When Marco woke up in Twilight's Library, his life changed drastically-in more ways than one. Now, as Equestria's first hybrid - Half human, half changeling, he has to deal with a new world, new powers, new creatures…
He'll get used to it- after all, every human has the ability to adapt to new environments. But can Equestria do the same, when a morally grey being falls into a black-and-white world?
The story takes place in an Alternate Season 3 where Discord wasn't released or reformed. This is my very first fanfic, so there will be a few mistakes. Leave any criticism or ideas in the comments.
Additional tags will be added as the story progresses, and it's rated "Teen" for some foul language and violence.
Chapters (6)
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and i was correct !
i cant wait to see what the buck hes going to do
And so begins the review from the Gnome
The story is good and i thing it is an original concept as far as the hybrid concept goes i do however wonder why he was speaking Chinese i assume now he is Asian but the odd skin color could be from the changing half of him. But i digress i would very much enjoy to see more of this story in the future.
And always remember a story is a painting of words,
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Ahaha, yeah. most of the changes were due to the Changeling half. Explanations and more to come in the next chapter.
And yes, Marco was based on me, and I'm Asian.
wow and your not surprised that i could tell it was Chinese writing didn't even have to look it up or nothing
spend 4 years with Chinese exchange student pic up some stuff 
not a human turnd changeling but a human changling hybrid story, well that dose sounds interesting if i might say so
i love it..... oh god i just did it!
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Wow...thanks.
Never knew feedback would be this positive.
amazing looking forward to more.
also good idea with the changeling human hybrid very different and original
A great and original story. There is only one problem... it needs more chapters!!
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Oh noes! I must go and fix that!
Next chapter may take a while, since I'm also preparing for my IGCSEs
525415 IGCSE? Whats that?
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Exams。
SOAWSOME!
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With the preview.
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Thanks!
I think the "track" button is the star next to the Like/Dislike.
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It also functions as the tracker, since it alerts you to the story updates.
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Well, I would be lying if I fully denied it...
Anyway, I'm currently working on the next chapter. Hopefully I can release it before my exams start...
You have received achievement "got my attention"
I like the premise, but I feel the story could be fleshed out a lot more. However, since this is the only first chapter I won't bitch too much. We shall see... we shall see...
566673 by "fleshed out more", you mean "go into more depth about the characters", or "get on with the storyline"?
Cuz' he's working on that.
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there is just less, hmm how do I say this... in cinema they would be called establishing shots.
For example, what was happening to our protagonist before he arrived in Equestria? how exactly did Twilight react to an alien creature unconscious on her doorstep? How DID he get to her doorstep? when did she call her for her friends? when did they show up?
so a little of both, But as I stated before, this is just the first chapter and this can all be added later if you so choose.
but the main thing for me, and this is just me. You really don't go into the characters thought processes, you will say what they think on occasion, but not WHY they think what they do. for example, if Twilight thought the human might be dangerous, why didn't she put it in a cage or have AJ hogtie him? Motivation is key, even for established characters like the mane six.
ya need the who, what, when, where, why and how. though it is perfectly reasonable in this case to withhold the "how" for the sake of the plot.
Of course this is just my opinion, it is your right as Author to take the story in any direction you choose, and write in whatever style you want. You by no means HAVE to do any of the things I have mentioned. I only bring them up because I personally feel they would make the story more immersive. Any way you go you still have one hell of a story.
I'm not trying to rag on you, just trying to give feedback. Sorry if I offended you.
567684 No, no. Why should I be offended by honest criticism?
In my opinion, the author should learn from his readers.
its.... AWESOME. moar please
I love the idea. There are plenty of HiE fanfics, but VERY few of them are partial transformation ones. I like the idea of the human becoming half changeling. I look forward to the next chapter.
610006 Heh, thanks
Next chapter may take a while, since I'm currently swamped with exams.
610569 You're welcome.
Heh, that's O.K., since I'm currently swamped with other fanfics.
I know what exams are like. I finished mine last week.
oohhhh this is gonna be goood
New chapter!! Yes!!!!!!!!!!
oh yeah!
round one fight!!!
Can I just suggest separating the dialogue fro the paragraphs, it makes everything so much easier to read that way.
Interesting, I'll keep an eye on this.
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Thanks for the suggestion!
This has definitely caught my attention. Going to track.
P.S thansk for the like of my story.
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Haha, Thanks.
And I love Percy Jackson! How could I NOT track!?
It also helped that the 1st chapter was really well written!
This is going to my read later pile. I'll give feedback as soon as I can ok?
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No problem, and thanks!
I liked it. It's easy to follow and has a denect writing style. The only tip I can give is to put each phrase in a dialog in a diferent paragraph.
Example: (“It says ‘Keep the changeling there. Shining Armor and I are on our way.'” Twilight gasped in surprise. "My brother's coming too!?"
Suddenly, the door flew open, and several armored ponies rushed in, horns glowing and swords drawn. “Stand down, changeling!” One of them barked “The Princess and Captain have arrived!”)
Instead of a single paragraph.
Oh and BTW... what asian language are you speaking there?
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I'll keep that in mind, thanks!
It's Mandarin. I chose that instead of Cantonese (the language of Hong Kong-I don't really know other places that use it), because it is more formal, and my computer doesn't accept Cantonese characters.
HOLY FUCK AN UPDATE!
MOAR!!!! WE MUST HAVE MOAR!!!
HA! Oh god, can't breath, can't stop laughing.
Hm. Could you perhaps revise it to reduce the number of guards?
Great chapter again. I am actualy enjoying this fic and the concept of a Pony-Changeling Hybrid is making me curious.
Good job keep going.
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Ah, you think six is a bit too unbelievable?
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Thanks! It's great that people enjoy my work!
And it's actually Human/changeling, although if he turned into a pony, it would be Pony/changeling...
1087727 For this guy, yeah. He's not exactly Tommy Oliver.
Edit: made changes to the third chapter, and reduced the number of guards I beat: I'm a 15 year old kid, not some MMA fighter.
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You've got a point.
Done.
So...Are we going to be getting any fire-roasted changelings anytime soon? I'm not saying to necessarily kill them, just burn them a bit. (I picture a changeling pinching out fire at the tip if a flaming horn with its hooves. Maybe with an unamused expression on its face.
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Haha, it's certainly possible.
1087730 And I wrote a Typo again... god I hate my brain sometimes. Thanks I ment Human-Changeling not Pony. Anyways Thanks for the warning and thanks for the story.
Also sorry for not posting my chapter for so long but between finishing the last book of the Eragon series, starting another book, watching/playing videogames, hanging out with friends, sleeping (I do that a LOT) I have only written the chapter guide.
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No problem, take your time.