Definitely got some potential with this one. I especially liked the interaction between Scootaloo and her father.

Gonna keep an eye on this one.

Dude.

God damnit, I am going to cry sooner or later.

This story is so cute. I'll be tracking it.

Love me some Scootaloo stories. Tracking

Well, I can tell this is going to be one of those stories I drop everything i'm doing to read everytime there's a new chapter. This is an excellent chapter, though bleak, and I think you captured Scootaloo's emotions and character really, really well - and Twilight's too, from the little we've so far seen of her.

I'm impressed. And Scootaloo's dad is awesome. Not just because he's german either, even though that helps.

I kind of hope Scootaloo actually succeeds in dragging RD back to the land of the living, though I suspect i'll be disappointed there - not in the story, I hasten to add - and so will she. Probably her more than I.

Awesome work.

Great so far, keep up the good work.

Messing with the boundry between this world and the next? Nothing can possibly go wrong!

>>294955294955

Nope, no problems whatsoever

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Tracking, can't wait for more.

Neat.

Looking forward to where this story goes.

By the by, I'm surprised nobody has mentioned your title yet; it's certainly what caught my eye:

"All that is gold does not glitter,

Not all those who wander are lost;

The old that is strong does not wither,

Deep roots are not reached by the frost."

~from The Lord of the Rings by JRR Tolkien

Intentional?

>>294966294966

Yes that was intentional. Big fan of LOTR and that quote in general

This was incredible. The emotions were captured amazingly and the characters were written very well. I need to know what happens next! Thank you for writing this.

You have a gift for beautiful prose. Sometimes it's a tad bit too purple... but you know what? The adornment never strays to far from being tasteful and delightful. Splendid job.

I love Scootaloo and her father. The being German(e) was both clever and surprising. It adds an interesting little bit of color, and it's nice to see someone trying to find a different backstory than orphan. (Though that's been done well too!) I love that you sort of hinted at Rainbow's death with the goggles- even if it's not true, you've given me clues that make me assume it was a flying accident (cracks, stain) so that it's still in my mind and hanging over the reader as much as it hangs over our intrepid little filly.

Looking forward to this! Definitely worth reading, and already a delightful story.

This is off to an intresting start.

But I find your German sounds odd.

"Sie sind spät Scootaloo." is a very formal way to great one's daughter, even If one is trying to sound very strict. "Du bist spät Fräulein." would sound more natural.

And that he is calling his daughter "Tochter". That's like calling her daughter all the time. If he's using it as a nickname I think "Schatz, Schatzilein, Mein Schatz" or "Töchterchen" would work better.

>>295046295046

Thanks for the input. I don't really know German (I'm just a silly American who got the idea to incorporate a foreign language into a fic), so getting some hints from someone who knows the language is extremely helpful.

Of course, I can always say "The language is Germane not German" as an excuse, but I'd rather the foreign dialogue be somewhat accurate.

Holy buck.

What drew me to this was the LOTR title (thank you Bilbo) and the coincidence that I'd just been watching Return of the King Extended Edition Blu-Ray.

But now... you get a stache , goggles , and me tracking it.

May the Grace of the Valar Protect You

Shire Folk

Pretty good, ill be looking forward to the next chapter.

Oh boy, this is going to be good.

And I hope, with the power of 1000 alicorns, that Scoots will succeed.

I'm not one for sad fics involving character death, but this is one very unique and captivating twist to that concept that's keeping me hooked.

Tracking

"Her eyes were read from nights without sleep"

Red?

SO. MUCH. GOOD.

Typos

Through every storm, end every race,

and not end

Her eyes were read from nights without sleep.

red not read

Anyway this is looking pretty good so far; I don't like how Spike is just not mentioned, I never like it when authors shove characters out of a story or scene because it would distract from the story's subject... but you're not losing anything for that, not yet anyway.

What I did like was a lot of the detail in the scenery and how it played on the story; this get a like from me and four stars on EQD.

it reminds me a bit of the fic A Rose is a Rose...can't wait for more!

