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Having returned to Canterlot for official purposes, Twilight and Spike grow increasingly ready to go back home to Ponyville. Yet, when Twilight recognizes signs of distress in the Sister Sovereigns, the princesses Celestia and Luna, her curiosity gets the better of her.
What she finds shows her more about her teacher than she could have dreamed...yet places her in tremendous danger...
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I am strongly disappointed that there isn't more of this incredible piece of fiction, good show sir, bravo indeed.
Initially read this on EqD some months ago, any plans for the implied sequel? Beautifully written, the only part I disagree with is the fact that Twilight is evidently important to helping solve this issue of who's marring the heart, they want her to be better prepared next time, yet they take away her memory of the event.
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Sorry to disappoint!
I'm very glad you enjoyed it, as it was my first Pony work. I'd like to think I've only improved...
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I'm very glad you read the work all of those months ago. Wow...eight already!
The entire body of my writing work rotates around the ideas I've presented here, so even though a direct sequel isn't in the work, more and more of what I've meant here can be seen in my most recent stories. We are eventually working towards the point where this work will make more sense. I hope that helps...
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Very well done, I too wish there was more of this story but I'll content myself to reading your other works.
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I certainly hope that you enjoy the other works. Though most are very different I hope you'll find the "echoes" of this story that resonate through most.
Aha. I read this after some of your other stories and so now I can already see some of the pieces ... if not fitting into place, at least coming into view. Very intriguing; I'll look out for more with eagerness.
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This story is the "foundation" of my personal fanon. I'm very glad you're intrigued by it! Thanks for being such a great Watcher!
Beautiful.
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This very nicely fills some holes in my own "fanon", I hope you don't mind me borrowing it as-is.
I look forward to reading more of your work (I came here through "Dear Idiot", oddly enough
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I would only be honored if you adopt parts of my fanon, and if you'd like any explanations of concepts let me know!
Utterly confused. Vague obscurity on purpose? Setup story for grander schemes at hoof? Secretly, it would mess with people if you tagged the story as "slice of life," implying that messed up stuff happens to twilight all the time. Anyhoo.... good back n' forth dialogue between Spike and TS, very good in helping me picture the scenes by providing color detail (some writers actually don't do that lol), and good job making Celestia seem like Mufasa with the deep talks. Big Con for me is the ending, because of something I can't discuss for spoiler reasons. But I could message it. (Don't worry, it's constructive criticism!)
Also, good job making something serious that isn't absurdly sad or heavily romantic.
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This story is the "backbone" of my personal fanon, so it is very obscure on purpose. I'm interested in any form of constructive criticism. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
Beautiful, very beautiful. I am reminded of Lovecraft, "Through the Gates of the Silver Key" in particular, with just a hint of "Dreams in the Witch-House" when it came to the attractive constellation.
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I was indeed trying for something akin to high-fantasy, though I can't claim any one source or inspiration. Thank you for taking the time to read and to leave such a insightful comment!
A very enjoyable read! It's always nice to see Spike have a responsibility higher than just tagging along or just for moral support.
Another thing I enjoy about stories such as this is the dialogue gives me the opportunity to know what they're expressing, but leaves the depth of the emotions open a bit to let me decide how in-depth I'd like them to be. I guess the best way to say it is that I can decide how serious the emotions can be so I can make it light-hearted or serious depending on how I'm feeling at the moment.
I did note a spelling error on the second chapter about half way down. "Spike peaking beside her."
It's nothing that takes away from reading the story, but it should be peeking instead.
Definitely a noteworthy story, keep it up!
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This was my first Pony fic, so I hope you cn tell me that I've grown a bit while in this fandom. I've never written for such a demanding yet encouraging fandom before!
Spike is awesome, and he switches around in my head with Celestia and Twilight as "best pony". I enjoy him as a character and find him easy to write for. I'm glad you enjoyed his narrative here.
I'm also glad that you find the narrative so easy to deal with and that it suits whatever mood you are feeling. Thanks for the grammar catch!
This just didn't entertain me like your other stories did. The idea is interesting and original enough, but I couldn't get myself into it. Phrasing was odd in places, and there were times where you used a wrong word. Also, I didn't particularly like all the stuttering.
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This was my first work in the FiM fandom, and it came after a break of writing fan-fiction of about two years and when I was writing historical fiction in hopes of being published. Yeah, it's a touch rough, but I'm glad I wrote it.
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Yeah, the first few tries are usually rough around the edges. Is a sequel going to be made sometime?
There are no words for the amount of win contained within this fic.
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Thank you so much!
Well, this is what I get for reading your work out of order!
Now I have to re-read everything to put the reference in perspective... Oh well, it just reading 
I love the groundwork you laid in this one for the rest of your fics and I hope that someday we will see the direct follow up to this.
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I'm glad that you found the groundwork interesting! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
ok this needs to be expanded on please tell me there either is or will be more..........
