Living in a world where everything wants to kill you is hard, that goes for everypony, As the young farmer Ransoms life falls apart, his friends and family killed, he is left with nothing other than a what he has on his back.
In this tale ransom will be faced with everything the wastland can throw at him and he will need to learn how to survive, but he will also learn how deal with something new to him...
*update
I have redone the entire prolog and am working on redoing the chapters, I hope that they are a bit better, i will try not to rush them this tim around!
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This is my first Fanfic so i as that you would give me some feedback, i would appreciate it
Chapters (5)
okay, i cant simply read this.
you need to learn more about wrighting, but i can help you with that. If you need help please comment back, and ill try to make something that could help you
Your formatting is uhhh...unique, I should say.
I'll be back.. to comment more.
I like this already and I haven't even read this. People are going to give you some dislikes and few are going to give you likes. Trust me, people are pretty brutal to first fic writers, Don't be bothered by it. If you like what you're doing, just keep writing. Ignore what others say. Oh and the guy above me spelled writing wrong, so he just negates his own comment.
Okay I just read the first chapter and I have to say, you need to use the spell check buddy. If you want, I can oganize this entire story for you. I'm doing pretty good considering the feedback I get from my stories.
The formatting on the prologue makes it nearly unreadable. I'm sorry, but I couldn't get into it. As another FoE author, it's always nice to help out other wasteland ponies, so I give this as constructive criticism. You really, really need to work on the format of your story.
I just dont know what went wrong....
All jokes aside i would like to give some thanks for the feedback and I will get to work on trying to put it into a format that is no so allover the place, I should have put alot more work into it and have had someothers look at it also... but I will keep trying *No matter how much you hate it!* tell its atleast is somewhat enjoyable! I cant blame you if you would rather go read some better fanfic *And there are alot of them!* But please keep giveing me feedback so that you may help me become a better writer!