>>296036296036

This is just the first chapter... Spike will show up, as will the rest of the mane 6 (well, mane 5, but still...)

oh i am tracking this for sure

>>296108296108  > "Mane 5", is that a spoiler to the eventual outcome or just an observation of the current state of affairs?

>>296936296936

Observation of current state of affairs

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Also, I love this story. Fucking Favorited.

I took me until the end to figure out rainbow dash was, you know, ..

I like it so far. Though,the interactions between Scootaloo and her father gave me diabetes.

Judging from his name, is he a professional artist or something?

Poor RD... I picked up what happened during Twilight's internal monologue.  I wonder how she...

I expect great things from this story.  Terrible, yes. But great.  Many manly tears will be shed.

Well well well, I'm definitely tracking this one!

Looks like it's time Scootaloo proves she's not chicken!

The character interactions are really well done and I love the concept. Go go Scoots! Nothing bad ever comes from playing with resurrection. Nope, nothing at all. This has great potential.

"Du bist spät Fräulein" I'm pretty sure you only call people Fraulein if they're old, I think normally it's just Frau. As a address my German teacher by Frau followed by their name. Like how you'd call someone mrs anderson. It would be frau anderson.

Oh wait fraulein is how you address a child formally, so you're correct, please disregard my last comment.

Nice. Tracked like a mo-fo.

Will Scoot Scoot adventure alone to this pools of magicness or will the Crusaders become her companions or.....her 'fellowship' you could say, hehehe. Anyways! Its a great story and i'm really excited for the next chapter...tracking and thumb!

Man, I don't know if i'm willing to accept what happened to RD until you write it. Great story though.

I cried. I am crying as I am writing this comment, I will cry if you do not finish this, and I will cry after you do finish this.

The last tears, althrough, will be the tears of joy.

*looks at author's avatar*

Dammit.  It's like Scootaloo is being shipped with Sweetie Belle EVERYWHERE.

Even in my side-story, "Pinkie of the Colossus", there's a shipping-esque moment between Sweetie Belle and Scoots, although that was in Dual Pie's dream, which had more of a focus on forgiveness, but Sweetie had apparently head-patted Scoots to sleep.

and then there's Equestria Total War....

>>298695298695 Scootaloo was never chicken.  ...But she WAS like Marty McFly, and can be talked into ANYTHING so long as you ask if she's chicken.

>>332220332220 It was a joke Xaos, but I'm guessing you knew that.  

Honestly though, I think Scootaloo doesn't get enough love.  I'd honestly like to see more stories where she's put to the test and comes out just as, if not more awesome than her idol!

>>332354332354 yeah, I know it was a joke.  The whole "Scootaloo is  a chicken" joke has been around ever since "the Stare Master".  Heck, I even used it (and will probably continue to use it) in "Pinkie of the Colossus".

"APPLE BLOOOOOM!"

"CHICKEN GIIIIIRRLLLLL!"

....those emoticons do NOT match the scene at all.

But yes.  Scootaloo does NOT get enough love.  I'm looking forward to more installments to this story, but "Buck to the Future" really excites me for some reason.

"Great Scoot!"

I especially like the way that you dont really go into how rainbow died in this fic. You know that she is dead, and you hinted that it was some kind of accident from the cracked goggles, but besides that, who knows how it happened? I love how you left it to our imagination. My suggestion would be to not really go into the details of her death, and focus more on peoples reactions to it. Also, I am usually pretty sure how a story will end, but with this one, its not so much. It could easily go either way, Rainbow comes back, or Scootaloo fails. Either way, I think that it would make for a great story. Mabey you could write an alternate ending where she either revives her, or doesnt revive her, depending on what you plan to do. Anyways, its your fic, so dont feel pressured or anything, but I am really looking forward to the rest of this story.

looks to be a good one! i love these fanfics when they arent crazy rape-gore-incest fics!

Don't worry, next chapter we'll finally start getting around to the adventure stuff!

Excellent, I love the way you have been writing this. Keep on going  

this story is awesome.  i feel for each of the characters.  can't wait to see what happens next!

Very nice.

If RD died from crashing into a tree, then I am disappoint. SHE CAN CRASH INTO SOLID ROCK and still be ok. not to mention she goes 11,881 meters per second (After hitting the sonic rainboom) , and can still crash into solid rock and be ok. oh well, defy the cartoons logic all you want. its still a good story.

