This story is a sequel to General Amnesty
'Peace': a word Maud Pie swore was impossible. The war ended, and still she fought for the resistance. But with the Crystal Empire holding their end of the amnesty and power of the kingdom once again in the hooves of a Princess, the world continues to descend back into something resembling normalcy.
For Maud, this is the worst outcome. No longer can she hide behind a curtain of violence. She must face her final battle: returning home.
A spin-off of Cynewulf's wonderful tale of AppleDashery, General Amnesty. Written with her blessing. Go read all of her things if you haven't already—especially General Amnesty.
Chapters (10)
HI THIS IS GOOD AND I HOPE YOU CONTINUE IT OKAY
You captured Maud's voice very well, using brevity and simplicity to still hold onto a lot of emotion instead of falling into the trap of making her a husk, as many people can do.
Also, you're stuck with me as a comment-person now. I must warn you ahead of time that I am awful. Simply awful.
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I agree, this is a great story with an accurate representation of Maud. 😄 A+. ^^
And you're not the only one who's a comment person lol. 😄
Really, really glad to see this up finally!
Oooh, comment time.
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I look forward to the comments. And luckily/unfortunately I'm someone who replies to most of the comments I get
Writing Maud is a ton of fun, and yes, I agree quite a few people write Maud as though she is just an emotionless husk, but I see her as a pony full of emotion--just one that does not show it outwardly.
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More comment folks are always welcome. Glad you're enjoying it so far, and I'll do my best to keep it great!
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Thank you for writing such a wonderful story to inspire this!
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Indeed she is!
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I do like it, you're welcome. 😊 And I'm glad you like the comments like most of us do. ^^
I wish I've given Maud a more decent role in my story XD Heck, there's many characters I regret not giving better roles to lol 😆
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More pls :D
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Since you asked nicely, I'll post some more tomorrow
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Well thank you ~
"He gaze is distant."
"His gaze is distant."?
"Time are changing, regardless."
"Times are changing, regardless."?
"where they are I’ll find something"
Missing period?
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Fixed, fixed, annnnd fixed. Thank ya very much
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You're welcome!
Package containment. Responsible.
Take one at bedtime.
You delivered!
"The mane came later than I expected."
Not sure what that means, sorry.
"and the bottle’s still in on piece"
"and the bottle’s still in one piece"?
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Heh, that first line was me trying to be creative while describing a receding hairline. An admittedly silly description on my part, though. Not really befitting of Maud's voice. I thought I'd axed it while proofing, but it appears it slipped through the cracks woops
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"Heh, that first line was me trying to be creative while describing a receding hairline."
...Ahh, okay, yes, I see now how it could mean that. :)
"An admittedly silly description on my part, though. Not really befitting of Maud's voice. I thought I'd axed it while proofing, but it appears it slipped through the cracks woops
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Well, I agree with the decision to cut it, but I'm kind of glad I got to see it, with your explanation, before that. :)
(Perhaps you'll be able to find a place for the line in a future story.)
Ah, it seems this is almost over, then?
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The first act/part is (2 more chapters). There's still plenty of story to go (have 2 more parts of 10 chapters each planned).
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aaah i misread things then
okay this is good
keep going
"The smells of burning carmel and"
"The smells of burning caramel and"?
Interesting developments!
"words seem to feel his mouth as he opens"
"words seem to fill his mouth as he opens"?
Poor Maud
"spriting to catch up with my march"
"sprinting to catch up with my march"?
It's been an interesting ride so far. :)
I'm glad I hopped aboard too!
Intriguing character study so far, even if the concrete narrative takes some piecing together (it sounds like Maud had some issues even before the war).
Worth ticket price already.
I have to ask, but what is the status of the rest of the story?
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Mostly on hold (probably should have changed the status to "On Hiatus" but it slipped my mind). However, I am still putting time into this story when I get it... it's just that, unfortunately, the workload at school has taken a lot of time and energy over the last couple semesters. At the moment, I am hoping I can get a healthy chunk of chapters (10 or so, like when the story was first published) and release those like the original group of ten, but if it's going too slowly chapters might start coming out whenever each chapter is finished and edited. But I can confirm that I am at least working on this story still (and the end of the semester is coming up at the end of April, which will open the door for much more writing time).
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That sounds really great!
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