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Gemzi


I'm Gemzi, and I love writing and reading stories, thought I'm pretty new at this so forgive me if I make too many mistakes. Hope you enjoy

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Discord And Fluttershy are getting close again, since it has been over a year since Discord threw away their friendship. Determined to set things right, he tries to make it up to her. Yet everytime he is around her, he feels something spark inside of him, and he knows what it is, but he denies this new feelings. Fluttershy, who also is having conflicts, accidentaly made a peep about liking somepony. Her friends won't let her keep it a secret, and Fluttershy is scared of their judgement if she tells him who this special 'somepony' is. Will their friendship blossom into something more?

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 13 )

hmm... I agree with Demin. The chapters are too short to truly be able to fully enjoy it. anything below 1000 words just doesn't get the emotions through and for now it just appears rushed and that hurts the story and characters.

THE CHAPTERS NEED TO BE LONGER AND oh my cap lock was on,,,, anyway longer chapters and more plot not just 1 conversation then chapter ends and make more chapters!!!! plz

This is beautiful...don't stop. I noticed somethings, though.

About a month or so after his betrayal he was given a small plot of land in the everfree forest were he could spread his chaos as much as he pleased.

ever free forest should be Everfree Forest.

" Please?" Fluttershy begged and gave him the biggest puppy eyes possible.

Xtra space.

"Bye." and discord took off.

Caps.

"Excuse me, are you all right? I'm so sorry! I was taking these plates to the kitchen, and I didn't watch where I was going. I hope your ok, " said a voice.

you're, or you are.

Sketchie was one of the maids at canterlot castle, doing chores and setting tables. She was a pegasus with a white coat and a soft blue mane.

More caps.

"Ohhhhh, is this a bout a certain yellow pegasus?" Sketchie teased, earning a blush from Discord.

More xtra space.
Please don't hate me for being too critical. LUV DA STORY

Need to have a longer chapters. At least 2000 words each. Short scenes are just too forgetable.

It's fine on making short chapters, but it has to be at least everyday you publish more of this romantic stories of yours. I like this and I can't wait for more. Fluttercord forever!!!:heart:

This is really cute :yay: I do wish the chapters were longer but that's ok so long as you're comfortable with them and keep them coming :pinkiehappy:

this story is really cute i hope you write more:yay:

I lllllooove it. I love the writing and the romance. Right now I am screaming inside because I want to read more. Keep up the good work!

My dear author,
I will do nearly anything to assist you in speeding this story along. I freaking love this story so much.

:pinkiehappy: Awww Oh I hope you update soon it's killing me not knowing what's happening :pinkiehappy: hope you can update soon look forward to reading the next chapter :yay:

Gaaaaahhhhhhhhh....
Update! Pwease! Even though you just killed me with the cuteness, I still want more!!!:flutterrage:
Oh...uhh...i-if that's alright with you, that is...:yay:
I saw the grocery list swapped with the poem coming from a hundred miles away, but it's still far too adorable...

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