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They expected an normal Nightmare Night, until they seeing a new mare in town.

This is a Fic for the Poniverse Nightmare Night Competition. It has nothing to do with my other Fics.

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Zodiacspear

Zodiacspear #1 · Oct 12th, 2014 · 1 · ·

I'll be honest in saying that this story feels rushed, it is also riddled with mechanical errors and misuse of words. That being said, the story is not all that bad. Fix the pacing issue and the mechanical errors and I'd say you have a good story on your hands.

Rising Shine

Rising Shine #2 · Oct 12th, 2014 · · ·

5130525 To be honest, that was a bit rushed. But thanks for the comment, when I find the time, I will rewrite it and try to erase all the problematic parts on it and try to make it longer and not rushed^^

But I also have to do my 2 big Fics to rewrite(And continue Fic 2) and with work, I barely have time.

But I appreciate every comment to bring me better in writing