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Jay Bear

Joined July 2011
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Stories (3)

  • Late Bloomer
    Being last in your class to get a cutie mark runs deep in the Apple family...

    6,712 words · 4,734 views · 93 likes · 1 dislikes
  • There is Always a Way
    Rainbow Dash learns she can't always fly solo.
    4,472 words · 1,184 views · 26 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Trixie's Bargain
    Trixie makes a deal with the devil. Things go worse than expected.
    3,418 words · 1,600 views · 19 likes · 3 dislikes

Apple Bloom goes, reluctantly, to a book-signing event at the Ponyville library, and soon finds herself talking to the new author. When the conversation turns to getting a cutie mark, she learns a lot more than she expected about the stars, her ancestors, and the value of patience.

First Published
9th Nov 2011
Last Modified
8th Nov 2011

Comments ( 21 )

#1 · 147w, 14h ago · · ·

6/5 stars, no other way to describe this fic. Wish I could actually comment on something, but I'm stunned. Seriously.

#2 · 147w, 14h ago · · ·

ARGH! I AM INCAPABLE OF RATING THIS HIGH ENOUGH! 80/10!

#3 · 147w, 13h ago · · ·

Nice idea behind this one. Topped off with cuteness done well. Good job.

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#4 · 147w, 13h ago · · ·

I was touched, I really was. The writing was fluid, the story fit together flawlessly, and the depth was inspirational. I commend you on a job well done, Jay Bear. Kudos.

#5 · 147w, 12h ago · · ·

Whoa, hold on, it was totally Leafy Nuts that invented calculus, not Falling Apple.

#6 · 146w, 6d ago · · ·

Thank you all for your kind words. This one definitely took a while, but I was really pleased with how it came out in the end, and I'm glad other people are enjoying it too.

>>27276

Oh, wow, you won't believe how long I spent trying in vain to come up with a pony name for Leibnitz. Twenty internets to you, good brony.

#7 · 146w, 6d ago · · ·

>>27276

i see what you did thar!:ajsmug:

#8 · 146w, 6d ago · · ·

What more can I say - superb story!

#9 · 146w, 6d ago · · ·

This was amazing! I usually don't read a lot of pony fiction, but this kept me hooked throughout the entire story. I'd love to see more stories with this kind of emotion.

#10 · 146w, 5d ago · · ·

Not bad... Not bad at all.

:)

#11 · 146w, 5d ago · · 1 ·

Well, it was ok... The majority of the story was just dialogues and beats, not enough narration, and the narration you had just didn't display the emotions very well. All in all, three out of five stars.

#12 · 146w, 5d ago · · ·

Holy hell, you made it into EqD. Somethin' i've been wanting to do for a while!

#13 · 146w, 5d ago · · ·

A perfect 5 star rating even after 29 ratings, Hmmm, I might just have to read this one.

#14 · 146w, 5d ago · · ·

>>28517

I was not disappointed. The plot is great, there were few if any grammatical errors, and the whole story just felt like it would fit right into an episode of the show. This story deserves every star it's been given.

#15 · 146w, 5d ago · · ·

If I rate you 5/5, can I get ice cream?

just kidding, 145/10 stars

#16 · 146w, 5d ago · · ·

This story isn't just good fanfiction; it's excellent fiction, simply put.

I appreciate the hard work that you put into the writing.  The story of Moondancer's cutie mark is wonderful!  And that's an excellent use of Twilight's telescope...

#17 · 146w, 5d ago · · ·

>>27204

>>28262

I feel the same way! :pinkiehappy:

#18 · 146w, 3d ago · · ·

Not the kind of thing that blows me away, thinking "wow, that was a great read" days later, but I can't find any fault with it.  Simply enjoyable.

#19 · 144w, 2d ago · · ·

: you win the internet. or at least a lot of fluttershy's

#20 · 143w, 5d ago · · ·

Lucky you, I read all your stories.  This one was by far the best.  Nice work with the OC, and it truly is a beautiful story, even if you did have to come up with all sorts of pony names for scientists(well done on that by the way).  I hope you keep up with the writing, because these are really good.

#21 · 141w, 3d ago · · ·

>>28367

That awkward moment when you realize you're the only fag here :trollestia:

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