For Centuries, the Autobots and Decepticons have been at war with each other for one reason: control of a third race of Transformers known as Minicons. A war which has now found it's way to the peaceful land of Equestria. Now, Optimus Prime and the Autobots must find the Minicons and defeat the Decepticons, while also protecting the citizens of Ponyville. However, they will soon discover, they don't have to fight this war alone.
Get Ready for a New Battle.
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Criticism is requested so that I can become better at this. This is my first fic, and I hope it won't be the last.
Please, do not be overly brutal with your criticism. I respect all opinions on my story, but if you say it's terrible in a thousand vulgar ways without giving a good reason as to why, it dosen't help me improve my skills as a writer. With that said, please enjoy the story!
Thanks for Reading!
-Rapture
The only complaint I have is that; every time a different character speaks, you should start a new paragraph.
Other than that, I enjoyed this taste.
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@Gyvon I tried that but it just didn't look right at first. But I'll give it a try next chapter.
Hmm, not sure what to say.
I think this is very nicely done and the story itself is told well and I will definitely follow this story to see where it goes.
Congrats, you have my attention.
I'm watching you.
I hope Hugh Jelly will battle Hot Shot
500088 Sir yes sir!
499597 Good start I expect to see more!
I will read this because I remember this series as a kid and I loved it.
This... shall be EPIC!
Try starting a new line for each new set of dialogue, might make conversations less bunched up. Also, I felt that more work was placed on the Transformers and the ponies were rushed to be finished. Otherwise, I hope to see more.
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Optimus: Greetings, I am Optimus Prime. These are my allies: Hot Shot and Red Alert.
Twilight: Hello, I'm Twilight Sparkle and these are my friends Rainbow Dash and Spike.
Hot Shot: And I thought our names were wierd.
Red Alert: Hot Shot...
Rainbow: What's that supposed to mean?!
Please write MOAR!
So far so good
Very good... I'm definitely favoriting this. And fresh from selection too. makes it more enjoyable when there's a brand new story on the way.
This was a good start for a chapter, I hope you put up a new one.
499597
how long will you continue writing the story?
I don't want this to be cancelled
Please upgradeā¬. 'Cause I like this story
I'm anxious to see more of this!