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The Descendant


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T

Poor Spike, all he wanted to do is spend time near the pony he adores. Now, because of one little lie, he's in real trouble. A geography bee, a macabre doppelgänger, and an icebox all play their part as Spike and Rarity once again find themselves on pins and needles...

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Comments ( 235 )

Hmmm...new story by the Descendant? Oh, this goes on the read later list for tonight.:rainbowkiss:

Right now, work time.:ajbemused:

FIRST!!!


EDIT: Second!

Dat... um... description? Yeah, it could use a rewrite. the "him her" part really just reads badly.
Okay, I'll shut up and read the story now. >.>

Remember, careful for you new scales
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That Spike is one sick mamma-jamma.

You... you bastard. A story this short and simple isn't supposed to bring me to the brink of tears. It's cruel, and unseemly, and evil, and I won't stand for it, and maybe I'll just read it again one more time. Or two. Or ten.
THIS is exactly the kind of character work I'm always trying to push for. *sigh*

TD, you magnificent bastard...
I read your story.
:raritycry:

Wow, that's great. You managed to make a nice story about the feelings Spike and Rarity has for each other by taking the canon and building on it, but it never felt as if you made stuff up to fit your story. My favourite part is the "who is that mare? bits that shows how undeserving Rarity felt.

*sees story* Yay, a new story by The Descendant!*hits fave* *proceeds to read*

Why in the name of Hitler's Monobollock is this not featured?

I don't even see why one person, let alone six, would thumbs this down.

This was beautiful. :raritycry:

1130240
This is TD's whole problem. His stories aren't eye-catching, the titles don't stand out, and the descriptions seem generic. Instead his stories are emotionally gripping, the titles perfectly fit the actual stories and he's just a generally great writer - but you only find that out when you read them. Sadly, stories are posted to the site faster than they can be read, so only the ones that seem to stand out from the crowd from summary alone gets much attention. And therefore Scootaloo Is Slightly Flame Retardant ends up in the feature box and this does not.

1130333 I'll be honest, I can't even remember why I looked at it in the first place, only that it's awesome

1129825
Work! Bah! Disregard work, acquire Pony stories!

I hope you enjoy it when you find the time to read!:twilightsmile:

1129828
When you consider how vast the galaxy is and how immense the scope of time, you were pretty damn close to being first!:raritywink:


1129884>>1129979>>1130111
Damn! Grammar error! Damn, damn, damn.

Description was changed... I dare suggest it's the reason for the instantaneous "six derrière" salute.

If I have to be a bastard, I'm glad it's a magnificent one!:pinkiesmile:


1129991
I'm very glad that you do, sir.:ajsmug:


1130148
Yes, trying to put the whole relationship as we see it in canon into context was the whole point of the story, and I'm glad that came through!:twilightsheepish:


1130195
Heh, thank you so much!:pinkiesmile:


1130240
Because the world is a cruel, unhappy place? That and the original description sucked. Anywho, I'm glad you enjoyed it!:pinkiehappy:


1130302
My guess was that the original description turned them off. I'm glad that you enjoyed it though!:twilightsmile:


1130314
Thanks!:pinkiehappy:

going to read it... but packing first!

So adorable. I've always felt for Spike with his little crush...and I never saw that coming with the "'I'm stuck'". Way to go, pal. :moustache:

Good story, as well as a nice exploration of Rarity's growth as a character through the series.

1130547
Packing? Moving or vacationing? Business, pleasure, or cross-border flight from the law? In any case, I look forward to your thoughts when you have a chance!:pinkiesmile:

1130624
Thanks so much! I really appreciate it!:twilightsmile:

1130664
I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. Yeah, I liked that little scene too! Tnanks for taking the time to read and comment!:twilightsmile:

1130676
Thank you! I'm very glad that the examination of Rarity's growth came through for you! Thanks for leaving a reply!:twilightsheepish:

Dawwww, a true work of art with giggles thrown in but so perfectly placed that they did not disturb the mood.

I was worried when Twilight came over playing with the "skin puppet" she had broken her brain like that time she was late for her report.
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also I think his skin puppet is cool!

Gah, I hate allergy season...yeah, allergies. That's why my eyes are a little watery.

...*sniff*

Beautiful work, sir. I have yet to read a piece as heartwarming as this one. :twilightsmile:

DF

This was beautiful. You've brought me damn near to tears for the last half of this chapter, and I've only cried over stories... three? I think three times before. I can only remember the name of one, and it's the one that makes just about everyone cry.

A wonderful peek into Rarity's head as well.

I love this. I can't understand where all those thumbs down came from.

"she chocked as her body deflated" "chocked" should be "choked"

Salud.

That was beautiful. :twilightblush::raritystarry::moustache:

The skin puppet, however, needs to be launched into the sun, assuming Celestia will have it. I'm relatively confident that Twi can launch it with enough escape velocity to get it there.

Alright, this is now my favourite Sparity fic. Congratulations.

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>> Waffley
When you consider how vast the galaxy is and how immense the scope of time, you were pretty damn close to being first! :raritywink:

Nice counter-troll sir, I'm one of many who most assuredly hate it when people just post such dimwitted horseapples such as that.

1129828 In smallest dick contest, we know :ajsmug:

Ergh, that scene with the pins made my back tingle. Well done as usual, TD.

Ah, Spike. DeviantART would love to have you. And ouch... This reminds me of the time I sat on crapload of nails while on a construction job. I had on jeans, so no permanent damage. It still hurt though. Great job here, just one thing that I'm not sure of. When Rarity calls Sweetie Belle dearest, and Spike darling, should they be capitalized? I have no idea.

