, and Pinkie kept getting triggered at the Sugarcube Corner. :trollestia:

Applejack happily welcomed this new change in her lover. With her previous relationship she had always been the dominant one, it even scared a few of her previous boyfriends away. But now she saw things at the opposite end of the spectrum, she loved it! After her and Spike's awkward previous sexual encounters she finally got to see his dominant side. And she loved it! He was beast, finally giving into his most carnal desires, his primal instincts were finally released and all focused on one thing. Fucking the girl in front of her witless.

I would more think she would be concerned for her coltfriend. Only when she would be sure this isn't dangerous would she think these things.

I would have liked the Applejack being dominant part to last a little longer.

I do think it's better than the first. The only thing is that I would have loved it if we spend more time with Applejack teasing Rarity.

If she did her blush would become nuclear and most likely would of killed all the inhabitants of Ponyville and Equestria would suffer from the nuclear fallout.
This amused me.

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