A writer from 17th century England finds himself in Equestria. It's here that he learns the meaning of courage, becomes the hero Equestria needs, and ultimately finds true love.
Just wanna say this because I'll probably never get the chance to anytime later....hope you don't mind!
*ehem*
FIRST!!!!!!!!
Sorry. Always wanted to do that :3 Anywho.... Great job on the story dood! It's coming together nicely. Keep up the good work and I'll be waiting for the next update!
“No big deal,” easy for you to say, Arthur thought. She still had hooves, and a tail, and an overall horse like build. She was a pony, and a part of him felt like he was going straight to hell for even having these thoughts.
Well, Arthur, I heard somewhere that Satan's a pretty nice guy, so you have nothing to worry about.
I haven't had much time at all to read this, but I am glad I did. You are taking a human in Equestria fic and you are doing it excellent! This has truly become a favorite. You really build upon his indecisiveness when it comes to being attracted to Fluttershy, but I gotta admit you are making Fluttershy truly adorable. This is going so well thus far, the only thing I would change is that, well, its just me but Arthur seems a bit flat, but in a sense that makes me able to put myself in his place. Another plus is the lack of cliches. Thats a MAJOR plus!
5727698 Yeah, I tried to make him somewhat blank in order for the reader to relate to him without him being a straight Anon. Glad you're enjoying it, and yes I made Fluttershy extremely adorable.
Think I could get a list of the cliches so I don't accidentally put them in? I want to avoid them as much as possible.
I am really liking this story... The only personal problem I have with this is that Sparity is well, for a lack of better words and sleep, destroyed. Oh well, as long as there's no harems then I think we'll be good.
My, talk about rushing things, the man really needs to take Ahold of himself and take things a bit slower, but this IS Fluttershy we're talking about so i guess it 's okay.
5727914 I wouldn't say destroyed. You'll see in later chapters that Spike has quite the dilemma here.
5728665 Haven't you ever had a crush on someone and you suddenly fantasize about them? Don't those fantasies get rather violent at times? That's what Arthur is dealing with here. And yes, it IS Fluttershy he's attracted to. I don't care what anyone says, she's the most adorable thing you'll ever see, and I dare you to control yourself in her presence.
-Something tells me that this love triangle between Spike, Rarity, and AJ is going to end in tears (and possibly blood).
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“I... can't stop looking at you because I've never in my life seen anything so pleasing on the eyes in my life, I think you are absolutely radiant both inside and out, and if I could look at you for the rest of my days I would be truly happy,”
Subtlety is not really in your vocabulary, is it Arthur?
I face palmed when he said marry me. he's too obvious its painful. p.s not criticising the story, just my opinion of arthur. I loved this good chapter. Kudos
Arthur is a very cool guy and someone I can somewhat relate too. As for the Catholic Church however I have family who are strong believers in that faith. And since I know what it's like to meet somebody that you feel so strongly for but somewhere in your head feels so wrong here is all I can say. Due to my aunt and her entire family absolutely believing that I am going to hell all I can say to you Arthur is this if for any reason you getting with Fluttershy does somehow send you to hell I have a trillion dollar mansion down there that the devil and I built for me. Plus the Devil, his armies, servants, beasts, etc and I all get along. So if you wind up in Hell Arthur you can come live with me.
Just wanna say this because I'll probably never get the chance to anytime later....hope you don't mind!
*ehem*
FIRST!!!!!!!!
Sorry. Always wanted to do that :3
Anywho.... Great job on the story dood! It's coming together nicely. Keep up the good work and I'll be waiting for the next update!
Also...for your trouble... You...
Can have...
A mustache.
Awesome chapter. 'nough said
Well, Arthur, I heard somewhere that Satan's a pretty nice guy, so you have nothing to worry about.
There are those who go into Full Squick if you so much as suggest a human/pony romance.
I am not one of those.
5726438 Spike is supposed to be Arthur's best friend who's also a dick. You know how everyone has that person in their life.
Really like Spike and Arthur's friendship.
I'm still loving it! Give us more!!!
Please
5727346 Mmm.... *thinking*
Sure, why not? I'll give you more. I'm already planning chapter 5.
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I haven't had much time at all to read this, but I am glad I did. You are taking a human in Equestria fic and you are doing it excellent! This has truly become a favorite. You really build upon his indecisiveness when it comes to being attracted to Fluttershy, but I gotta admit you are making Fluttershy truly adorable. This is going so well thus far, the only thing I would change is that, well, its just me but Arthur seems a bit flat, but in a sense that makes me able to put myself in his place. Another plus is the lack of cliches. Thats a MAJOR plus!
Keep it up, you're pulling this off splendidly!
5727698 Yeah, I tried to make him somewhat blank in order for the reader to relate to him without him being a straight Anon. Glad you're enjoying it, and yes I made Fluttershy extremely adorable.
Think I could get a list of the cliches so I don't accidentally put them in? I want to avoid them as much as possible.
I am really liking this story... The only personal problem I have with this is that Sparity is well, for a lack of better words and sleep, destroyed. Oh well, as long as there's no harems then I think we'll be good.
My, talk about rushing things, the man really needs to take Ahold of himself and take things a bit slower, but this IS Fluttershy we're talking about so i guess it 's okay.
5727914 I wouldn't say destroyed. You'll see in later chapters that Spike has quite the dilemma here.
5728665 Haven't you ever had a crush on someone and you suddenly fantasize about them? Don't those fantasies get rather violent at times? That's what Arthur is dealing with here. And yes, it IS Fluttershy he's attracted to. I don't care what anyone says, she's the most adorable thing you'll ever see, and I dare you to control yourself in her presence.
Its closing in on us! .....Prepare for warp speed..........captain, we've lost it! Theirs no way pacing will ever catch us now.
-Something tells me that this love triangle between Spike, Rarity, and AJ is going to end in tears (and possibly blood).
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Subtlety is not really in your vocabulary, is it Arthur?
-I wonder if Twilight is in her office...
WellsheseemsbusysoIthinkI'llgoseeifthereisanythingtoeatinthecastlekitchen! *hastily walks off*
Jokes aside, I am enjoying this story so far. I look forward to reading more.
I face palmed when he said marry me. he's too obvious its painful.
p.s not criticising the story, just my opinion of arthur. I loved this good chapter. Kudos
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Arthur is a very cool guy and someone I can somewhat relate too. As for the Catholic Church however I have family who are strong believers in that faith. And since I know what it's like to meet somebody that you feel so strongly for but somewhere in your head feels so wrong here is all I can say. Due to my aunt and her entire family absolutely believing that I am going to hell all I can say to you Arthur is this if for any reason you getting with Fluttershy does somehow send you to hell I have a trillion dollar mansion down there that the devil and I built for me. Plus the Devil, his armies, servants, beasts, etc and I all get along. So if you wind up in Hell Arthur you can come live with me.