Pinkie Pie is my waifu, and she will ever four ever be my waifu... not yours.
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Twilight seems to have run into an unexpected disaster. The mystery that Twilight falls prey to goes on unsolved, but isn't there at least one pony out there willing to help this distressed unicorn? Maybe three?
Cover art by me, I guess. I don't really know if I need to link myself to my own story.
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Cute and a distinct possibility with these characters.
Everybody/-pony would look better if they had a different shade of coloring in their mane/hair. I must say, that strand of gray rather suits her mane quite well. It's not even gray, but more of a particular shade of gray mixed with a light cobalt.
I can very much see this happening... and that's what makes it so funny!
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Yes, I am not quite good with art, and it is definitely a work in progress for me. Sorry if my art skills aren't too good.
Thank you for reading the story anyways!
(If you did read the story. I'm not sure.)
They might want to decide what goes on their tombstones.
Hair dye? HAIR DYE!?
Well played.
5436043 Where did you get the icon for your avatar?
Ha! That was hilarious!
Um, Rainbow? Pinkie? You might wanna run away now.
Big Mac wasn’t entirely sure if his suspicions we accurate, but he decide to take a hoof of a guess
WERE accurate
DecideD
There were also a few present and past tenses mashed together in the middle of the story that were a bit confusing.
Other than that, this is a cute one-shot.
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I'll be sure to fix that! Thank you for liking the story and reading it!
If I'm not mistaken, you meant to say "Reaching far out of sight,". Using the same word twice in a sentence is awkward.
Two changes required: oakwood should be oak wood, and laying should be lying. Laying is used in a way that expresses a character placing a object on another object. Lying is used for describing the position of function.
Attempted
Walked
That comma should be a semi-colon.
As stated earlier from other users, you had a few tense errors, so I went through the liberty of finding them for you. The story was interesting, I guess. Good job, cousin.
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Oh, my cousin joins Fim Fiction! Most likely under the request of a certain somepony, am I right? Well, it is nice to see you, I hope you are having a swell time. Thanks for pointing those out for me, and thanks for the Favourite! Hope to see you later!
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Right you can't have tombstones with no bodies.
MILLION YEARS MOON!
5442061 yes!
I like this a lot. It reminded me of my Grandfather, who went completely gray at the ripe old age of 18, no hair dye required.
It says unicorn a bunch of times... it should be alicorn, shouldn't it? Unless this takes place post-S3 finale.
Cute story though!
This story makes me think of my older sister! I sometimes joke about her with grey hair, it's hilarious!
It's all in good fun though, she has a great sense of humor!
This isn't really part of Big Mac's character
Neat. Hair dye. That was hilarious.
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It's pre-season 3. I was following the cover art.
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Please elaborate because this is too vague for me to fix. I don't know if you're directing the comment to the dialogue or the narration.
You misspelled "Cadance" in the short description.
5443617 Sorry, I meant him talking. Big Mac just goes by Eeyup and Nope, he doesn't just randomly start a conversation with others; except for maybe memebers of his family
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Thanks, I'll fix that!
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I'm aware of that.
Was giggling before ... but totally lost it at
[Edit]
Ow ... ow ... ow ... my sides ... that ending
Now I want to see Rarity's reaction to getting a real grey hair. She'd have the freak-out of the century.
5443505 kk.
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Sorry, that would be too depressing of a story to do. Wallowing in self-pity, locked in her own room, and daring not a single pony to enter. Endless sobs from one side of the door, a nonchalant cat on the other, and many friends attempting to let her in on the joke she refuses to believe.
From that day forward, Rainbow Dash could not live up to her name.
WORTH IT.
5445504 - I suppose that's probably how it would go. If she was pranked with a grey hair and found out who did it, well...hath hath no fury...
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I know. I realized that right after I posted it and I was too lazy to edit it. XD Sorry for the confusion and apparent stupidity.
I guessed it the moment the two stooges walked in.
Big mac words of wisdom
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how did big mac know it was hair dye....
5451955 That's what I was wondering. There must be something he's not telling us.
With the amount of anime I've watched and their wildly differing hair colors, gray hair wouldn't look all that bad, as long the person's face underneath still looks young. And the hair is ful and thick, not wispy like hair tends to get when people grow old.
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With the amount of anime I've watched, I make every person that says "the amount of anime I've watched" seem as big as a 13-episode show.
5451955 perhaps that same prank was played on him by the crusaders
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No no, the cutie mark crusaders wouldn't never do something like that to big Mac *sarcasm* that's to obvious.
*to
Word missing.
Redundant. One of the marked words should be deleted.
Sure that shouldn't be "friends"?
Word missing.
*to
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Indeed, which is how I wanted it to be.
Word missing doesn't tell me anything, sadly, but from how I see the sentence, it looks fine.
Thanks for pointing out the errors, I'll be sure to fix them accordingly.
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He's right, there should be a the in between to and floor. If you say it out loud you should see the difference. But an example of why the should be there would look like so:
The man was spent, with so little energy he couldn't make it to the bed and promptly fell to floor.
But if you're going to put the in between the quoted sentence I'd change to to onto.
5454820 ah, I see it.
So, here's my thoughts.
This does sound like an actual episode. Twilight, despite being brilliant, would honestly react to a situation like this. Poor Spike is always on the receiving end of her little outbursts. Also this would be up RD and PP's alley, it's too easy to infuritate Twilight.
The one con I can find is that at the end of this, you kind of clumped a bunch of stuff together in one giant pile of words.
So, a solid piece of work. A place on my bookshelf it goes.
OK that is f*cking funny.
I'll prepare their funerals.
By DRWolf
Heh, cute! There's just one thing about it that confuses me... how would Big Mac know that it's hair dye? Obviously he could have been guessing, but premature grey hair is a thing, so how did he know? I think this calls for a chapter 2!
5588344 Thank you for that! I have already seen it, and it was better than I expected.
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Indeed, how did Big Mac know it was hair dye!? A question that might be answered in another story! (not another chapter [or will it!?]) lol sometimes I can't even tell.