Two of my favourite background characters put into a ship fic... Brilliant. You have my fav

This was a wonderful and cute story.

Forget about merging chapters two and three, merge them all together.

5565035 Gah! Fixed.
5565235 Double gah! Fixed.
5565392 Thanks. I ain't merging though. The chapters may be short, but I like them separate. In particular, I like the bookending in the first chapter (its last two paragraphs are the same as the first two) which would be less effective if the other chapters were tacked on at the end,

5760278 Thanks. In all honesty this is probably the worst story I've published on the site. It's not bad, but there's not much to make it especially good either. It was only the second story I published though, so I think I was still learning my style.

I do love the Flitter/Fritter ship though, so I'll probably revisit the topic by writing a sequel which will deal with the love triangle between Apple Fritter, Flitter, and Flitter's original fillyfriend. (Did I drop enough hints as to who that might be?) In the process I might tidy this one up a little, but don't expect many big changes.

5565392 OK, I did merge chapters 2 and 3 now.
5760278 Also fixed some of these mistakes in them.

Fritter would totally go gay for a pegasus.

Who wouldn't

The Fritter/Flitter word - game made this so funny

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This was my first attempt at writing clop. (Much bad. Very shame.)

But yes, their names go beautifully together, which is my main reason for shipping them. I always wanted to do a Fritter/Flitter/Flutter sequel to this with Fluttershy.

6308524 Oh I would totally read that! 10/10!

Yeah, this "clop" fic feels more like a forced romance scene from a B-movie. I had to push myself through reading it to finish it instead of just giving up on it.
It could be a lot better if you go back and rewrite the whole thing, add in more emotion, less telling and more showing, and since this is a one-night-stand kind of fic you might consider not getting them all mushy over a possible relationship; keep the hope and all that, but love doesn't just happen that way. Any relationship based on sex fails.

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Yeah, this was my first horse porn. Although I'm still relatively happy with it, I'd like to think I've improved since then.

Sorry, but I couldn't figure out who was Fritter's original fillyfriend. Was it Celestia or Luna?

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You mean Flitter's? It's Cloudchaser.

Good story. I liked it.
First time I see those ponies being paired. And that play of words: Flitter / Fritter. What a genius!!
Maresbian ponies for the win!!

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There's some shipping art of the pair:
https://derpibooru.org/search?q=apple+fritter+%26%26+flitter+%26%26+-vinyl+scratch