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That's always been one of my projects that I keep thinking about... so, stay tuned!
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"You can not…even begin to imagine by how far you missed your guess,"
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As boss a line as I've read. I literally had this image of a giant purple dragon stalking towards the darkness, fully ready to wreck some shit in the name of the Unicorn who was as a mother and friend to him.
This was a wonderful story.
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I loved that line when I thought of it, and I'm glad that you enjoyed it as well. Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
Good story, I liked the creation story you gave a peek at and am definitely curious about this heart thing, and the dangers that their father is seemingly protecting Equestria from. A sequel would definitely not go amiss. Loved the way you tied the beginning and the ending together too
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Yes, the story is ripe with possibility, and I've often mulled that idea. I can't help but be very vain about how you enjoyed the ending and beginning tying together, as such repetition of a theme is one of my personal hallmarks. Thanks so much!
Well, consider me intrigued. I want to know what this constellation means too. I can sympathize with the spying. I probably would have done the same.
I... Wow... That was impressive, to say the least. Well done so far.
Epic Spike was epic.
In any event, this was an absolutely fantastic story. I can see how this fits in with the rest of your stories and how this is the basis for the basic workings of them. However, that said, I would very much like to see the Gate again. There is a lot of potential for a grand adventure here, and that potential has my head spinning. I eagerly anticipate any direct sequels to this story. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
Well done, sir.
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You know, of course, that I having the attention of one of the best readers on this site has always been a big boost for me, and that you continue to enjoy my works means a lot to me CS.
Yes, it would be nice to see the Gate of Brass again, but there are other aspects of my fanon that need fleshing out first. Anything is possible in time though!
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One of the best readers? I dunno about that. But any praise from one of the best authors is more than welcome!
Other things need fleshing out first? I can accept that.
Oh come on. With such interesting summary and a strong starting chapter. WTH has only one person commented here? Hell you should have many more likes and comments in total! Should of been featured!
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What does it mean?
I... uh...
What is she doing?
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Hmmmmm.... I wonder if that's enough for me to express what I want...
Variable is linked to this, that much I know. What else is linked to this?
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Everything is linked to this... As a Mother, and Hello, from my Fever Dreams, all of my background. Needless to say, I'm gonna be watching any episode that explores the sister's history with baited breath.
You weren't entirely clear in your post... would you like a sequel or not?
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Reading the other stories, I'm starting to piece it together myself. Gonna need to read those Fever Dreams though!
I think there is a slight, 1000000000000000000000000000000000000000000% chance that I might like a sequel, though the other stories are kinda sequels kinda not
This story... This story is like the Ticket Master of your fanon (of course, on a much deeper and interesting level).
This story is a promise of a grand adventure and, like the Ticket Master, the references to it and the consistent way you develop your version of Equestria, is clearly visible in your other stories. I'm sure you probably grew tired of me saying so, but your head-canon is the most consistent I've seen yet, and for that I congratulate you. 
Having said that, I have to admit that I was clearly surprised that Celestia and Luna had parents in your fanon (and that there were other alicorns). It kinda reduces the godliness of the alicorn sisters slightly.
Either way, I do hope that you will one day write the equivalent of The Best Night Ever for your head-canon - that is to say the story which will further explore and wrap-up the idea you have introduced here.
In other words: MOAR!
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This story is indeed the "key" to my stories, but it's a very basic overview. It was just so much fun to write, putting character's from a little girl's cartoon through such a high fantasy setting.
I've actually seen the sisters as "gods". They are far too mortal and far too flawed for that... though they are incredibly learned, deeply ancient, and amazingly powerful. It seemed so "right" to me to have them be alone now... but having family that they love who await them.
I hope I get to write a story like that someday, too!
Having someone mention this in To Change A Heart, I realised I'd never read this one.
I think it shows it was your first, because it is a just smidgen rougher than some of your later stuff (which really just shows how much you've improved!), but it is still extremely excellent nontheless; and, as I commented in To Change, I love a good unexplained phenominon.
I would really like to see what you build on this one day, if you ever get that far. (I think Change is starting to fill a few of the blanks, though.)
Keep up the superlative work!
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This was my first Pony work, yes, and it certainly is a bit rougher. I had come to this fandom thinking that I had learned all that I needed to know from writing in other fandoms! Oh boy, was I wrong. This has been the largest, most demanding, and most rewarding fandom I've written for!
I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I certainly hope to "fill in some of the blanks" some day!
This REALLY needs a sequel. I enjoyed this very much.
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A lot of the concepts I advanced here are in other stories of mine, but they really show up in ToChange a Heart. Thanks for reading!
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my mind reels at the level of writing skill
this was awesome! I'm not sure which i'm going to read next but it's gonna be goooood
You should have added:
Spike: We're the worst spies in the world...
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Heh, that would have been good!