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Twilight Sparkle isn�t dead.
But she's not exactly alive either, and there�s only one pony who can see her, can hear her, can prove that Twilight still exists. Unfortunately for Twilight, or perhaps fortunately, that pony is a certain pink baker and party planner.
Image by Coyoterainbow. Link: http://fc05.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/233/a/f/good_life_by_coyoterainbow-d47eeub.jpg And no, I have not seen Ghost. Improved summary courtesy of Donny's Boy.
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AU taking place before the main series; also Luna was never banished and for whatever reason Discord won't be busting out of his statue nor will Chrysalis attack. Otherwise this story will just turn into another "The villains win!" story, which are good stories, but I'm going with something different.
Writing Pinkie is fun. I never knew how fun it could be! Also, throughout the first segment of this chapter, this was playing in my head.
Interesting premise, I will have to read this later.
A good start and an original concept. I like!
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That's both a shame and a relief to me. You're going with "something different", but you don't know how to name it, do you? I believe that you mean that this story is going to be based purely on emotion and social interaction, although the element of solving an issue still exists here.
poor thumbs up bar. Here's a 100% positive for you.
Hmmm... This reminds me of "Just like heaven." I hope there are a few comedic elements to lighten it a bit. But it's Twinkie. I am so there.
It is a very interesting story. +1 thumbs up for you.
very very interesting story. am i the only one who thought of Ghost with Patrick Swayze while reading this?
It's a good story so far but i kind of wish Twilight went into a coma after she met her friends.
But anyway its a great story tracked. 
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I admit, I suck at naming things. Any suggestions at a better title?
From everyone, not just Paper Crease.
502618 As stupid and unimaginative as my suggestion sounds, I'd think just shortening it down to Still Alive would be very nice.
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I'll go with that for now. Thanks!
this story is making me tear up and i barley cry
URG MEH FEELINGS!
so sad the not one can see her but pinkie
Interesting premise. A nice spin on the "Pinkie as fourth wall breaker" theme.
holy crap VINYL as a genre savy chick and holing a friendship with her polar opposite? This universe rocks.
This seems fitting.
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This is a great fic even if it is sad at the sametime
And I really like how is it going.. please continue
And i loved this right from the beginning.
I though the picture is cute, but the summary doesn't sound so interesting.(yeah I’m wired when i choose what stories to read)
Then i started reading.
let me repeat: I love this.
There were tears in my eyes after i finished, and i didn’t noticed them until i started writing this comment.
You deserve the fav, the like and the entry in my Top 5.
Now please. I beg you. PLEASE keep up the good work.
I do believe that the following adaquately represents my thoughts on the subject of this story:
"This was a triumph.
I'm making a note here: HUGE SUCCESS.
It's hard to overstate my satisfaction."
I am very excited to see the next chapter.
This is really good.
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Well, as to Discord if Luna was never banished then she and Celestia would still control the Elements of Harmony which would likely keep the seal on him from weakening.
I really really like this.
Please keep it up my friend.
continue writing in quickly. please?
Erm. That cover image makes me think this should have the 'Sad' tag On it.
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The first chapter is sad, but the second lightens up considerably. I'm not sure which mood the story will swing to overall, so I'm waiting to put out more chapters and see what it turns out feeling like before labeling it as Sad or Comedy or whatever.
new chapter!!
i love where this story is going. Keep this up.
on the bare floor(She was offered a pillow, but alas, she would only fade through it)
How do you explain that she doesn't sink through the floor, but does through a pillow? Does astral form subtract from the permeability level of an object, rather than multiply it by 0?
Perhaps Pinkie is part of the border between the land of ponies and the plane of the ones who cannot awaken.
Or maybe I'm a bit deprived of sleep.
Pinkie should just talk to the cakes... <3 new chapter
Not sure if making the spirit jokes on purpose...
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But where's the angst and fun in that?
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What spirit jokes?
546770"Pinkie, you have helped more than enough. You've comforted me, made me laugh, hay, just you talking to me has lifted my spirits more than you know."
"It's the spirit of things!" Pinkie objected. "No, you are sleeping in here, in a nice room with a nice floor and a nice warm fire in the chimney! I won't take no for an answer!"
Now, I know my friends chide me for finding jokes where there clearly were none intended, but...
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Yeah, those weren't intentional, but are funny as heck now that I see it.
Oh god. All the puns i make in real life have finally infected my subconscious!
I say! This story is adorable!
Keep going good sir and there will be a shiny new tuppence in it for you!
Pinkie Pie, you just keep on breaking physics and everything will be okay
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ANOTHER GOOD CHAPTER!!
