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Just before leaving for her honeymoon, the newly-married Princess Cadance finds her old diary in her clothing dresser, filled with memories long forgotten, where she then recounts on those happy days as Twilight Sparkle's foalsitter. (Featured on EqD!)

Image credit goes to Bufko

First Published
23rd Apr 2012
Last Modified
1st Sep 2012
#1 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Tracking

#2 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Not bad, but in the second chapter you have Luna around when Twilight was a filly when she was still sealed away on the moon.

#4 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

One problem: Luna was still on the moon at this point. Is is pre-summer sun celebration. But this is good otherwise

#5 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

I like this, I like this a-lot.

#6 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

same as the others are saying luna was on the moon but other wise ok

#7 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

“She will be your foalsitter until the late hours of each day, Twilight. Luna and I are too busy to watch you after your studies

Really, is this a different twilight or is cadence gunna be babysitting twilight after the nightmare moon incident?

#8 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

:applecry: sooo. Much. CUTENESS! D'AAAAWWWWWW~

#9 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

In addition to the above comments pointing out that Luna was on the moon when Twilight was a foal, the flashbacks in the wedding episode showed Cadance babysitting Twilight before her cutie mark appeared; therefore, Twilight was not yet Celestia's student. But the concept and delivery are otherwise promising!

#10 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Aside from what others have said about the Luna thing, I am enjoying this immensely. Keep up the good work!

#11 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

My apologies to all about that Luna thing I missed, but trust me when I say that it will be the only time that it happens :scootangel:

#12 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

I like it so far, despite the discontinuity. Maybe you could ret-con it a bit and make this Twilight before she was accepted to the school. But your writing is very good, and I love the idea.

#13 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Other than the Luna thing, this looks like it's off to a promising start.  I'll be keeping an eye on it.

#14 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

If I knew how to track, I would.

#15 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

That was a very good story. Watching

Also like everyone else said.

#16 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Well at least it's not another Chrysalis one. . . I mean really, so many people are making fics of her and doing the over cliched "can she really love?" thing.

#17 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

There is just so much that I gusta about this story. Please continue.

However, one glaring mistake I see is that you have Twilight already being Celestia's student when Cadence foalsits her. Twilight lacked her mark in the flashbacks. If anything, that would be more heartwarming, since Cadence was already her best friend even when she was a regular unicorn. Just thought you'd know.

#18 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>489680

Guessing that the picture is meant for the abundance of Crysallis fics?    :twilightblush:

#19 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

This is so adorable!

#20 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>489721

this, though i'm still wondering what a princess is doing foalsitting some random filly then, this thought just does not want to leave me alone.

#21 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

I'm glad to see one on the interaction between Cadence and Filly Twi (because Filly Twi is best filly), as it's just adorkable how cute filly Twi is, and so far, you've done well capturing that sense of adorkable...ness...

#22 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>490060

This was never explained in the episode either, so...maybe Hasbro will reveal that secret later on? :twilightblush:

#23 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>490060

...because she's genuinely a nice pony, who also wants to connect to her future subjects? Also, it gets her closer to that hot stud of a brother Twilight has.

#25 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>489494 You can perhaps edit it out pretty please?:twilightsmile:

#26 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Looks promising.

#27 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

This story is too cute! :heart:

#28 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>490060

Well...Twilight's family lives in Canterlot, they all have astronomy-related cutie marks (even Shining Armor's shield comes with accompanying stars) which just might indicate nobility or at least "higher breeding" if the Grand Galloping Gala is anything to go by, her parents were able to get her into Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns, and her brother was obviously considered a good enough match for a princess. Taken together these aren't necessarily signs of her ever having been just "some random" filly...

#29 · 129w, 6d ago · · · Prologue ·

Hmmm, Doom likes the sound of this. I will mercifully allow you to continue...

#30 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Prologue ·

Hivemind... I would normally wait to the latest chapter to review but I do have a nitpick, Cadence wouldn't have cloven hooves, equines only have one toe per foot, and not split into two toes.