>>346112346112

Well, yes, she did hit a tree at some point, but was that what actually did her in?

I'm the only one who knows, and my lips are sealed (until I get to the proper chapter, that is)

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Just... keep em coming. The episodes, I mean, not troll-comments. >.>

FINALLY!

sick

Wonderful chapter!

Poor Scootaloo... you do terrible things to my favorite not Twilight Pony. :P

But I'm really loving this story! I was quite excited to see an update~

>>346112346112 Since when does sound travel almost 12 kilometers per second?  That's more than escape velocity.  Sound goes just over 340 meters per second.  

Great chapter, and I'm glad the Plot will be picking up soon!

>>348028348028 here this video gave me and my brother in law the base speed (109 Meters per second squared) then we did a shit ton of math and shit at 1am over spring break, him being in 8th grade and me being in  6th, then we got my dad to help us out with any mess up me might have made, it was a short little thing we did, might not be 100% accurate but its close enough for me. Not to mention she only goes that fast after the Sonic Rainboom. (most likely after.)

>>348051348051 The guy says in the video that sound travels 340 meters per second.  The figure of 109 meters per second per second is the acceleration required to get to 1635 meters per second in 15 seconds, which is a speed he calculated based on the angle of RD's animated mach cone.  

So we can assume one of the following:

1) The speed of sound in Equestria is five times what it is on Earth.

2) RD has to go Mach 5 to produce a Sonic Rainboom, even though she does not produce a regular sonic boom upon reaching Mach 1.

3) The animators aren't physics experts and didn't know about how changing velocity affects the shape of the mach cone, and chose that sharp of an angle for simple dramatic effect.

Personally, I think the third is most likely.  

But here's the issue with your physics:

109 meters per second squared does not mean "(109 squared) meters per second".  It is "(109 meters per second) per second", notated 109 m/s^2 or 109 m/s/s.  In other words, that is how fast her velocity changes over time.  Assuming she starts from standstill, after one second she is going 109 meters per second, after two seconds she is going 218 m/s, then 327 m/s after three seconds.  At the end of the fifteen second clip, she is going 109x15 = 1635 meters per second, which is the velocity given in the presentation.

11881 m/s is probably faster than Celestia launched Nightmare Moon when she banished her.  Apollo 10, after falling toward the Earth for three days, wasn't even travelling that fast - it was going 11082 meters per second before it braked for reentry (source: Wikipedia, "Apollo 10").

I'm sure Dash would be proud to know she left such a lasting impression. (Sorry)

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Seriously though, good pun.

Honestly, as much as I'm looking forward to the adventurous parts of the story, I'm not even in any particular rush to get there. These opening chapters have been fantastic, managing to paint a lovely, if sad, image of the town in the aftermath of such a tragedy. Things like Scootaloo's teacher being worried about her student and Applejack and Twilight both still very much themselves hurt over the incident really add to the picture as a whole, and remind us that Scootaloo isn't the only pony suffering right now. It's wonderful to read, and this second chapter was more than worth the wait. I'm glad you finally thought it was good enough.

Keep up the excellent work. I'll be impatiently awaiting more!

>>348347348347 uhhhhhhhh......ok also take not that im still in 6th grade and being home schooled. so...yea...Im no rocket scientist...she can still go really fast for a pony. (Not even mentioning the fact she's a Pegasus, if she wasn't one, i highly doubt she would be able to go that fast in the first place. ether way she's still pretty fast.)

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>>349151349151 I know.  I just thought you'd be interested.  Physics is fascinating.

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I must say this is some storyline you're building up on. I mean for Scootaloo to hide her emotions in a tight ball like that, it's bound to burst sooner or later.

Lets hope the other two former CMC can help her out when she does burst out her feelings.

Still this is some update and I must say I want to encourage you upon such a great idea like this one.

Yay grammar Nazi! You have

“Really? Like the dentist.”

when it should end in a question mark.

I like how the Daring-Do part is mirroring Scoot's own story.

