The Darkest Alley

Vampony Minibar #1 · Jan 27th, 2015 · 2 · 1 ·

I don't know why people disliked this compelling story. It was really well written, and it shows just what can happen when someone is pushed past the breaking point. Have a like!

aCB

aCB #2 · Jan 28th, 2015 · 1 · 1 ·

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Thank you! I know that some of the dislikes came minutes after the story was published, so some of it was dislike of what the story looked like it would be, I guess. Anyway, I'm happy I finally got a comment.

Vampony Minibar

Vampony Minibar #3 · Jan 28th, 2015 · 4 · 1 ·

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5561250 You should write more like this! Matter of fact, I think I'll follow you to make sure of it!

HeavensRaptor

HeavensRaptor #4 · Feb 4th, 2015 · 4 · 1 ·

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I knew where this was going once I got to the pink shield and mist, awesome job! You earned another follower! kekeke!
Although, ow... my feelings hurt.

aCB

aCB #5 · Feb 7th, 2015 · 2 · 1 ·

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I like rupees! Keke!

Camra17

Camra17 #6 · Feb 12th, 2015 · 5 · 1 ·

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Woah, I found this very compelling. At first it seemed to be a very simple story of the doctor and some girl. then it gets bizzare and confused me with the dark scenes. yet I found these to be incredibly interesting. Lastly the way this story ends; its really strong because everything seems like something so dark and twisted, yet it also has a vibe that lets you want to keep reading. What I loved most was the fact that I couldn't stop thinking that some "passionate" bronies/pegasisters could actually have something like this happen to them because of the case in severe denial and disillusionment.
Bravo, Great Story!

MrNelg

MrNelg #7 · Feb 23rd, 2015 · 7 · 2 ·

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Holy S***!

I'm stoked. That was fantastic. Honestly, I that really caught me off guard. I was not expecting that.

What I like the most about this story is the set-up. Its done beautifully. You lure the reader in with what looks like your typical brony in equestria story, before pulling the rug right out from under them. The hints were there and looking back at them after you finish the stroy, they all make sense. Sir, I stand up and applaud you. It still retained enough of a mystery about it that it held that confusing edge that all made sense right at the end.

Honestly, I can't think of anything wrong with it. I think the reason for all the down votes might have to do with the whole, “She was Raped,” aspect, and some people just don't react well to that. I like the world you created, giving off that dark, all enclosing atmosphere that felt like something was looming over us all, watching with malevolence, while at the same time, hinting at something else.

Again, very well writen with a great atmosphere.

aCB

aCB #8 · Feb 24th, 2015 · 5 · 1 ·

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Honestly, I was really hoping you'd read this one, and I'm very glad you did. Really nice of you to read two, as well. I'm glad you liked it!

If you ever need any help with some pre-reading or editing, let me know. Schedule permitting, I'd be happy to help, as you write pretty good stories yourself.

herp