1130333 I see a flaw in your argument: it assumes that there are people who don't already follow him and don't know to drop everything else as soon as the notification arrives telling of a new story of his. Such a world seems extremely unlikely, and, since it would mean people would be deprived of the joy of reading stories like this, would not be a happy place.

1130624 to the sun :trollestia: we ran out of room on the moon

Man, this story has more character development than a word count this low has the right to have. Seriously, you've got the power to move us with words - those monologues, especially the last, bring more life to the story than I could ever imagine.

Have five hearts out of four and something special:
:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:
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1130715
Cross-country escape from the law sounds more fun, eh?:raritywink:

1130781
Heh, I'm glad that there was "just enough" humor! I'm proud of Twi's scene there, too! Thanks so much for reading and commenting!:twilightsmile:

1130791
Thanks again!:pinkiesmile:

1130894
*Hands a tissue.*
Thank you so much! I'm very glad that I was able to write something that was heartwarming!:twilightsheepish:

1130897
I'm very glad that you found the work so beautiful. I guess the down-votes came based on the original description... which was pretty bad. Thanks for the grammar catch!:pinkiehappy:

1130972
Heh, I almost had Spike give it a name! Glad you enjoyed it!:twilightsmile:

1131085
That is quite the compliment! Thank you so much!:pinkiesmile:

1131113
It means a lot to me that you've acquired this as part of your personal canon. Thanks so much!:twilightsmile:

1131517
Thanks al, you know I appreciate that!:pinkiesmile:

1131566
I was wondering about that. The way it was explained is that at the time she's using it, it becomes their nicknames, so therefore proper nouns. When she's using them as descriptors, such as "my dearest" or "a darling", then they are adjectives. Anywho, if I'm wrong I'll change it when the grammar police come!

Ouch about the nails! Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment!:twilightsmile:

1131580
You guys are making me blush!:twilightblush:

1131719
Oh wow, thank you so much for the compliment! A Rarity applaud and everything! I really appreciate that you think that the monologues came through, as I was worried about them!

I appreciate the compliments! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!:twilightsmile:

....Condescending Spike's shed scales statue?

Damn you adding more to my read later list. I swear, I really don't have the time for this.
(I say that with all possible love :3)

Aww, sweetness.:twilightsmile: No errors I could find, except for the dearest/darling thing, which I'm still unsure about.

Coming to grips with her own feelings, written amazingly well. Spike felt real, and I just... how he... yeah. Emotions everywhere. Real and relatable, done very smoothly.
You've managed to move Rarity up higher on my list of favorite ponies.

1130333
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very good TD ! thanks that you uploaded it in one piece ! 4 AM here, and i'm happy that i took the time to read this story.

Very nice! I love how you are able to build upon what we see in the show, without having to resort to outrageous exposition. These guided tours of Rarity's heart show the depths of feeling, the fact that she knows she was a bit on the shallow side and how she felt ... unsure of herself and her role in life and how much she is striving to become the mare that Spike sees.:raritywink:

Also adorkable Twilight is adorkable! :facehoof: Seriously, having Twilight try to use the fake Spike to ease the tension is classic!

One little nitpick:
Twilight stood standing in the doorway as Spike and Rarity embraced one another,
Might want to fix that soon, it is too tender of a moment to be marred by such a small mistake.

Yayness, a happy ending. I've enjoyed this immensely, now just two small things.

"She wondered if she'd even recognize herself from Twilight's fist slumber party of two years ago."

Should be first instead of fist...

"Therefore I've told the truth to that fine young man out there."

Do ponies even have that word in their vocabulary? I've got no clue...

Like I said, I've enjoyed this immensely, and I can't wait for your next story!:twilightsmile:

Only one criticism, it's 'her beck and call', not 'her beckon call'.

Nope, don't gotta say a thing.

-Delta-

Insurmountably brilliant, sir. I got chills as I read this. How perfectly you capture the intricate emotional ballet between Rarity and Spike. Bravo!

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Say that three times fast while being poked with a sharp stick!:raritywink:

I'm very glad that the emotions came through for you, as that appears to be one of my strengths. Thank you, as always, for reading and commenting!:twilightsmile:

1132084
Dude I will drive to your home/place of employment and do your work/chores for you if you'll spend that time reading the story! You know how much I love your comments!:pinkiehappy:

1132143
Excellent!:pinkiesmile:

1132354
I'm glad you took the time to read it... now get some sleep!:rainbowlaugh:

1132627
Ah! I must have "derped" it... :rainbowderp:

1132623
Thanks for the catch! I don't know about the second... doesn't Twilight call the Crusaders "girls" at one point? Anywho, thank you so much for reading!:pinkiehappy:

1132652
You can say how awesome my beard... wait, deja vu!:pinkiegasp:

1132797
Heh, don't get chilly on my account! I'm glad that it was emotionally moving for you, and thanks again for reading and faving!:twilightsheepish:

Wow... I'm actually not a Sparity fan... but this makes sense somehow and this last chapter was phenomenal! :pinkiesmile:

1133088 Yes, she has refered to the crusaders and the rest of the Mane six as girls before, so I'm pretty sure girl and boy exist in their vocabulary, but I'm not so sure about man. I always just use stallion, or colt. One might argue that Rarity wouldn't use stallion or colt for Spike, as he is a dragon, but I think she may, since it's just what's she's used to saying. Spike probably wouldn't know the difference either, as he was raised by ponies, and probably has similar thoughts to ponies.

oh p.s.

There was even a certain owner and operator of a noted doughnut shop in Canterlot who frequently referred to her as “a smart cookie”.

I see what you did there... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png

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