>>294966294966  Too many youngins' around who haven't read LoTR yet, I'd wager.  I've read it 7 times.  And I'm old!  Well, at the very least a proper adult by hobbit standards, having 'come of age' two years ago.  

Let me see, how to completely ponify LoTR... Celestia is Galadriel and Discord is Sauron!  :D  Hmmm... Starswirl as Gandalf, Trixie as Saruman.  Gilda as the Balrog?  Diamond Dogs are clearly the orcs.  Unicorns for Elves?  No, have to be all alicorns for Elves.  

Unicorns for humans could sorta work.  It would certainly make the power of the Nine all the more relevant:  unicorns from the royal family seeking power and immortality equivalent to the Alicorns, and Discord as the cunning trickster promising to give them the means to do so.  The will be the Nine Trotters, since they don't exactly need to ride horses.  What would be Mordor-language for Shoe Wraiths?  Anybody know how they say 'shoe' in Baradur?

Earth ponies are the clear choice for hobbits.  Applejack as Bilbo, Applebloom as Frodo.  Twist as Samwise?  How to fit the other 2 CMCs in there... difficult that.

For a twist the pegasi could be akin to dwarves just building their clouds too high and awakening the evil Gilda (The unnamed terror awaked in the Cumulus of Cloudsdale).

And now, the central focus:  The Ring of Power.  The One Ring.  The Ruling Ring.  There can be only one possible play on it for Pony:  The One Horseshoe... to buck them all.  

Yes.... YESSS!!!  My glorious abomination shall be a trollfic worthy of groans and gnashing of teeth!  

RazedRainbow!  Your title has inspired me to create a terrifyingly terrible parody!  (so imma blame you for what happens, kay?)  

>>346172346172  Clearly it wasn't just the tree.  Rainbow was doing ok until she took an arrow to the-  *is shot in da head by sniper*  

>>348347348347  We can figure out how fast Celestia launched NM into the moon with ease!  We just need to borrow her Moon Cannon!  And her Banana Bag.  

TOOOO THE MOOOOOOOONN!!  

>>352031352031

Twist as Samwise?

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>>352031352031

I would read this. I would so read this.

1) "pavement" Um what, in Ponyville, no?

2) "cyan feather" How, didn't she die months ago?

Anyway vary good story. With this being a sad Scootaloo story I just assumed that you'd be kicking her while she's down, like every other fan author, so this is both refreshing and interesting, also enthralling and emotional. Keep up the great writing.

Once this came out:

"Hm... looks good maybe later"

Next day:

"Huh? No dislikes...but still maybe later"

A little later:

"Ok I still have a lot to read...so maybe later?"

Now:

"Ok no excuses I must read this...."

After reading:

"I WANT MOAR" <------------English translation: "Love it"

Damn, I'm a sucker for depressing stories using my two favorite ponies...I know, just know this will end with a bittersweet twist. Satisfied, but still sad...yet it's too damned good for me to stop...which I have to, I've got my own projects I'm working on, and I can't get those done if I'm depressed

I just wish You updAted more often, since it's epic!

Oh, also Scootaloo's depression and stuff fills in any undeveloped thingies for fanfic I am going to write, since even though I had some ideas on their own they seemed bland, THIS here is inspiration!. Big thanks!

>>352056352056  Some things I've come up with recently in this regard:

The Mayor of the Shire is Mayor Puddinghead

Rainbow Dash in Gimli's role as 'Gimbow Brash' (who fears Derpy’s Bane in the Cloud Mines of Marea)

A quote from Applebloom about the One Shoe:  

Applebloom, “Yah wouldn’t have ta use it fer bad things.  That shoe don’t tarnish, or dent; and don’t never get worn out!  Ya’ll could use it fer applebuckin! “  

Twilight, “Yes, that’s how it would start.  Just with the good intentions for apple harvesting.  But soon, you would want more.  You would be compelled to buck more, harder and faster.   And it would stop feeling good after a while, because bucking that much is really exhausting.  But you'd feel compelled inexorably to continue bucking!  Day and night, bucking everything that stood still long enough for you to get your hooves on it!  Before you knew it, you’d be bucking the hell out of everyone in Middle Equestria.”