The saddest part about this chapter is... that when it's over, I have to wait so long for another. I know it can't be helped... but something as precious as this makes it hard to wait for.
Fantastic work my good sir. Pinkie is very Pinkie, Twi is accurate, and the secret fears of the cakes (and information of Celestia's cake addiction) are very well done.
I will admit to being a bit lost on how Twi knows Luna when it shouldn't be possible for her to exist, seeing as how conventional wisdom places her on the moon at this time in her life. If she was freed, she'd know her friends. If she wasn't, then who was she talking too? More importantly, do the other members of the Mane 6 possess the ability to detect her in any way? Is it more than Pinkie's dimensional irregularity that allows her to see Twilight, like a link born of the elements of harmony or the sonic rainboom that gave them all their cutie marks? It would be interesting if Twi became more real the more of the mane 6 she was around. Not necessarily enough to be seen maybe, but perhaps enough to use magic or be heard or even just touch things? That would be an interesting complication. On the other hand, it would probably detract from the focus of the TwiPie friendshipping plot. Still worth considering... IDK as a way to confirm to Pinkie what's real, or maybe to bring her out of a crazy-state when she needs it?
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You're ignoreing the AU tag, Luna in this fic never turned to Nightmare Moon, though we did get a small glimpse of Nightmare when Twi was first hurt, Luna's small rant of how everything seemed to be taken from her.
547949 Ah I figured it was something like that. I must have just forgotten the AU tag. My bad. That does beg the question as to what else is different though. Obviously the Rainboom is the same.
I like where this is going
Keep it up Book
That was beautiful in a lot of ways. I'm loving this.
Nice.
I think a good metaphor for this story would be riding on a beautiful train, but up ahead you know the track will be really bumpy
Wow, this is really good and well written.
I can´t wait to see how this gonna continue. Will Twi show Pinkie her body in the hospital? Will Pinkie speak for Twi to ensure her family and mentors and Spike that everything gonna be alright? Will Twi find a way to get back inside her body? Can Twi the longer she stays with Pinkie not only regain her ability to sleep but also her ability to use her magic? Can she enter other ponies and overtake their bodies for a short time (like in other ghost stories)? And most important:
Will they find out why Twi´s spirit was separate from her body (i believe that wasn´t an accident but due the assassins attack, they wanted her soul/magic but failed in getting it but still managed to separate the body and soul in the process) and will they find out who attacked Twi so that she´s in the state she´s now???
God, this could become so so so so so great, i´m giggling all over the place.
This story is really good so far, and makes me wish it updated faster, but hey don't rush it. I am very curious as to what happens with this story, I find it to be a very interesting take on the whole 'what if Twilight never left for Ponyville?' question.
Your story is very intriguing, I love how you mixed two of my favorite interpretations of Pinkie's personality; the emotional deep character hidden under a mask of sunshine and laughter; and to a lesser extend, the "head in the clouds" character that knows more and is more intelligent than she lets off.
However, your Twilight's misrepresenting of the scientific method is bugging me a little. Twilight's claim to "once upon a time consider the Pinkie sense a scientific impossibility" assuming that "once upon a time" was before she got comatose rather than when she was but a little filly and didn't know better, is totally not how the scientific method works. Science works by measuring the probability and accuracy of an assertion through observations and evidence; an assertion is more probable the more evidence and observations support it, and made less probable with either a lack of evidence and/or contradictory ones. Science refuses the concept of unfalsifiability (An assertion that can never be (never be = no probability of) contradicted by observations and evidence.[i.e Can never be proven wrong.]) and just as readily, impossibility (An assertion that can never be supported by observations and evidence.[i.e Can never be proven right.]). Thus (assuming "Pinkie senses" aren't well documented.) her thoughts should have been closer to "scientific improbability" rather than "scientific impossibility".
Also, I am somewhat disappointed with how Twilight "proved" her existence to Pinkie Pie, it would have gone much better if she were to go along the lines of "Hey! Why don't we make a quick trip to the royal hospital in Canterlot like, tomorrow morning? I'm sure showing you my comatose and very real body would, if anything, lessen your doubts and give me, your supposed delusion, a fairer chance!"
The current result of Twilight's prove of existence would most likely not alleviate Pinkie's doubts of her existence by much, for long. Mostly because if Pinkie gave any serious thought about Twilight's explanation, she would discover three simple counters against Twilight's existence hypothesis.
1. Delusions can make ponies smile. I mean, lots of crazy ponies do that all the time!
2. Delusional ponies can think up some of the most crazy of things, even if they could convince themselves they would never conjure up such ridiculousness. I mean, lots of crazy ponies do that all the time!
