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Distorted Flare


King nigger lord of the watermelon, duke of the chicken realm, high almoner of the grape cool aid of the Nile, has no tolerance for white people.

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Dusk Shine and Princess Celestia have been dating for nearly two years now. But after countless failed attempts at having foals, Dusk Shine seeks the help of medical staff. The result leaves the stallion devastated.


Just a short story I threw together

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Comments ( 13 )

Wow. That was so touching. Great job. I love how a couple can come together when tragedy strikes. Good luck with future stories.

I have found two errors that are '. .' and '..'. Will find more later

This.... is.... AWESOME!:raritystarry:

A great story, if I do say so myself. :eeyup:

These are some mistakes I found.

I ignored the small gasps from ponies who recognised him.

, how could I spring this on Celestia now?.

There is a period at the end of that scentence that should not be there.

my stomach made a sharp, gurgling noise..

There is an extra period.

This is why I love your stuff, great plot development and writing style! Keep dis shit up bruh! Till next time, Stay Cla$$y /)!

This. This is excellent writing my good sir/madam. A like and a fav.

Decent fic. Where is the AU tag, though?

I loves da feelz!!!:heart::twilightsmile::trollestia:

Defiantly a worthy excursion into "real fics". Great character depth, and the flashbacks helped to draw sympathy, while not being distracting to the flow.:scootangel:

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