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HiddenBrony

Joined July 2011
384 followers

The proprietor of the series known as 'Sweet Special-Nothings'.

Well known for the story Hop, Skip, and a Jump! And First Date.

Also wrote the Conversion Bureau tale, A Mare's Tail.

Stories (18)

  • Memories We Never Had
    On a cloudy day, four friends find refuge at Rarity's Boutique over a barrel of cider and reminisce of a life not truly their own.

    4,880 words · 5,622 views · 767 likes · 12 dislikes
  • A Package for Scootaloo
    Scootaloo loves to watch Rainbow Dash train, but she's interrupted by Derpy, Ponyville's mailmare.
    5,492 words · 4,512 views · 337 likes · 5 dislikes
  • The Literary Appeal
    Cheerilee gets an unexpected invitation from Ponyville's librarian, but her mother has other plans.
    44,441 words · 12,345 views · 1,443 likes · 40 dislikes
  • The Time We Have Now
    Rainbow Dash is accepted into the Wonderbolts, but one pony sees their time is running out.
    8,989 words · 2,312 views · 164 likes · 5 dislikes
  • Hop, Skip, and a Jump!
    15,337 words · 3,649 views · 121 likes · 5 dislikes
  • Friendship is Rubbish!
    3,074 words · 940 views · 56 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Discord's Reign
    8,691 words · 2,026 views · 56 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Equestrian Writers' Convention
    20,849 words · 2,581 views · 90 likes · 7 dislikes
  • Eggheads
    3,440 words · 1,950 views · 42 likes · 2 dislikes
  • First Date
    9,569 words · 3,855 views · 80 likes · 9 dislikes

Blog Posts (45)

Source

Scootaloo often goes down into the fields of Ponyville to watch the one and only Rainbow Dash defy physics and gravity with her dangerous stunts that wow even the most talented of pegasi. However, a chance encounter with Ponyville's mailmare leads Scootaloo to confront issues long held in her heart.

A story of Derpy and Scootaloo, of family, trials, and a sense of self-worth.

First Published
7th May 2012
Last Modified
7th May 2012

Comments ( 48 )

#1 · 102w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

WOOHOO, Ditzy Do! I dont understand why Scootaloo never asks Ditzy, Fluttershy or an other Pegasus for flight lessons. Dash will never teach her something because shes too lazy.

#2 · 102w, 3d ago · · ·

Daaawww!:twilightsmile:

#3 · 102w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

This was a beautiful story. I think the swimming thing would completely explain the bubble mark as well. I mean the buzzing wings must kick up bubbles right? So Derpy's talent is swimming and being happy? I'm perfectly okay with that.

#4 · 102w, 3d ago · · ·

Aww that was the sweetest little thing I've read in ages :heart:

#5 · 102w, 3d ago · · ·

this gave me a happy feel

#6 · 102w, 3d ago · · ·

That was a very cute story. :derpytongue2::scootangel:

#7 · 102w, 3d ago · · ·

It was a good story. I only found one problem. :twilightsmile:

You said: "Charging through Ponyville, the filly buzzed her wings like a humming bird as she ached for her scooter" :scootangel:

But in the next paragraph Scootaloo suddenly has her scooter. :rainbowhuh:

I'd suggest either removing the scooter from the scene, or illustrate her having issues turning the scooter

Other than that, It was very good. A mustache for you! :moustache:

#8 · 102w, 3d ago · · ·

>>557634

Thanks for catching that. Editing mistake, it's supposed to be 'arched over.' The mishap explained covers why Scootaloo epically crashes a moment later.

#9 · 102w, 3d ago · · ·

FUCKING MORE!!

#10 · 102w, 3d ago · · ·

So many d'aawwwws.

#11 · 102w, 1d ago · · ·

That was a beautiful, wonderful, touching story.:heart::twilightsmile:

#12 · 102w, 1d ago · · ·

All of my feels.

#13 · 101w, 4d ago · · ·

D'awwww

#14 · 98w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

I have now met the proper DAW intake of the day, or week, possibly month... I might need to go get checked now. :twilightblush:

#15 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

UPVOTED FOR D'AWWS OF EPIC PROPORTIONS

THAT IS ALL

#16 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

Two cutiest ponies ever together! Loved this! Great job!:scootangel: :derpytongue2:

#17 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

Haha, swimming :derpytongue2:, I love that idea :yay:

#18 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

Great story I give you three brostaches :moustache::moustache::moustache:

#19 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

Please add a sad tag. I cried a little about Scootaloo's mom.

#20 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

>>702899

Yeah, I'll be honest, I got the idea because I usually order Tea and Lemonade half and half at restaurants I go to, and it comes to me completely unmixed, so I tend to blow bubbles in them to mix 'em up... I started to play up my strategies and I made so many bubbles...