3. How does thinking up wise words about not to judge someone by their cover prove the existence of anything?
I mean,lots of crazy ponies do that all the time! Scratch that, only some crazy ponies think them philosophies up all the time! (Kinda like AbsoluteAnonymous' take on Pinkie Pie [Which makes this counter just a little bit more valid if you think about it.], only she wasn't that crazy... relatively speaking.)557058
1) I agree, BUT that was how Twi acted in Feeling Pinkie Keen. She didn't go by the Scientific Method in that ep, trying to find out how it worked and the like. Instead, she focused on disproving it, forming a hypothesis(the Pinkie Sense can't be real) and trying to find evidence of that instead of the other way around. It is one of many reasons why I hate that episode, but it is canon.
2) Well, from a narrative standpoint, it wouldn't be as meaningful as this. It's Twilight asking Pinkie to take a leap of faith, a reversal of their usual situation. It's developing that trust. Plus, Twilight probably doesn't want to go to Canterlot and risk seeing her family in pain again unless she's back to normal or has no other choice. And they're going to the library. Pus, Pinkie does have a job, she has to wait till her next day off/weekend before she can take a hours long trip to Canterlot. This will at least satiate Pinkie long enough for the theoretical trip.
And furthermore, I think you're missing the point. Yes, these are all signs of craziness, and logically it puts it into doubt. But this isn't logic, it's friendship. It's Pinkie learning to trust somepony that they're there for her, that they won't just forget her and just hang with her during parties or just get so annoyed they avoid her. Just like Twilight learned the same thing with AJ, that friends will be there and you can trust them. Logically, why didn't AJ just say "Dash and 'Shy will catch ya,"? Because from a writing standpoint it's not as powerful. It served a purpose, developing Twi and her views on friendship. What would she have learned if Applejack had said the logical thing?
Sorry if I sounded faux artsy there. But thanks for commenting, the fact that you went in depth with your complaint must mean you care about/are invested in the story, so that's good!
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Yeah! I am quite interested in your story!
I do hate Feeling Pinkie Keen too, not because Pinkie Pie could seemingly predict the near future with body spasms, but because of how Twilight handled that phenomenon. In my opinion, she should have done some field tests with Pinkie's senses (i.e. Rigging objects to drop near Pinkie, doors to open etc, etc.) preferably without alerting Pinkie to her tests (Blind Testing).
If Twilight observed the Pinkie Sense before the rigs are set off, she is probably precognitive (Can predict the future).
If Twilight observed the Pinkie Sense after the rigs are set off, she is probably reflexivity perceptive (Is subconsciously or instinctively observant).
If Twilight observed Pinkie observe the rigs going off before the Pinkie Sense "sets off", she is probably just exceptionally observant (And trolling of the whole of Ponyville at that.).
If Twilight observed the Pinkie Sense irregardless of rigs and genuine incidents, her "Pinkie Sense" is probably just a big coincidence (and ponies are just more observant of certain things around one.).
By actually correctly practicing the scientific method, Twilight could have easily found out how the Pinkie Sense tick. She could have written a letter to Princess Celestia about how she learnt not to pass prejudgements and to follow where the evidence leads. Princess Celestia would've been so proud of her... Rather than her "take it on faith" letter which Princess Celestia probably burnt or sent to the moon followed by sobbing in a corner in self pity over her prodigy's blatant contortion of the scientific method. (Observe how the letter from Feeling Pinkie Keen was never read out loud by Twilight. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Uf83Yd8QaK4 )
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I do disagree somewhat on the "leap of faith" part, it would be much more impactful to show Twilight and Pinkie staying true and loyal to each other, enjoying the good times together, suffer through the harsh times together, and grieve upon the sorrowful ones together. That they would never part, that even when they get into a heated argument and broke up, Twilight and Pinkie would always come back to make amends and hugs...
Additionally, you could make a very interesting plot where Pinkie is fairly confident of Twilight's existence (She saw Twilight's body and everything.) and the Cakes not knowing any better, persuades Pinkie to make some real friends.
Besides if AJ were to say "Let go, let go and Dash an' Shy'll catch ya, you'll be safe, you gotta trust me on that." the impact would not have been lost, on top of that, Twilight would have demonstrated a willingness to trust others rather than a willingness to take them up on faith. (It takes a great deal to put your trust in two near complete strangers at saving your life. But it takes a whole deal of complete naive to hold faith in that somehow, the pony you just met today, holding on to your life, asking you to let go, is not going to cause you to fall to your horrible death.)
I mean, I just don't see why we can't have both logic and friendship ;P
(p.s. This is an alternate universe fic, you can ignore as much cannon as you need.)