Chapter 3 of, "Whatever Happened to old Sugarcube Corner"? Is in progress now, got my comp back up :D
Twilight wakes up due to an abrupt explosion from what appeared to be Sugarcube Corner. She then decides to investigate. Piecing together the evidence, suspects become more apparent.
Hey guys, this is my first fanfic by the way, please do help me when it comes to grammar errors and such. Thanks everypony for reading :D
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A cliffhanger! Enjoying it so far
There are a few fairly minor grammatical errors, missing periods, strange placement of words, and the like.
My biggest complaint is in the first chapter. I would recommend putting spaces between paragraphs, it makes it much easier to read. I see however that you did so in the second chapter, so kudos! Also, if you can find a way to split up that giant paragraph where Twilight is explaining what happened, it would be appreciated. When a reader sees a paragraph that big, they often are intimidated by it and often end up skipping it.
I'll keep that in mind :D thanks! XD
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You're welcome :) If you'd like a pre-reader to help, I'll volunteer. A lot of the problems here are easily avoided, but easy to miss while writing.
Let me know what you think :)
28692 that would be great! XD