>>703008

I'm sorry if you were unprepared for that, but I felt that I had cut enough of the sad out from my initial drafts that it was safe from tears. My apologies.

#21 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

This is really, really sweet. I loved that ending, it was perfect! Awwww! :pinkiesad2: I would have liked to see Derpy spend some more time on how it feels to be a laughingstock klutz your whole life, and maybe a little backstory on how she overcame her feelings of inadequacy. It felt very rushed and didn't have much of an emotional impact.

One last thing that's pretty incidental -- I really like Sweetie Belle's characterization here. It's cute and makes total sense, with a sister like Rarity!

#22 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

I love this story. I have now favorited and liked. And may I say:

D'AWWWWWWWW:scootangel:

#23 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

manly tears   manly tears... ah stuff it   Tears are good manly or not

#24 · 98w, 2d ago · · ·

Aww, very sweet.

#25 · 98w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

Water therapy for weak wings?  That's an idea that makes so much sense, I wonder why no one's ever written it before.  And in only four weeks!  (Although if a broken wing heals enough to leave the hospital in less than a week, and ponies can survive tremendous acceleration and slamming into stationary objects at high velocities, it makes sense that four weeks would be enough time.)

I also liked the handling of Scootaloo's family; the reveal in her mother's room was developed with sufficient foreshadowing to make me feel stuff.  Although I'm not a fan of orphanloo, semiorphanloo, or homelessloo, it works here.

#26 · 98w, 1d ago · · ·

Aww thats so sweet. It's nice seeing a happy Scoot story for once.

#27 · 98w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

What I am a fan of is Hidden Depths Derpy/Ditzy/Whatever Hasbro's lawyers end up calling her.

#28 · 98w, 1d ago · · ·

Why am I not allowed to upvote more than once? I can't give this thing the votes it deserves from me!:raritycry:

#29 · 98w, 1d ago · · ·

Fuck me I cried:raritycry:

#30 · 98w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

:derpytongue2::scootangel::pinkiehappy:

It is always time for more Scootalove! And always time for more derpy. This made me smile. Thank you.

#31 · 98w, 1d ago · · ·

"Derpy stopped her muffin annihilation."  Flagged for gross inaccuracies.

#32 · 98w, 1d ago · · ·

That ending.  So much awesome.

#33 · 98w, 1d ago · · ·

That was absolutely adorable!:scootangel: Hooray Scootalove!

#34 · 98w, 1d ago · · ·

That was really cute. The ending fit the story perfectly. Well played, sir :pinkiehappy:

#35 · 97w, 4d ago · · ·

Great Story. :)

#36 · 97w, 4d ago · · ·

:derpytongue2:

I really liked thi story.  It was cute having Derpy teach Scootaloo how to fly.

#37 · 97w, 2d ago · · ·

Interesting.  I would like to see a sequel. :pinkiesmile:

#38 · 97w, 1d ago · · ·

All I can say is Dawwwww.

#39 · 96w, 2d ago · · ·

A sweet story. A good take on Scoots, her wings and her family.

Oh, and the middle paragraph of the father's letter seems to be un-italicized. Sorry about nit-picking!

#40 · 96w, 7h ago · · ·

This was quite well written, though the ending was a bit abrupt. I didn't feel as emotional as I thought that an ending of that sort of incur. Other than that, though, quite well done!

#41 · 94w, 6d ago · · ·

Good Story for once is not Rainbow Dash teaching Scootaloo how to fly but Derpy. Love the ending by the way.:derpytongue2:

#42 · 92w, 6d ago · · ·

i had read this story so long ago and i had liked it so much i didnt have an account then but now i do and want you to know i loved this story:pinkiehappy:

#43 · 88w, 1d ago · · ·

This is great story, the sadness is dosed properly and the ending is upbeat.  You might want to check the italics in the letter, though, that sticks out a little.  

Good idea, good execution, believable headcanon with the wing training (but is Scoot's so alone, who looks after her? She must have a caretaker, at least), d'aww ending.  

#44 · 82w, 5d ago · · ·

The ending... HHHHNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGHHHHHH

#45 · 81w, 1d ago · · ·

awesome! :twilightsmile:

#46 · 77w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

That would appear to be the perfect story for Derpy's Cutie Mark!

Awesome story, good job HiddenBrony.

>>702525

It's like radiation, except DAW can kill one faster:trixieshiftleft:

#47 · 69w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

I really enjoyed how Derpy was handled in this story. :D She's a light-hearted and kind pony.

#48 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

I love this, >>1842107 exactly my thoughts!

I'm glad to say that this fic made it in to my ever-expanding good/favorite fanfics list!

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