cu·ri·os·i·ty
ˌkyo͝orēˈäsədē/
noun
1.
a strong desire to know or learn something.
"filled with curiosity, she peered through the window"
synonyms: interest, spirit of inquiry, inquisitiveness
"his evasiveness roused my curiosity"
2.
The name of a useless griffin cub.
Curiosity can't fly, she isn't athletic, and she hates hunting.
However, she does love to stray away from the pack.
During a class field trip to an ancient city's ruins, Curiosity falls through the floors of an old castle, and there, she meets a proud creature.
And as she listens to this broken and bruised creature's tales,
her curiosity over the beings that once occupied her home turns to defiance against her own people.
Chapters (3)
This is me leaning forward, with interest.
This is very good. Please continue while I watch...
With interest.
You have my interest...
Chapter two was already better than the first one which looks like you used it as a framework to fit in all of your initial idea. Not a bad thing in my mind as you can always look back on it to remember what exactly you wanted to write about :) You just might want to rewrite it a little when you have found your flow...
And could you slow the pace a little more in chapter three?
I'd really like a bit of background to Curiosity, she seems a character with great potential. Very likable.
Who put those gag and enchanted chains on Celestia when griffins don't know magic? Questions, questions.
Also: world building! Your idea of an arid Griffon Empire under a never setting sun is really original. I'd very much like to know more about it!
Your writing and style are easy on the eyes and there are no technical issues.
A good read so far, looking forward to more!
Wonder what ever happened to Discord... I can't imagine anyone besting him nor can I imagine him staying still for a millennium, and it seems impossible to destroy him.
5481914 I'm beginning to form the story a bit more in my head. Don't want to say anything too revealing, but it will definitely involve griffons stealing a well-known Equestrian weapon
Yes yes yes. Very nice! Good characterizations.
This is shaping up nicely; the story's pacing has arrived where it should be if you can keep it that way.
I approve
You have piqued my interest as well. I hope this wasn't abandoned....
+1 like
5674849 It wasn't abandoned, most of my stories are kind of on hiatus until I'm finished writing the first chapter of a novella.