Doctor Whooves = Doc Whoombodil, Eldest and Strangest.

Spike = Scalebeard the Ent  "I'm actually really really old!  I just LOOK like a baby because I got so old I started getting younger again.

Prince Blueblood = Prince Blueomir of Gundoor  "With that Shoe I could... dare I say it... rule the world!  No!  Ack!  I mustn't!  Evil emperorship would ruin my regal image!  Though I would get all the mares... oh curse that tempting Shoe!"

Pinkie Pie/Pinkamina Brandyrock = Merry/Meriadoc Brandybuck’s role, a member of a very prosperous family of rock farmers, who’d gained wealth next to the Indentured Servant Forest (a scion of the Everfree Forest) learning how to cultivate concrete, a true breakthrough in the field.   A quote from Pinkie, 4th wall-breaking as usual, channeling "Casablanca":  "The problems of two ponies don’t mean a hill of jellybeans in this craaaaaazy world!    If you don’t toss that Shoe into the liquid hot magma, you’ll regret it, maybe not today, maybe not next Hearts and Hooves Day, but FOREEEEEVERRRRR!!!"

.....

The insanity... it burns so good in my brain...  

You know...just for once with a sad story where one of the main six dies, I'd like for this Phoenix Pool to actually bring Rainbow back at the end. Maybe it can be something that doesn't always work but this one time I would like it to work, just this once.

>>345726345726 I need to find a way of draining sad and keeping it in a jar. i don't want all this sad. anyone know of a good use for a jar of pure concentrated sadness?

I really enjoy the way you portrait Scootaloo. And making Rainbow's death a mystery so far is a good thing, it creates more suspense that way. Great beginning, I wonder where this is going. I'll definitely track this story.

Using German(e) is a nice touch, but you're a bit off here and there. Nothing too bad, but nobody would say “Drei... zwei... eins... geh!", it would be “Drei... zwei... eins... los!". If you want to include more of it in the future, I wouldn't mind helping out. It's my first language.

Keep up the good work

I've been following this since the first chapter was uploaded to Equestria Daily. I really like it.

>>448431448431

Ah, a reader from EQD. Welcome. Glad you enjoy it . Third chapter should be up in a day or two (depending on how long editing takes)

>>448462448462

Oh, sweet! I was wondering when the third chapter would be up.

so much for that third chapter, eh', mate?

Still, moar plzx

>>543709543709

It's on its way. Going through the final editing run right now. I won't say when it'll come out (as my previous comments show, that only leads to embarrassment), but I can assure you that it is very close to being published

>>543718543718  Checked your blog and realised as such.

At least YOUR editor is far more prompt than mine...been waiting nearly  amonth for him to edit chapter 1....

>>543723543723

Yeah. My editor takes a bit of time too, but that's more because I can't seem to grasp the concepts of basic grammar.

On a slightly more positive note, I've almost got all of chapter 4 typed right now, so the wait for that chapter should be shorter.

>>543730543730

WOOT!

Was this worth a month's wait? Maybe, maybe not.

Is this the best chapter I've written yet? I believe so

I just checked my email...yay :D

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Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, finally! It was a delight, as always. Not too much happened concerning Scootaloo in this chapter, though I do wonder what Apple Bloom is hiding. I found two minor typos; there may be more, but I wasn't really looking for them, so here are the couple I spotted:

These is security, however.

"These" should be "there".

She turned her head and wretched

"Wretched" should be "retched".

Other than that, nice work. I enjoy the Scootaloo sections more than the Daring Do parts, but I understand their purpose, and I await chapter 4. Keep up the good work!

The part where Daring chases the fox reminds me of Jesse Cox's Skyrim series, where he will chase every fox that he sees, often ending up ambushed by a dragon because of it.

Very intriguing. Also, i hope the next chapter comes out slightly faster than this one did

Nice update, but I wonder what is Applebloom hiding from her own friends ?

Will it hurt the strong friendship these fillies have together ?

Nice Daring Doo moments in this chapter. Please do keep up the good work upon such storyline like this one.

has shit hit the fuck?

>>555990555990

Nope.

Fuck has hit the shit, however

Because 100th comment and I am lost for words.