Andrew Joshua Talon
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Oooh, interesting.
...Yeah, your credibility is just dead.
Completely dead.
...But, you know, if you get onto another chapter of "Hands"...
It might just take its second wind and get back up.
Maybe.
It's ok. You still have credibility with us.
Wonder how long it's going to take this one to get featured.
That was wonderful. that is all.
Did you post this without a pre reader?
edit: Hmm... interesting...
You say that like you ever had any.
For the canon Dash I couldn't see it but this version. Oh yeah I can see it. Just wish the main fic would update already.
wat
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:/ not sure if gusta....
If you ever want to do more clop, I'm sure you could get quite a bit from the blossoming three-way relationship in 'Hands'.
Assuming you ever continue it, of course.
Get back to Hands. That is all.
at first all was all like images.wikia.com/sonicfanon/images/3/31/RainbowDash4.png
but then I was all like images.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw4137-132434205267.jpg
...
.....
.......
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I liked this.
Not bad. Not super great, but not bad.
I always find that Humanized clop is both easier to read and casually enjoy, while being less intensly erotic.
That said I appreciate that this was straight clop without any storyline convoluted dicking around.
Now reveal that Dash never followed him to the Mayor's from the party and that was a shapeshifted Celestia.
write some clop chapters in hands when the time comes if u want
So this is just a humanized version of "Unmovable"?
Sounds good to me.
Well. That's different. In a good way.
nice
....*inhales* go on...
I still don't know if he is doing: the curse of fatal death. He said something like that at the end of BTH, but I need to know!
Also, nice.
ANDREW! FOR SHAME, I would expect this from RagingSemi, BUT YOU?!
......ah well, it was still a good fic
^My reactions^
495896 Don't do this, keep "Hands" PG-13. If, however, you want to do some "supplementary" stories which would fit in between certain chapters...
Pun totally fuckin' intended.
P.S. "The element of Loyalty was known as a bit of a blowhard (No pun intended),"
OH SHIT, A STORY ABOUT DASH NOT BEING GAY?
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Post-read
oh, she is bisexual...
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Oh, well at least this wasn't a gay clopfic
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I liked it! Just wish you'd have some Pinkie-centric stories.
You do know that guards are allowed to move if you touch them, right? Unless he was just testing his willpower.
I'll admit, clop fics are a guilty pleasure of mine, as are humanized stories. As long as they're well written. You have succeeded in this regard.
Five stars, thumbs up, and all that other congratulatory jazz.
it's amazing how in-character this is. It's obviously toned-down because it's a kids show, but of all the girls Dash seems like the most unscrupulous
says he lost all credibility
like to dislike is 32 to 1
Oh my god, you are ruined forever. I think I'm going to go bitch on message boards about how you sold out and how you suck and how you should be beaten with cattle prods and etc.
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Andrew Putting clop fic... not used to this...
It's always a massive cock isn't it?
495595
My thoughts exactly.
496382
It was kinda stuck in deep... dammit 
)
You don't beat with cattle prods, you confidently thrust with them (I had no idea how to get that double entendre out of there
Credibility? Though unlike others here, I am still throughly addicted to "Luna vs something-or-other".
Awesome.............
Fucking Hawt,
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Andrew Joshua Talon putting up a clopfic
Knowing how much I love his other stories, I am 120% sure that I will ENJOY this
kk, I'll be popping down here and putting any corrections I see needed.
Wow, first one right off the bat!
Royal Guard Zero was positioned alone outside the Mayor's office, still, alert and focused.
Royal Guard Zero was positioned alone outside the Mayor's office, still, alert, and focused.
Why the comma before and? It's the Oxford or serial comma. Think of this:
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Use it.
He himself had had to stop an errant assassination attempt or two-Terrible misguided and both committed by the mentally unwell. One Winged Folk had confused the Princess for a fire breathing marshmallow, after all.
Umm... What?
He himself had had to stop an errant assassination attempt or two; terribly misguided, and both committed by the mentally unwell. One 'Winged Folk'- or an 'Angel', if you were to use slang- had confused the Princess for a fire breathing marshmallow, after all.
Except for Folk like a certain rainbow-haired, blue-winged girl who had taken to hanging around. She was the holder of the Element of Loyalty (her name unfortunately escaped him at the moment), and thus to be treated with respect. However, he wasn't going to break the rules about his reactions while on duty for anyone, not even a hero of Equestria. If you're changing Ponyville to Sunnyville, why keep it Equestria?
She applied just the right amount of suction, that nearly weakened Zero's knees to the point of bending them.
Comma doesn't work. Maybe a semicolon, or nothing?
She applied just the right amount of suction; that nearly weakened Zero's knees to the point of bending them.
She applied just the right amount of suction that nearly weakened Zero's knees to the point of bending them.
No... rephrasing, then.
She applied the perfect amount of suction, almost causing Zero's knees to bend.
Flows better, I think.
It took a few thrusts, but soon her was burying himself to the hilt in her taut box.
*he, not her.
Zero's eyes widened, and he looked for cover somewhere-Anywhere.
Kinda obvious, this one.
Zero's eyes widened, and he looked for cover somewhere- anywhere.
So... yeah. Good job. Do you know what it's like, critiquing clop?
*puts on sunglasses*
It's hard.
YEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!!
And if you ever want help or pointers, don't be afraid to ask me. Try reading my clop!
(self-advertising, lol)
AJT is writing clopfics... the world just got a bit warmer. We must be getting closer to pony hell huh?
In a funny way, this was really good. In a serious way, this was pretty hot. Try some more if you are inspired again to do it. 
I love you even more now, Andrew, No homo. I GUESS I GOTS TO READ THIS SEEING HOW DAMN MUCH I LOVE THIS FILTHY STUFF.
After reading: Wow. Just, wow. Dude, that was some of the best clop I ever read. You're really damn versatile. If you ever feel the urge to write more please don't hold back. Clop may not be the most dignified or noble or whatever of genres, but you'd be doing a disservice to hold back. I look forward to more clop now in addition to your usual non-clop. Not many authors (if any) I can honestly say that about ('cause its usualy one or t'other of course.)
496668 You'd prefer the small, half-flaccid penis?
more like, eh nothing I haven't seen before,497690
I saw it was YOU who uploaded this... So why not.
At the end, I was just thinking: "HOLY SHIT!!!" In other words; "That was actually pretty good"
When I saw the word "MASH" I was like
"Omg, A MASH/Pony Crossover!"
I was disappointed.
But I did like this story albeit it...saucy.
Also - MAKE A MASH/PONY CROSSOVER! I demand a ponified Hawkeye!
THIS HAS DEFINATELY PEAKED MY INTERESTS
Am I the only one who read this thinking the characters are the original ponies themselves instead of the humanized forms?
The only thing that you would lose credibility for with this is that you didn't continue the "FOR NOOKIE!" running gag.
... I... I'm not quite sure why I read that. But I do not regret it.
She gave him a naughty smile that Zero desperately tried to replace with an image of his grandmother in a swimsuit.
you killed my boner dude
not cool
499266 doesn't matter, had sex.
Here's my obligatory jizz. You're welcome.