#31 · 129w, 3h ago · · · Prologue ·

"With a non-existent sense of urgency"

What? So she didn't feel a sense of urgency?

#32 · 127w, 4d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Oh I didn't notice you changed the chapters.

#33 · 127w, 4d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>589709

Story's going through a few mass revisions. Taking longer than I expected :unsuresweetie:

#34 · 126w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Ooh, I like it so far! It's sweet to read some tales about the foalsitting days between Twilight and Cadance! :twilightsmile: I'm looking forward to what's to come!

Admittedly though, Twilight DID have Cadance foalsit for her before she earned her cutie mark (which was when Celestia took her on as her student), but at the same time, it does fit! So no harm on that one. :3

#35 · 126w, 3d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

When does Twilight learn "sunshine-sunshine ladybugs awake?" And when does Cadence meet Shining Armor? Answer: Hopefully in future chapters!

(P.S: HHHHHRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGthisissocute!):yay:

#36 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Well worth tracking. Can't wait for more!

#37 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

:pinkiehappy: Confound these cutness:twilightsheepish: drives me to keep reading!:trollestia::trollestia::heart:

#38 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

I'm leaving her name 'Cadance' only because Hasbro calls her Cadance, not Cadence. :coolphoto:

#39 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>489494

I realize this will completely mess stuff up, but in the episode flashbacks twilight doesn't have her cutie mark which means twilight isn't celestia's student yet. This was all supposed to happen before her magic school exam/test.

Notice the lack of a cutie mark

#40 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Well, that's certainly worth a look.

This is looking like it could be a real joy to read!

#41 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>631461

You and the every other reader of this story.

Hasbro never explained when Cadance became Twilight's foalsitter. Was it during her time at the academy? After her time at the academy? Before her time at the academy? Who knows, because we don't. :pinkiehappy:

#42 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>631597

This says that cadance started being her foalsitter WHILE twilight was a student of celestia. She became a student of celestia AFTER she got her cutie mark as shown in The Cutie Mark Chronicles episode. Therefore in canon, cadance began to foalsit twilight either while or before the academy. In this fic she started to foalsit after the academy (when twilight was a student of celestia).:flutterrage:

#43 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

Hey, cool! This finally got up on EqD! Welcome to the club, bro!

#44 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>631671

So which one is it? While or before? :trollestia:

Also, I would find it very hard to believe that Twilight's parents had special royal connections when Twilight was a filly. :raritywink:

#45 · 126w, 1d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>632812

While I don't know if it was before or while, this fimfic says that it is after, which is impossible for reasons said in the previous comment.

Maybe Twilight's family was super rich or is friends with celestia? If they aren't, how would Twilight get into the academy in the first place if her family wasn't well-known for naturally being good at magic? I mean look at her brother!

Or we are completely over thinking this and the creators just forgot to give her a cutie mark:pinkiecrazy:

#46 · 126w, 1d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>635938

Simply put: Cadance is foalsitting Twilight while she is in the academy.

There. That's it. Now, be a good little reader and go...read something :twilightblush:

#47 · 126w, 1d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>635972:twilightangry2: but it says in here that twilight is a student DIRECTLY to celestia and that only happens after the academy, I realize it's too late to rewrite the first chapter to fit this so I'll let this go, but try not to mess anything else up, ok?:twilightsheepish:

#48 · 126w, 1d ago · · · Dear Diary... ·

>>635980

If it got past the pre-readers than you know that the setting fit. Cadance is going to foalsit Twilight each day when her studies with Celestia are over. That is what I'm going for, that is what the theme is going for, and it's working out so far. So, on those words, thanks for reading! :rainbowkiss:

#49 · 126w, 16h ago · · · Magical Dismastery ·

And what, pray tell, is a finger?

#50 · 126w, 16h ago · · · Magical Dismastery ·

"hundreds if not thousands of smaller, separate objects.”

I think you're overestimating the size of sand grains. It's probably more like millions.

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