When dispelling a color changing enchantment, Rarity discovers that one of her mannequins is a little more than it seems.
The ‘Mannequin of Carousel Boutique’ revolves around the events of a changeling who managed to survive by impersonating a ‘ponyquin’ (mannequin in the story) at the home of the fabulous Rarity Belle.
Story is level 4 Anthro where ponies are bipedal with various human qualities, but still have horns, wings, pony ears, muzzles and hooves.
If anyone would like to point out errors or mistakes, then please leave me a note!
Chapters (9)
this is really interesting, I can't wait to see where this goes
This is like "the changeling doll" emphasized on DOLL
And that, ladies and gentlemen, is the creepiest stalker ever.
I gotta say, seeing you put the premise in action, this is pretty good. Though the next chapter or two will make or break this.
Everything she has ever done in front of that Mannequin has been seen by the Changeling. He has had free gropes, shows, and probably even a strip tease or two. He should be dead as a doornail as soon as she figures that out!
I guess the Changeling forgot about that cactus, big mistake
5582597 Not to mention the needles. It wouldn't take Rarity much to sew his mouth shut.
After reading the story, I think it's pretty funny! There are a few grammar errors, but they can be ignored. Still, here's one more like and favorite from me! And a Spike 'Stache.
"And what happened to this patient, Nurse Tenderheart?"
"Well Doctor, it appears he fell face first onto a cactus. Repeatedly. And then attempted to swallow it whole."
"Well I never, how curious. I didn't know Changelings could eat anything other than love. The poor chap must have been desperate..."
It would have been better if you kept the act up longer for at least two more chapters, would have been nice to see what more shenanigans would have occurred
5582743 I was in the office reading this when I saw your comment. I was caught and filed for insubordination. Got suspended for three days. Worth it!
Thx for the spoiler in teh description.
"SHING"
"Okay shutting up."
That's my first thought on that. Like the whole shebang. Death glare, floating arsenal of sharp objects. Hell have Rarity snatch her cat off the ground when Opal walks by and hover her just out of claw range of his face. Then have Rarity say; "Allow me to repeat the question. You wouldn't dare, now would you?" His repsonse; "Uuhhh, wouldn't even dream of it." Then he just flashes back into disguise.
Evil maniacal laughter.
But the question is: Why is he here?
She should let hhim talk, she might get a few dates out of it.
I think that Changeling enjoyed being tied up far too much.
Damn some bad shit must have happened to him in the past.
with this still listed as 'Incomplete' I suspect it's about to get really interesting
and I can't wait
5573414 maud follows me whenever I go out to learn more about me (she could be a freaking ninja she's so quiet)
Me *eating cake with lyra*
Maud: likes cake and the bombastic unicorn... Dislikes fruits and fruit fillings...
5586508 the perfect disguise, no need to move, all the love that spike releases when rarity is close by, and sweetie's happy energy
Why wouldn't it be?
Please tell me they're going to get in a cute romantic relationship!
5590546 didn't think of that to be honest
She can't dress her oversized doll anymore, oh the humanity!
Bwhahahahaha!
Come on Rarity we know your curious.
Describing a character's cup size is the most crass, tasteless thing I've ever seen an author do in a story that wasn't pornography.
It's been awhile since you updated this story. What gives? Why the wait? It's not like your working on any other stories right now...
This is a great story! I look forward to more chapters like this. And there BETTER be more.
Butter as a scam artist's massage oil? Plausible; I like it.
Up next on MythBusters butter Rubdown
I wonder how long it will be before the Spa Twins realize it's a changeling... Rarity did say her "model" had a chitinous body.
Talk about...buttering up the customers!
#regretnothing
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They probably won't because it can be taken as world play
Actually I have heard of butter being used. Supposed to be good for the skin.
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I want to say he's screwed but I don't think she will quite go that far. Will she? Damn, she just might...
And just what the hell is Pinkie doing with a Red Herring and a sports bra?
lol!
5986437 making a booby trap, of course!
6004114 I was expecting someone to reference Communism...
I can tell you that the anthro was an instant first strike for me. Unfair, I know, but that's just a difference in preference. Ponies with hands bother me.
I can tell you that if it had been a completely humanized Equestria then it would have been an instant triple strike and I would have closed the tab. Though it's not for the same reason, I don't dislike them per se, it's just that I can't read 'em.
In fact, there's a long series that I very much want to read, and I tried, I really did. I just couldn't bring myself to keep going after the first five thousand words or so. I wanted to, I really, really did, but I just couldn't stand it.
To be fair, a good part, though nothing close to the majority, of the reason I couldn't stand it were facts like there being no magic (at least not in the thousands of words I read) but somehow Twilight was still Celestia's student and had still moved to Ponyville as well as other such nonsensical facts.
As it stands, the interesting premise and the fact that the wring's pretty decent means I'll give it its fair shake and keep going.
. . . Maybe I should try reading that story again. Third times the charm, or so they say.
The pacing is just slightly fast. The grammar problems, though relatively minor, still distract from the story. The romantic (truthfully simply lustful) foreshadowing is much too blunt and obvious. The clothing descriptions are blunt and immersion breaking.
I can't say that my opinion of the writing has changed since the first chapter. It's decent, but no more than that.
That being said, the premise is still very interesting. The dynamic interaction between Rarity and Rabble is also rather interesting and entertaining.
With some polish for the grammar, a much slower, more subtle approach to the romance (with less focus on simple overt lust), and character and clothing descriptions much more carefully interwoven into the narrative it could turn into a sparkling gem.
In its current state, it's like a polished but uncut gem: The potential is obvious, the framework for something beautiful is there, but as it stands it is colorful and pretty in its own way but also a bit ugly.
I'll be tracking to see how this develops.
6004114 lol
So Sweetie Belle knows and didn't decide to tell Rarity? That's gonna cause some problems.
Oh god, incomplete tag, I would be very disappointment if that was real end xD
I had to go back and check whether the story was marked complete, thoughts of "it hasn't been April 1 for how long?" and "
ending trolls" running through my head... 
but fortunately, it doesn't appear to actually be the end, so you may remain unharmed.
The end, the end? Because you have an Incomplete tag.
Whats with that ending though it went nowherr.
Nuuuuuu Damn you, I'm disappointed :D
I'm not sure there was a climax to this story. It felt like it was barely into the "rising action" section of a story arc.
Yeah, I have to agree. This just kind of...peters out. There's no real resolution, no climax. You have the beginning of a story here, not the end.
I'd say start a Displaced fic.
But then again I'm biased and want more crossovers with my own Displaced story.
Changelings fit the topic of "changing" just fine.