After their defeat at the hands of The Rainbooms Adagio Dazzle and Aria Blaze decide to leave town and leave Sonata Dusk behind, now without friends and her Siren powers the happy go lucky former Siren is feeling very sad and lonely that is until at lunch time that Fluffle Puff and Chrysalis decide to befriend her.
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Well, I can't really say this was a great story.
On the one hand, I'm happy for Sonata; she's with characters who could genuinely be friends with her, and she would enjoy Fluffle Puff's company. Seriously, I'm surprised there hasn't been some fan work featuring the two of them happily munching away on tacos.
On the other? I feel like this needs a serious proof-read and edit. There's a lack of detail here, and while a lot of detail can be bad, a little detail can help the scene immensely.
So points for the story, but the execution's lacking.
5642514 Thanks for the feedback I appreciate it a lot.
10/10 also start digging Adagio and Aria's graves
5642514 I hard noticed any grammatical errors but eh what are yah gonna do
5659729 I'm glad that you liked it.
Adorable!! Sonata and Fluffle = Taco Empire!
5781629 I agree, I'm glad that you like my story by the way.
5781848 You're very welcome :)
I enjoyed it. Sonata is cute!
5784276 True not only is she cute though she's also funny as well.
5784628 damn right!
Great story, though the ending feels kind of rushed.
Hm... I think you made Fluffle a little too communicative? Like when Sonata offered to share her tacos, I think having Fluffle give a happy gasp and bounce a bit would be more IC.
Also, don't EqG Chryssy and Puff live with the Marker from Dead Space? That'll be awkward to explain to Sonata.